Leave of Absence
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That she did; the details of said bond shall be coming soon. As for an insane BoD... *shifty eyes*
Oh, it most certainly will cause issues. And not all of them are going to be fun and games.
As for the three-way relationship... I've made comments in the Relationship Ideas thread about how those ought to work. You'll have to wait and see whether or not Zwei ends up with a sister named Drei.
I plan on writing out the entire dialogue at some point, so the exact amount may change. However I will be able to tell you that it had more to do with the who and how rather than the monetary value.
...She did end up owing a sizable sum though. XD
Oh, it most certainly will cause issues. And not all of them are going to be fun and games.
As for the three-way relationship... I've made comments in the Relationship Ideas thread about how those ought to work. You'll have to wait and see whether or not Zwei ends up with a sister named Drei.
I plan on writing out the entire dialogue at some point, so the exact amount may change. However I will be able to tell you that it had more to do with the who and how rather than the monetary value.
...She did end up owing a sizable sum though. XD
What if this scene were deferred until later, when Yuuno (and/or Hayate) are informing Reinforce about how they got together?
Then you can either present the scene in the form of a flashback, or have one character relating the experience with Reinforce providing dialogue in the form of clarifying questions or interjected opinions.
It might be a matter of personal style, but I think characters actually talking and interacting with each other in "real time" might be more engaging than a Narrator's Info-Dump.
Then you can either present the scene in the form of a flashback, or have one character relating the experience with Reinforce providing dialogue in the form of clarifying questions or interjected opinions.
It might be a matter of personal style, but I think characters actually talking and interacting with each other in "real time" might be more engaging than a Narrator's Info-Dump.
I had considered writing out the entire scene right there or relegating it to an extra later on. I chose not to do the former because of time constraints and it didn't really seem to fit the chapter's mood. And the latter has simply yet to happen.
If you think it would be better to be removed in it's entirety and set up for later or reworked into a proper scene for this chapter, I'm all ears. All of these chapters are Alpha. They've not been Beta'd in the slightest. And I am not above reposting and re-linking.
And I do agree, talking and engaging in conversation is a lot better than infodump. I'm stuck with trying to not let this thing flounder and finding the time to actually sit and write these interactions. So right now... conversation ends up taking a hit. Writing out a good, detailed conversation is something I need a large block of uninterrupted time to do. Said time is something I rarely get due to many reasons... T_T
If you think it would be better to be removed in it's entirety and set up for later or reworked into a proper scene for this chapter, I'm all ears. All of these chapters are Alpha. They've not been Beta'd in the slightest. And I am not above reposting and re-linking.
And I do agree, talking and engaging in conversation is a lot better than infodump. I'm stuck with trying to not let this thing flounder and finding the time to actually sit and write these interactions. So right now... conversation ends up taking a hit. Writing out a good, detailed conversation is something I need a large block of uninterrupted time to do. Said time is something I rarely get due to many reasons... T_T
This sounds interesting, actually. How about interspecting small flashbacks with whoever it is that's explaining? Not to mention, just one scene like that won't show much. Having multiple scenes provide a much better context, me think.
Like say, Yuuno handing Hayate whatever report she needs without her asking, or Hayate finishing Yuuno's sentence in her own way.
Like say, Yuuno handing Hayate whatever report she needs without her asking, or Hayate finishing Yuuno's sentence in her own way.
Well, I'd definitely rather have something than nothing. So even if it could be better, it's not bad.
Certainly, the best thing would be if the courtship itself were covered in a prequel story that this story would follow after, thus needing neither infodumps or flashbacks, but I understand your constraints.
Thanks for doing the best you can!
Certainly, the best thing would be if the courtship itself were covered in a prequel story that this story would follow after, thus needing neither infodumps or flashbacks, but I understand your constraints.
Thanks for doing the best you can!
One might be surprised~
I think it has to do with it requiring a really well-written and detailed account that might as well be a story in and of itself. When the non-standard relationship isn't really the focus of the story... it becomes a rather daunting task to include it properly and could threaten to overwhelm the rest of the work.
A prequel might do it best. But I have an idea that might work towards showing it in-story. It will be... painful and unpleasant for Yuuno; but he's dating Hayate, so he can handle a little author-ire.
And thanks for your support everyone. =)
I think it has to do with it requiring a really well-written and detailed account that might as well be a story in and of itself. When the non-standard relationship isn't really the focus of the story... it becomes a rather daunting task to include it properly and could threaten to overwhelm the rest of the work.
A prequel might do it best. But I have an idea that might work towards showing it in-story. It will be... painful and unpleasant for Yuuno; but he's dating Hayate, so he can handle a little author-ire.
And thanks for your support everyone. =)