Ranma ½ Magic within Chap 9+

Darkforce222

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Muramasa said:
Instead, she comes off as the big bad who's forced Ranma into the situation he's in right now and effectively taking the blame for everything... which is also not entirely true.
Yeah, there's really a 50/50 chance she portrayed herself as this on purpose. Tough love is how Eva rolls. It's pretty interesting in any case. She might be aware that one way or another Ranma needs this confrontation to happen, he's pretty much falling apart mentally right now.

...Or she could just be being a jerk. That's also how she rolls.

Nice to see Ku getting involved, though. She's kinda been skirting around the edges of the plot for awhile now(and seems to know/suspect about Ranma's double-identity at least).

EDIT: Yeah, the main complication with the split subplot is it kind of leaves Ranma totally out of things. It's definitely something to keep in mind for much later, though, as it's still an interesting plotline.

DOUBLE EDIT: Also holy crap this story is alive again. Hooray!
 

Dumbledork

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Sorry for not reviewing earlier; I had to reread the whole story first. I'm really happy to see an update and I'm actually glad that you dropped the split bodies plot. Would probably have complicated the story. I think the curse should remain a secret for a while longer.

Ranma should keep the artefact, but maybe Eva could put some kind of limiter on it so that Ranma can't abuse it.
 

Sect

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Dumbledork said:
Ranma should keep the artefact, but maybe Eva could put some kind of limiter on it so that Ranma can't abuse it.
A 2:1 ratio thing, maybe? For every second he uses it, it needs to rest twice that amount of time? For one hour of use, it rests for two, and so on and so forth...
 
Sect said:
Dumbledork said:
Ranma should keep the artefact, but maybe Eva could put some kind of limiter on it so that Ranma can't abuse it.
A 2:1 ratio thing, maybe? For every second he uses it, it needs to rest twice that amount of time? For one hour of use, it rests for two, and so on and so forth...
It already has a time limit. Besides a 2:1 ratio would make it mostly useless. That means it can only be used for 8 hours a day, not enough time to go through a whole school day. Just make him go cold turkey for a while; just long enough to reintegrate his personalities. Meanwhile, he's incurred a debt to Eva for messing up her plan. I expect while he's working that off she'll be sure there are "Humilations Galore," so that Ranma will always remember why we don't abuse magical artifacts.
 

Sect

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dreiddel said:
Sect said:
Dumbledork said:
Ranma should keep the artefact, but maybe Eva could put some kind of limiter on it so that Ranma can't abuse it.
A 2:1 ratio thing, maybe? For every second he uses it, it needs to rest twice that amount of time? For one hour of use, it rests for two, and so on and so forth...
It already has a time limit. Besides a 2:1 ratio would make it mostly useless. That means it can only be used for 8 hours a day, not enough time to go through a whole school day. Just make him go cold turkey for a while; just long enough to reintegrate his personalities. Meanwhile, he's incurred a debt to Eva for messing up her plan. I expect while he's working that off she'll be sure there are "Humilations Galore," so that Ranma will always remember why we don't abuse magical artifacts.
Ah, I forgot it already had a time limit.

EDIT: Wait, wasn't part of the problem that Ranma was using it so his clone would go to school?
 

Dumbledork

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Looks to me like the necklace is kind of a drug. Ranma seems to have got addicted to it.
 

Ryogas_BF

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Sect said:
dreiddel said:
Sect said:
Dumbledork said:
Ranma should keep the artefact, but maybe Eva could put some kind of limiter on it so that Ranma can't abuse it.
A 2:1 ratio thing, maybe? For every second he uses it, it needs to rest twice that amount of time? For one hour of use, it rests for two, and so on and so forth...
It already has a time limit. Besides a 2:1 ratio would make it mostly useless. That means it can only be used for 8 hours a day, not enough time to go through a whole school day. Just make him go cold turkey for a while; just long enough to reintegrate his personalities. Meanwhile, he's incurred a debt to Eva for messing up her plan. I expect while he's working that off she'll be sure there are "Humilations Galore," so that Ranma will always remember why we don't abuse magical artifacts.
Ah, I forgot it already had a time limit.

EDIT: Wait, wasn't part of the problem that Ranma was using it so his clone would go to school?
Sect- he occasionally used it for frivolous reasons like that. I used that early for more of a humor thing of abusing his artifact, the second time was to have some alone time after being on constant surveillance when he's not used to so much company... but overall that's not a regular occurrence.But most of the time he goes to class as himself. He only used the clone so much through the story because of the increased amount of interaction with people.

when this arc is finished much of the major cast of the fic will know about the curse and thus he won't be pressuring himself as much... though thats not to say this arc isn't having consequences.

several people- The split idea is likely still coming just later down the line when class isn't as much of an issue. Once that's out of the way it will be easier to have both Saotome's about and doing things without Ranma being pushed to the side since they can't have two rankos in class. I have also debated on a different form for 'Ranko', Ie not just Ranma's female form. I'm working out the details as I go but it's not complete scrapped... just shelved to a more convenient time.

