Akamatsuverse GWH Kei: Great White Hunter Keitaro

Terdwilicker

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#26
Kaolla Su, as 2nd princess, is obligated to provide 2 heirs to the throne in the event that something happens to her older sister and her husband, the crown prince. Monarchies have their strength in bloodlines. Selective breeding for Su's intelligence has clearly worked. Think about all the crazy stuff she's built in a very short time. An indestructible king with her intelligence and his kindness would lead to a golden age, even if he's only working from the background. Money and help raising a baby isn't even an issue for her. She's got the whole staff behind that.

Besides being sperm donor, a consort is a last line of defense protecting her from danger. His immortality makes him an excellent human shield. The incident with the bear also indicates he's got Haruka and Seta's instinctive shooting ability. You might not know this, but the best way to take down a charging bear is break its shoulder or hip to slow it down, then put the second round into its nose. If you aim for the nose and miss, you hit the head, lungs, heart, or spine, all of which are fatal hits. Charging great bears are rare though. Its mostly Black Bears that hunt people. The interview was basically to determine if he was an acceptable father for their grandchildren or someone they should forbid her from seeing. I'm sure lots of fathers would like to exercise the veto option in so literal a way.

Legally, he's less than a husband, more of an allowed concubine, just a male version. This still leaves her open to marry him or someone else, which will have higher requirements and committment. More than he'd be willing to do, even for Kaolla. As it is, he's got access to the royal treasury within reason, and the official exclusive right to the Turtle Culture ruins, which is an entire career right there. If he sticks with it, he's going to be in Molmol a lot of the time, rather than in Hinata. Haruka and Seta will be with him too. Keep in mind a find smaller that those ruins is an entire career. There are smaller lost civilization ruins around the world which occupied teams for decades researching, documenting, cataloging. If he gets tired of it, he can find the other outposts of the culture in the Pacific. If you've never done fieldwork, its exhausting and very satisfying at the same time. If you can do it with a spouse, the location and the energy can be transcendant. If your spouse stays, you end up with marital problems because field work gets you horny, and most researchers can't keep it in their pants, of either sex. So, its good that Keitaro will have Kitsune with him if Kaolla is busy. Now, to write up how Kitsune comes to terms with their unusual arrangement....
 

Terdwilicker

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#27
Further additions are being made. I'm working on Chapter 13 today. I expect to have it ready for posting this afternoon. The plot is getting closer to conclusion.

And if nothing gets done with Great Baker Keitaro, I may want to take that over myself. :)
 

Terdwilicker

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#28
Alrighty, Chapter 13 is up. More angsty fun to be had.

14... that one will be funny in unexpected ways.
 

Terdwilicker

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#29
And chapter 14 is up. Very short, but still funny because it's based on reality. Was your 1st time this awkward?
 

toraneko

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#30
Terdwilicker said:
Kaolla Su, as 2nd princess, is obligated to provide 2 heirs to the throne in the event that something happens to her older sister and her husband, the crown prince. Monarchies have their strength in bloodlines. Selective breeding for Su's intelligence has clearly worked. Think about all the crazy stuff she's built in a very short time. An indestructible king with her intelligence and his kindness would lead to a golden age, even if he's only working from the background. Money and help raising a baby isn't even an issue for her. She's got the whole staff behind that.
I was thinking that the council (or was it a parliament?) had the idea in their heads, that if they had Keitaro's genes in the bloodline, they could stop worrying about losing dynastic heirs due to the rites of passage and mandatory military service. Is that about right?

Hmm. That may spell difficulty in the future of Molmol. There's little more likely to spawn a rebellion effort than a dynasty of leaders who can't be taken down the old-fashioned way.

Besides being sperm donor, a consort is a last line of defense protecting her from danger. His immortality makes him an excellent human shield. The incident with the bear also indicates he's got Haruka and Seta's instinctive shooting ability.
I'm surprised I hadn't thought of that angle. Very good points.

(snip, nice tip by the way. Have to relay it to my sister in Colorado.)