Muramasa, Darkforce, etc - On the subject of Eva Dark is correct in his assumption that Eva is purposely taking the blame. Eva and Ranma are close in this story, they bicker and butt heads but I'm really setting them up as a very familial/sibling type vibe. Eva is taking the brunt here so that Ranma has more of a chance to salvage things with his friends... she's still gonna beat the stupid out of him in the next sparing session for causing all this trouble but that is neither here nor there.

armedlord - I know, it's one of my bad habits I'm still trying to fix 6-_-
 

Hawk

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I really need to reread this, but I'm personally glad that the split isn't occurring (at least at this time). I just think it needlessly complicated the situation.
 

Ryogas_BF

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Notice!

I am not dead

that is all... Just kidding.

anyway, I may have been quiet lately but I have recently dusted my fanfiction folder off and been skimming through it again. Magic within Stalled out because I wrote myself into a corner. It may not be obvious to you all but to me I was stuck. It mostly revolved around the semi splitting of Ranma and Ranko and they're "disagreement" due to guilty conscience. I didn't really like how convoluted I let it become and the leaps of logic I had to make...

So I recently have been rereading trying to find a way out of this twisted plot and I think i found it... I'm in the process of rewriting chapter 10. It should clean things up and make it an easier transition to the big battle. I'll likely put it up in the thread but some parts will be just like they were so it might be a little odd to read for everyone... also not sure how the people that read it on Fanfiction.net would be effected and such. anyway this thread should have some content coming... sorry for the wait.
 

Hawk

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Ryogas_BF said:
Notice!

I am not dead
This alone is amazing news. I wouldn't worry too much about a rewrite being troublesome to read, doubt people remember it well after so long, I certainly would have to reread anyways. So if you feel you should take a different direction scrap as far back as you need and take that different direction.
 

PCHeintz72

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inverted helix said:
Ryogas_BF said:
Notice!

I am not dead
This alone is amazing news. I wouldn't worry too much about a rewrite being troublesome to read, doubt people remember it well after so long, I certainly would have to reread anyways. So if you feel you should take a different direction scrap as far back as you need and take that different direction.
...


I remember stories I've read years ago... this has not been near that long.

In any case, would not mind seeing this continued...
 

Hawk

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PCHeintz72 said:
inverted helix said:
Ryogas_BF said:
Notice!

I am not dead
This alone is amazing news. I wouldn't worry too much about a rewrite being troublesome to read, doubt people remember it well after so long, I certainly would have to reread anyways. So if you feel you should take a different direction scrap as far back as you need and take that different direction.
...


I remember stories I've read years ago... this has not been near that long.

In any case, would not mind seeing this continued...
You're an AI, that's an unfair comparison!

That being said I do remember the major points of this story, but not the finer details.
 

PCHeintz72

The Sentient Fanfic Search Engine mk II
inverted helix said:
PCHeintz72 said:
inverted helix said:
Ryogas_BF said:
Notice!

I am not dead
This alone is amazing news. I wouldn't worry too much about a rewrite being troublesome to read, doubt people remember it well after so long, I certainly would have to reread anyways. So if you feel you should take a different direction scrap as far back as you need and take that different direction.
...


I remember stories I've read years ago... this has not been near that long.

In any case, would not mind seeing this continued...
You're an AI, that's an unfair comparison!

That being said I do remember the major points of this story, but not the finer details.
I am? News to me.

Or have I been Kidnapped by Google again? happened once before if you believe Fukufics...

EDIT:They had two versions of the story... still have them.
 

Muramasa

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Would it be wrong to say I'd like to see your R.5/FFT crossover continued as well?
 

Seed00

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Ryogas...is alive? Cool. *goes back to r-read Magic WIthin*
 

Ryogas_BF

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This is about 3/4ths or so of the full rewritten chapter. Most of it is pretty close to the original but I changed around the plot progression, cutting out where Ranma split his time between the party and Eva's training... the main change meaning that the situation doesn't turn cyclical until Ranma's clone form starts to go rogue and complicate things... This set up keeps much of the events but changes the effects of them. So please do read even if you know the orginal chapter and hopefully you'll notice the different feel and some of the new scenes :)

Feels good to be writing again ^_^

Chapter 10

Ranma and Ranko strolled down the road home; they walked side by side in silence. Ranko was once again in her school uniform passing curious glances to her male half. Ranma had his hands in his pockets baring an expression somewhere between unsure and annoyance, his right cheek was a dull red.

"Look, I'm sure she didn't mean it that way."

"No I think she made her point pretty clearly."

"We can straighten this out, tomorrow in clas-"

"No. This will work out just fine." He closed his eyes. "I'll play the bad guy here and then you can still intermingle without raising any suspicious. I'm sure Eva will agree with me on this one."

"I guess so." they both fell silent again. "We're both talkin' funny again aren't we?"

"Yeah I noticed, we've been separated a long while today what with that party and then getting 'inducted' into the anti-vamp squad."

"Ironic right?" They both shared a small chuckle.

"I should probably dismiss you here."

"Probably, but we're already this far, it's not much further to get home. With all the memories you'll likely need to lie down pretty quickly." The male Saotome nodded at the logic.

"If anything it has been eventful."

"You have NO idea." Ranko muttered some pink tingeing her cheeks. Ranma raised an eyebrow at that but didn't immediately respond. He moved his walking path over and casually bopped his female half on the back of the head.

"OW! What did you do that for jerk?"

"I told you not to do anything embarrassing."

"I didn't! It was that stupid weasel thing."

"Riiight." he received an elbow to the side.

"Jerk. I take it back, you deserved that slap." she stuck out her tongue to which he returned.

"Brat." The pair continued along in slightly better spirits. A little fight could go a long way sometimes. As Ranma turned his eyes up to the sky, his mind continued to echo.

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"No, I'm not gonna to let you get yourself pactioed. You should leave the fights to the fighters!

"But Negi-kun needs my help, if he doesn't get a partner something awful might happen to him."

"Just like it could to you!"

A harsh crack from an unexpected source disoriented him for a short moment, his cheek stinging. He turned sharply to Asuna, who wielded a burning glare.

"We're not your property Ranma, You can't tell us what to do. I don't need you protecting me."

Those words brought an unfamiliar rise and a scowl to his face. He'd never let himself get angry with a friend, but there was a first time for anything.

"That's how you see it huh? Keh. Fine, Get up Ranko, we're leaving."

"Ranma, please cal-"

"No, I'm obviously not wanted here. Come on."

"Hey don't take the girl, she's a good fighter. She'd make a great pactio partner for Aniki!" the ermine spoke up, getting a burning glare in return.

"You'd better not get within ten feet of my cousin. Got it vermin!' he hadn't realized at the time, the concerned and scared expressions of those in the room. He had just left, pulling Ranko behind him as he slammed the door.
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The pigtailed boy gave a frustrated sigh as the apartment building came into sight. If things hadnÆt been complicated before, by throwing his little tantrum heÆd made it ten times worse. ôIÆm such an idiot.ö he scaled the steps to the building a step behind Ranko.

ôYup.ö

ôOi, donÆt agree to that so readily.ö he grumbled ignoring the smug grin on the girls face as she trotted up the stairs. On the second floor Ranko had stopped looking to the door of Mana and SayoÆs apartment.

ôShould we stop by?ö

ôNah, IÆm beat. IÆd think you would be too, considering.ö Ranma puts his hands behind his head. ôBesides weÆre already overàö

ôI rested in the room,ö Ranko leaned forward on the railing. ôIf weÆre already over then its okay if I go say hi, right? I know youÆd go if you werenÆt tired.ö she clasped her hands. ôJust a minute, okay?ö Ranma held the red headÆs gaze for a moment before rolling his eyes.

ôFine, IÆm going to dismiss you in twenty minutes; I donÆt care where you are when I do it.ö Ranma yawned a little and continued on up listening to Ranko knock on the apartment door. He shook his head as he unlocked his own door to the house. He didnÆt put too much thought into his actions moving through the darkened apartment in a daze going through his pre-bed ritual. The whole place was quiet, save for his own soft footsteps. He slipped into his futon and stared up to the ceiling. In the shadows he could see AsunaÆs burning gaze, NegiÆs shamed expression, and KonokaÆs flinch of fear.

ôWhy of all peopleàö he didnÆt finish his thought, it was a pointless question the obstacles to his cure had been set. He just needed to surpass them. But the real question was, could he?

Ranma glanced to the clock by the bed, noting the time. ôThatÆs twentyàö he grasped his pendent and focused. For a moment he tasted something sweet. ôHmà someone made cookies.ö was the last coherent thought before he was flooded with flashing images, a cacophony of sound and a feeling of his head being ripped in half. He screamed and all went mercifully black.