The interview was basically to determine if he was an acceptable father for their grandchildren or someone they should forbid her from seeing. I'm sure lots of fathers would like to exercise the veto option in so literal a way.
Then again, few fathers have a royal family's ability to back up a claim of, "If you disappoint my precious little girl in any way, I will hunt you down to the ends of the earth and erase you from it."

So, its good that Keitaro will have Kitsune with him if Kaolla is busy. Now, to write up how Kitsune comes to terms with their unusual arrangement...
Oh, that's easy. My highschool Latin teacher went on several digs, and according to him, it's standard practice to bring truckloads of beer on a dig. Reason being, it's hot and sweaty work, and beer slakes the thirst better than water alone.

I can definitely agree with the work spurring the libido. Basically, anything physically exerting causes the body to produce testosterone. Testosterone is the main hormone that signals the body to raise the libido (in both men and women).
This can be easily observed in real life. Women (and men) with physically active lifestyles are more inclined to be sexually active as well.
 

runestar

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#31
And chapter 14 is up. Very short, but still funny because it's based on reality. Was your 1st time this awkward?
Hmm, a most awkward way of bumping Naru out of the picture indeed. I won't know, since I haven't had my first time yet. -_-

they could stop worrying about losing dynastic heirs due to the rites of passage and mandatory military service. Is that about right?
Seems to me that the decision to carry on with the implementation of the rites does not look like a very wise decision, considering the (implied) high mortality rate. Now, with Keitaro's immortality in the equation, it would just make a mockery of the rites, when the participant can heal from even the most dangerous deathtraps.

It reminds me of some ritual in another country, where the people gather once a year to "stone the devil" by hurling rocks at an imaginery "devil". As to this day, quite a number of people have been killed, which technically puts the current score at Devil:X, Humans:0, where X is the number of people killed so far. :rolleyes:
 

Israfel

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#32
It reminds me of some ritual in another country, where the people gather once a year to "stone the devil" by hurling rocks at an imaginery "devil". As to this day, quite a number of people have been killed, which technically puts the current score at Devil:X, Humans:0, where X is the number of people killed so far.?
Yha, that's part of the Muslim main holiday Hajj where they must make a pilgramage to Mecca during it at least once in their lifetimes. The 'Stoning of the Devil' is one of the most famous an d most dangerous rituals during which several people have died, so yes, the devil is currently one-upping everyone else as far as that goes.
 

Terdwilicker

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#33
The rites of courage in Molmol guarantee that anyone who wants to guide the country have the courage of their convictions. It keeps idiots and cowards from running the country. *ahem* Some authors have their make believe countries run by people who have military service, which unfortunately makes for dictatorships because you can brainwash everyone in basic training. I think there's a lot to be said for requiring people who want a vote an obstacle that requires serious personal risk to life and limb. Heinlein's novel "Starship Troopers" (not the movie, the book) is mostly about the pros and cons of democracy which requires real committment just to get the right to vote. Anybody can live without that right, but if you risk your life in service of your country, that provides literal proof.

It doesn't mock the process entirely. After all, his immortality may not be inheritable. And you still have to kill the lion or tame the beast in single combat. That takes courage. And since Keitaro nearly died in the lion attack, he certainly showed real courage. Saving the princess from the bear drove the point home. Keitaro has always had a lot of heart. Its hard not to respond positively to that.

Btw, did anyone happen to notice that Amalla isn't pregnant and has no kids of her own despite her marriage to the crown prince? How embarrassing. Goodness, but there must be a lot of pressure on her to provide heirs to the throne. And isn't it interesting that Keitaro bears a stunning resemblance to the crown prince? Why, they've been mistaken for one another at times. And Keitaro seems to have already knocked up Kaolla. I wonder what thoughts might be going through the two sisters' heads? And their parents as well. Keitaro could resolve certain... issues within the royal family while maintaining appearances. Would he even know what he was doing if the event occurred one dark night in the palace and he's half asleep?
 

runestar

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#34
It doesn't mock the process entirely. After all, his immortality may not be inheritable.
That would suck then, wouldn't it, seeing as to how the council's decision seem to revolve around the assumption that Keitaro's immortality was hereditary to some extent. And I would pity their child too, if he will be pressured by society to live up to impossible standards because of his parentage(which by that time would be no small secret). Can't ever see Su condoning it...