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The room had darkened with the coming of night; Konoka still lay awake in her bed. Above slept Asuna, though annoyed with Ranma's attitude, had managed to find sleep easy enough. Even Negi had managed to fall asleep on the couch... though his whimpers and sleep talk were a testament he was having less then stellar dreams. But no sleep seemed to come from the fledgling mage.

I'm sorry Oujo-sama, but I fall into the same camp as Saotome on this issue. As your bodyguard I refuse to let you throw yourself into a dangerous situation such as this. I am sure sensei can find a more capable partner.

"Secchan." Konoka hugged her spare pillow tightly. Everyone was trying to protect her... it was always that way for the longest time. But this wasn't about her. She turned over to the young mage twisting on the Couch.

"No... stay away...stop it..." he murmured lightly. No doubt if she watched long enough she could probably catch him sleep walk over and climb up to Asuna's bed. She turned her gaze back to the bed above.

"A more capable partner..." The blankets shifted and light footsteps crossed the length of the room. Another shifting of blankets and Negi's whimpering lessened, the boy fell into a deeper sleep clinging on to the warm body. An arm curled around his smaller frame... it was only in his sleep he'd allow himself to be a child.

"Onee-chan..."

"That's right..." Konoka hugged the boy closely as she shifted to a more comfortable position on the couch. "Onee-chan is here." she whispered softly. "I'll do the protecting this time." She closed her eyes focusing on his rhythmic breathing, lulling herself into a deeper sleep. Perched on the railing of the loft storage Chamo looked down to the couch, he smiled widely at the sight... it was better then he could ever have hoped...

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The next day came and emotions cooled from the night previous. Asuna was feeling a little guilty of her rather knee jerk reaction to Ranma's demands. As much as she disagreed, she had no right to strike him. Negi awoke to a totally different bedtime companion and to a promise he had not expected...

Konoka wanted to partner with him; fully knowing of the issue he was about to face. She had no form of combat training and minimal magic experience extending to self-taught cantrips. Though Chamo said there were aspects to the pactio that could swing things in her favor, the boy mage still felt uneasy about picking her. Besides, running full tilt alongside hundreds of girls probably wasn't the best time to talk about magic issues. The usual waiting spot was already occupied by Mana and Sayo adding, a further reason to end all partner talk as the pair began to match pace.

"Good morning Sensei."

"Morning Konoka-chan! Asuna-san"

"Good morning girls... Where is Ranko-san?"

"Ranko is not feeling well, it seems her headaches were acting up more then usual. She's laid up in bed for the day." Sayo said with a clearly concerned tone, Asuna shook her head.

"I keep telling her to get that looked at."

"Headaches?" Negi seemed a little out of the loop. That little detail had not shown up on her records.

"Ranko has gotten chronic headaches usually a little bit everyday. Sometimes more then others." Konoka explained as she glided in tune with her more athletic classmates. "Sometimes after a particularly hard day she has to stay home. We should stop by there after class to cheer her up."

"Yeah!" Sayo cheered. "I know Ranko would appreciate that, I haven't visited as often as I would have liked to so it must be getting lonely in that apartment."

"Her cousin is away again?" Negi frowned. "Even at a time like this?" the former spirit jumped a little.

"What? Ah No! Ranma came back as soon as he heard." her tone was a little rushed but Mana smoothed things over.

"But he does have to work to pay for most of the apartment since Ranko is a student. He can't always be home when he would like," she explained in a much more rational tone.

"Oh," the young teacher blinked, things made a little more sense in that route. "Doesn't her parents offer any support?"

"She doesn't have any." Negi turned his eyes to Asuna who had her eyes steadfastly ahead.

"Eh?"

"She's an orphan, technically Ranma is her guardian but even he's too young to fill the role officially. I'm not sure who sponsors her but the both of them decided to work things out on their own instead of asking for help."

"I...I had no idea..."

"Hey!" He jumped as Asuna grabbed his collar roughly, locking eyes with him. "Don't you start to pity her, if she sees you act like that youÆre just going to get her mad at you. They may only be cousins but their very close and they both work hard. You got that?"

"Y-yeah." he felt the pressure let go and Asuna picked up the pace a little more pulling ahead. Konoka kept even pace with her sensei leaning down and coasting a bit on her skates.

"Asuna can get a little protective sometimes," she whispered cheerfully. "And Ranko-chan is a somewhat of a special case."

"Oh?"

"Mm hm." Konoka offered a simple smile. "Because she reminds Asuna of herself." Negi turned his eyes to his other roommates back as she kept a steady pace just in front of them. Seemingly no different then usual but a close eye revealed her fists clenched a little tighter and her shoulder tense. All in concern of her friend...

You better be okay

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Ranko lay in bed unfortunately conscious as her head pounded like a jackhammer. The memories were taking their sweet time unraveling. It was going to be one of those days.

"It hurts to think." she muttered in annoyance rolling over and trying to go back to sleep. At least then she would be able to ignore the pain as her mind processed the information overload. A light rumble brought a groan of annoyance to her mouth. This just wasnÆt her day. She grabbed her pendent and after a moment a naked Ranma appeared crouched at her side. The oppressive headache seemed to lessen a little, at least enough to think more clearly. The boy groaned rubbing his head.

"Thanks for sharing."

"Shut up." The girl grumbled, "It's just for a minute or two so I can get something to eat." The pigtailed girl sat up, hair mussed and sticking up at odd angles. She got to her feet, a little wobbly but steadying after a few steps. Leaving her other half she shuffled her way into the kitchen and set to making a light breakfast to settle her stomach enough to get some sleep.

"Don't take too long, Eva may ask us to split at the meeting tonight."

"Yeah yeah, I've gotten that much of last night straightened out... though all of you.. The memories from the pool are getting distracting."

"What? its not like I couldn't look... besides theyÆre all cute girls." Ranma argued from the doorway gaining a light flush and absent nod from his 'cousin'. The details were still fuzzy but the clearer that night became the more uncomfortable it was making her feel. It wasn't that she hadn't noticed how attractive her classmates were but after being with so many of them for years and following her strict codes to avoid looking at them in compromising conditions she could easily keep it from her mind. Though the bathing suits gave little to the imagination and though it was still fuzzy she knew that it was still going to be worse.

"Oh man..." she banged her head lightly on the counter. "How am I going to be able to look at them again? Maybe I should call in sick tomorrow too?" she muttered sitting back up and rubbing her head. "Ow... Also, hitting my head when I already have a headache is not one of my better ideas." The ringing phone caught her attention, glad for a distraction.

"I got it." Ranma's voice called up from the other room. Finishing up her meal she sat down to eat hearing the muffled conversation in the other room. A click was followed by a light curse as Ranma peeked out of the bedroom.

"What now? I don't like that look..."

"Well that was Mana, it seems that were going to be having some visitors tonight."

"Hm? Well that ain't so bad."

"Two being Asuna and Negi-sensei."

It took a moment for that to process in her muddled mind. "Damn it..." If those two were coming by then that would complicate things. "Eva'll be pissed if I don't show up in person."

ôWell we don't have much of a choice in the matter. It's not like I can have another extended split after last night.ö That much was for sure, the headache was already hard enough to deal with as is. ôI'm sure she'll understand.ö Both Saotome's were silent for a moment before simultaneously slouching over in defeat.

ôWe're doomed.ö

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The day passed on and classes went by easy enough. There was a bit of surprise amongst 3-A that Ranko had called out. It wasn't often the hearty girl was absent and for some people any news related to the quirky Saotome family was noteworthy.

"We'll meet you at the apartment okay?"

"Uh huh. See you later Konoka-chan!" Sayo waved before starting their trek back. Konoka moved to head back with the others on route to the dorm, just a quick stop to drop off their things. "You think we should pick up something for her?"

"If it's just her headaches, she should be fine; she's never down for too long."

"True enough, but I think I'll bring over something sweet,"

"Well that I wonÆt complain... after all it's a friendÆs duty to help eat sweets when given the chance." Asuna smiled a little as Konoka chuckled. On coming up to the dorms Setsuna gave a small bow.

"I will not be able to come right away Oujo-sama, Asuna-san. I have practice with Kuzunoha-sensei, I'm sure she will let me leave earlier considering the circumstance."

"No problem Setsuna, we'll pass the message on to Ranko."

"Secchan" Konoka huffed a little. "I told you not to call me that!" she stamped her foot but the swordswoman had already made good her escape, a little faster when Konoka had shouted after. "Geez," she passed a small glance to Asuna who was chuckling a little to herself.

"Give her a little time, I know she's your friend but she obviously is still getting used to things."

"I guess." The trek led up to the dorm room. A few things were dropped off and picked up. Konoka seemed to pause looking to the young boy until he noticed the attention.

"Um, yes Konoka-san?"

"Negi-kun... do you think we could pactio?"

"Eh?"

"Heh heh." Chamo peeked over from Negi's shoulder. "I knew I could count on you Konoka-nee." the ermine did like to hide his pleased tone.