Why, they've been mistaken for one another at times. And Keitaro seems to have already knocked up Kaolla. I wonder what thoughts might be going through the two sisters' heads?
You don't say...Amalla and Keitaro could be having sex with each other and no one, not even the palace security would be any wiser.... :evil: Sounds like some hare-brained scheme the council might come up with if Amalla still doesn't get pregnant soon... :sweat:

Why do I have a feeling this saga is far from over...? :ph43r:
 

Terdwilicker

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#35
No, it has an end, but I want to leave the reader with the impression that Keitaro's life doesn't come down to a simple pat ending. He's not a Salaryman and one shouldn't come to the conclusion he'll suddenly become one just because he got laid and found a gf who puts out. He's doomed to an interesting life. This story ends in Chapter 15, the next chapter. I will be writing it today, starting soon. I tend to drop into a trance when I write so I have to get done with the daily chores first otherwise I'll find its dark out and wonder where the day went.
 

runestar

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#36
I tend to drop into a trance when I write so I have to get done with the daily chores first otherwise I'll find its dark out and wonder where the day went.
You know, some people would actually see that as some sort of super-power... :p
 

Terdwilicker

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#37
No-no. My super power is it rains when I go on vacation. This wouldn't be that noteworthy except I live in a state where it's desert for half the year so a trip to the desert can result in abnormal weather.
 

Terdwilicker

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#38
Writing the final chapter of GWH:K is coming along fine. I'm making good progress. It will be longer, to make up for the shortness of chapter 14. That one was meant to be short, btw. It closes that part of his life so he can move on to the next one and his future.

I should have it done later this afternoon or early evening, I think. There will be some epilogues and probably one-shots as well, as followups much later.
 

Terdwilicker

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#39
Final chapter, #15, is done and up. I have some epilogues and one shots to tack on later, perhaps as standalones, but the story is basically done. Hope everyone likes it. I put a lot of thought into it, including the loose ends. Those are intentional.
 

Terdwilicker

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#40
Epilogue teasers tacked on. It was fun writing this, the teasers especially. They're like omakes to fertility.
 

EagleCeres

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#41
Looks like in the end all of them got a little of what they wanted. :rofl:

ôBut I've neverà I didn't... how?ö sputtered Naru.
ôYoung lady. Surely you're not claiming to be the Virgin Mary?ö she asked, pointing at Naru's Christian cross around her neck.
who knew Kei would be so... determined :snigger:

Great job. :yay:
 

runestar

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#43
Heh, no Kanako? :D

Loved the epilogue, looks like Keitaro still found a way to leave his legacy on the other girls even though he didn't choose them after all. :snigger:

I realise that you are deliberately leaving it open ended so that people can imagine whatever ending they want, but do you plan to ever have Keitaro find out about his other offspring? Does this mean the other girls will not be getting married anytime soon? Wonder what effect this will have if some enterprising reporter uncovers the common link connecting all the girls and their children and makes it public.... :evil:
 

Terdwilicker

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#44
There are no reporters that enterprising. Yes, there may be oneshots, later. I haven't written them yet. I thought up Motoko having twins at the last minute, remembering the scene in "Twins" "Daddy is a real sex machine" they say. Heh.

Cmon, when you think about it they were all TRYING to get pregnant so they could claim him first. Is that wrong? Maybe, but its a simple and common fact of life. Besides, it was deeply funny to add those omakes.
 

Lufio

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#45
Terdwilicker said:
Besides, it was deeply funny to add those omakes.
And we appreciate that fact very much. I look forward to the stand-alones you'll be writing. That epilogue was a very compelling preview.
 

Terdwilicker

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#46
Considering just how many kids there are, it would almost be worth it doing a sequel, particularly once Granny Hina finds out. That's exactly the sort of thing she'd like to meddle in.
 
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