"But Konoka-san... Saotome-san and Setsuna-san-"

"Are not me." Konoka took a deep breath. "This is my decision."

"But..." Negi looked supremely uncomfortable. Though he was starting to rationalize that a student would need to be his partner Konoka was not someone he wanted to put in danger. The weight on his shoulder disappeared as Chamo hopped down to the floor.

"Aniki, we went over this before. YouÆre too young to make a final pactio, so you donÆt need to worry about this being a final choice you know." Asuna rolled her eyes as the rodent began fast-talking. Her eyes caught an odd crumple in bucket by the door.

"Hm... A letter?"

"But Chamo-kun I reall-"

"Come on Aniki, youÆre not going to make any progress with that vampire if you donÆt start getting some help. You ready Nee-chan."

"Yup." Chamo went down on all fours and with a rush of energy a magic circle came into life around the pair. The room became shaded in light pink energy. Negi swallowed as he could feel his heart rate begin to go up watching a slight flush come to the face of the headmaster's granddaughter. "Wow... this feels kinda nice." she muttered. Asuna cracked open the seal on the letter and pulled it free.

"Now all you need to do to form the bond is a kiss"

"K-Kiss?!" Negi's face burned turning his shocked gaze to the ermine.

"Well, you need to show sincerity for the bond. Hey this is better than the open veins and swap blood routine." the little animal shook his head at that. "Messy. Besides, itÆs just a kiss on the lips."

"Lips! I-I but."

"All I have to do is kiss Negi-kun?" Konoka giggled a little. "That's not so bad," she said smiling down to the boy who had totally frozen up, face red and eyes wide as Konoka leaned closer to him. Asuna's eyebrows rose as she took in the contents of the letter and glared to the rodent cheering the two on. Konoka took Negi's face in her hands, both of their eyes closed. They were about to make contact when the circle backfired separating the two and sending them falling back on their rear. Chamo was all but imbedded in the floor with Asuna's foot on top of him.

"You lying little vermin."

"Hey what's the big deal?!" Chamo managed to scramble out from under the foot but was silenced by a crumpled paper being held in his face.

"The deal? The deal is Negi's sister didn't send you at all!" she crossed her arms. "This letter is warning Negi that youÆre a criminal on the run from crimes back in England! How dare you deceive a child like this?"

"Chamo-kun?" Negi looked to the ermine, which was now breaking out in a nervous sweat.

"It's j-just a misunderstanding..."

"It says right here æover two thousand counts of underwear theftÆ. That is hardly a misunderstanding. What is wrong with you?"

"Two thousand?" Konoka was clearly surprised at the high number passing a dubious look to the ermine.

"I was falsely accused!" now panicked, Chamo just wanted to get out of this with at least minimal issues.

"Falsely accused?"

"Well... you see I have this sister." he started improvising as best he could. "She gets sick really easily and there's not much I can do except try to keep her warm during the harsh welsh winters. So I borrowed some underwear, you know... women's underwear is very good at retaining heat. It was for a good cause!" he held his breath as the three humans judged the response.

"Sounds like youÆre just a major panty thief to me." Asuna replied, clearly unconvinced. A similar nod from Konoka all but shot down his chances. But he had to stick with it for now.

"Obviously it could only ever be a temporary solution... I figured I could get some income coming over to Japan, I knew I could rely on Aniki if I needed to and nothing I could do myself seemed to be working."

"But all this way? Why?" Asuna pressed.

"Look... I figured if I could help Aniki out, he might hire me as his familiar." he scuffed the floor with his paws looking downward. "You know, no one ever messes with a familiar of a magister magi in training... and then no one could lay a finger on me." He partial admitted his guilt bringing a slight twitch to Asuna's eye.

"How do you sleep at night?"

"Look issues aside I'm still looking out for Aniki's best interests right?" he ventured before sighing. "Look it was wrong for me to deceive you all like that. I can understand if you mad and if you want me gone I'll leave give myself up without a fuss..." he threw himself on the mercy of his companions with little hope. Negi had been silent up till now and he was a smart kid he could only hope that he could put the bogus story aside, and help him out like he had in the past.

"W-wait..." a light sniff followed catching everyoneÆs attention. Negi looked up with honest tears in his eyes. "I had no idea you had it so hard Chamo." he sniffed again leaving Asuna to only boggle at the absurdity... Hadn't he been listening at all?

"Aniki?" and so the two 'brothers' embraced once more, it would really have been a much more touching scene if the circumstances had been a bit different. Chamo was officially adopted as Negi's familiar, with pay for his sick little sister, and the two students could only watch on, unsure what the worse thing was about this. Negi's gullibility or Chamo's guiltless manipulation of it... nonetheless the pact was made and the ermine was here to stay.

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It was afternoon at the Saotome residence and laughter could be heard. After some rest Ranko was able to think much clearer and had most of the memories straight. She was dressed in a nightshirt and shorts and hair still mussed to sell that she had stayed in bed all day, while Ranma on the other hand was dressed in his usual Chinese outfit. He shared the table with Sayo and Mana, the former of which speaking excitedly making wide hand motions as she spoke of her recent adventures in the library research club.

"The books kept falling, it was like an avalanche! Some of them smarted pretty good too."

"My my, I never thought a library could be so perilous." Mana teased good naturedly earning a light flush from her roommate.

"How I suppose to know it was a load bearing book?"

"You're such a klutz Sa-chan." Ranma stated with a small smile furthering the girl in question's flush, though in the end they all shared a light chuckle.

"I hope this visit is not going to impose, it of sprung up rather suddenly." Mana spoke up after a moment.

"Really, I am feeling much better," Ranko spoke up for both of them on that front.

"Mm, it's kinda nice to have some people come by." Ranma chuckled a little bit. "I'm sure it will be an interesting night. Shame we can't both stick around.ö

"Ah, but I suppose being in two places at once is quite convenient in these situations. Did someone make that for you?" the mercenary said with a small note of envy, though her uses would likely be much less mundane. Ranma could barely halt the images of a pair of Manas getting into some manner of marksmanship contest, headlines reading 'casualties rating in the thousands!'

"Headmaster got it for me, not sure where. Said it was a special case."

"Ah I see." Damn

"Ranma..."

"Yeah Sa-chan?"

"I'm... I'm sorry I haven't visited." the undead girl had he head turned downward. "I got so wrapped up in things..."

"Really It's no that big a de-"

"It is a big deal!" She looked up; face suddenly intense, making both Saotomes jump. "I'll start coming by everyday, just like I used to."

"Sa-chan... You used to hover over my bed at night and hang by me 24/7 since you couldn't sleep." Ranko pointed out in a dry tone making her friend sweat a little.

"Right... well not exactly like I used to then. But I'll visit everyday I can!"

"Look Sa-chan, you really don't have to. We've both go things going on now so rea-"

"Ranma," Mana calmly took control of the odd argument. "If you insist on an attitude like that we may just need to find new ways to spend time then." she smirked slightly in a way that made the 'cousins' a little nervous. "Like taking Ranko-chan to the baths to relax after class." she recited smoothly getting the desired effect. Slowly both Ranma and Ranko reddened and turned away, Mana had made no attempt to hide herself, as had any of the other girls and the images were still quite fresh.

"That won't be necessary." Ranko muttered

"Good then I want no more complaining at the two of us visiting more."

"Eh? Two?" Sayo looked to her roommate whose smirk morphed into a small smile.

"I thought it was a given considering the circumstances. Right?" Ranko puzzled a bit as Sayo's eyes widened a little before gaining an almost challenging look that was matched by the mercenary. She looked to her double though he merely shrugged not having anymore insight than herself. She looked to the girls who seemed to have ended their impromptu starring match, both bringing a pleasant feeling to her mind on seeing them by more often. She gained a small smile.

"Thanks guys..."

"Glad to!" Sayo smiled brightly

"Hm, That's what I wanted to hear." Mana said with a sassy wink. A knocking at the door caught the attention of the tablemates to the door.

"Looks like theyÆre here, guess it's time for me to get to work." Ranma stood before passing a wink Ranko's way, "Remember youÆre sick." the clone smirked getting into 'older cousin mode' as headed to the door.

"I know, I know." she snorted "It was my plan smartass..."

Flipping the locks he opened it up. "Now what do we have here?"

"Good afternoon Saotome-san." Negi gave a small bow of greeting; ermine familiar perched on his shoulder.

"We come bearing snacks." Konoka smiled and held up a small bag.

"Ranma? I thought your shift would have started already." Asuna blinked a looking a little surprised.

"I need to head out in just a little bit but I figured I could at least hang around until the changing of the guard." The martial artist held her gaze calmly for a moment before motioning to the others. "Well you all can come in except for the rodent."

"Oi! I'm Negi's familiar." Chamo protested puffing out his chest pridefully but the pigtailed boy was less then impressed.

"Don't care, I don't want you in my house. I don't want any magic madness going down while I'm out." He gave the ermine no quarter. The battle of wills was short and brutal, the familiar swallowed a little and hopped off Negi's shoulder.

"Hmph, well I know when I'm not wanted. Pardon an ermine for wanting to visit a sick girl." Chamo tried to brush it off like it was his decision. "I'll head back to the dorm. Don't stay up too late with all the pretty nee-chans okay?" he loosed a sly snicker as he slipped off out of sight. Ranma shook his head in annoyance; that ermine was going to cause him a lot of trouble. That much he was sure. Slightly blushing, Negi entered followed but Konoka happily greeting those inside. Asuna did not move at all, keeping focused on the boy.

"Ranma?"

"What?" he replied curtly though the girl seemed unphased.

"I want to talk to you"

"Hmph, I don't think there's much to talk about."

"Well I do." they held gazes for a moment before he gave a small sigh.

"Fine." he stepped out into the hall and closed the door. "Let's go to the roof, itÆs nice enough out." The boy turned and headed up not even looking to see if she followed. Asuna took a deep breath and fell into step behind him. If he picked the roof it seemed he was expecting this had a chance to turn ugly. It was hardly the first time both had butted heads, they were opinionated, stubborn teenagers and it had been that way since their first meeting all those years ago. That lost, angry boy had become a part of her pseudo-family here at Mahoraà and no matter how many times she wanted to strangle the pushy jerk that wouldnÆt change.

Ranma wasnÆt particularly thrilled with this turn of events, even though he knew it was coming. He was still mad at the heated argument, and with his headache, he really wasnÆt in the mood to talk about it. The key was keeping Asuna and Konoka from getting involved in this messà it was for their own safety.

And RanmaÆs own conscience.

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Ranko allowed a small curious note to door closing before turning her full attention to her newest guests. After all she would no doubt be informed shortly enough. "Hey guys."

"Good afternoon Ranko-san." Negi smiled a little. "I hope youÆre feeling better."

"Yeah, got a good bit of rest so it ain't nearly as bad. I'll be up and about tomorrow. No biggie."

"Well that's a relief."

"Hi Ranko-chan."

"Yo, Ko-chan," she smirked. "So what did you bring?" The red head did not bother hiding her excitement.

"My my, it's obvious what part of the body you think with." The fledgling mage placed the bag at her side and reached in. "Well before you eat the table I might as well these out first." She pulled out some plastic containers with about a dozen or so cupcakes. "I even brought a few games so we can play a bit without tiring you out."

"Always so thoughtful," Ranko gave a dramatic sniff, though was ruined by the fact she had already opened and consumed one of the cupcakes. She reached for another only to have it swatted away "Hey, a sick girl needs her strength."

"At least wait for Asuna to get back before you pig out."

"Fine fine..." the redhead pouted a little bit. "So I hope I didn't miss too much in class?" she said more for conversation than really caring about missing it.

"Don't worry Ranko-chan I hold after school study groups on the weekdays you can come by and catch up as soon as youÆre better." Negi replied cheerfully reminding the girl that her sensei was among those in attendance.

"Right," she bore a slight sweatdrop. "I'll be sure to drop by."

"Great."

"Negi-kun has been looking for a way to repay you." Konoka said with a little giggle causing the boy to flush.

"Eh?"

"Well... you have done a lot to help me out and I still haven't been able to return the favor," he explained keeping his eyes downward. He may have said something more extensive but repressed it due to less familiar company.

"Hey, a martial artist is supposed to help people. I'm not looking to build up favors." Ranko replied easily. The boy looked up eyes determined looking right into own.

"But when things happen to you, there should be hands reaching to help you as well." He said firmly, the brat could look real mature when he wanted to.

"Come on it's just a headache sensei, really nothing to make a big deal out of." She repressed the urge to squirm a little under his gaze especially when she realized what he was doing. He's reading my eyes again? It took her a moment to put her guard back up. She noted a slight frown and his gaze returned to being less intense; he seemed to have gotten the message.

The change in his posture was immediate as he saw the walls go back up again. Fortunately he'd gotten a pretty good look before he'd been shut out. Her feelings were genuine about helping out but something was weighing heavy on her mind, nothing he'd be able to find with simply reading emotions. But anything more invasive and she would not likely forgive me he allowed himself a slight sigh. Why did she always try to hold up the burdens by herself? He blinked and shook his head, someone had called his name.

"Yes?"

"I said do you know any card games sensei?" Mana said with her usual easy smirk as she opened a brand new deck of cards that Konoka brought.

"Um games? Not really."

"Well then we'll start simple with a little old maid."

"Hm, simple stuff." Ranko smirked.

"Um Ranko, are you sure you want to play?" Sayo ventured with a slight sweatdrop.

"If she wants to play she can," the mercenary said shuffling with a bit of a flourish. Besides we'll move on to something a bit more interesting once sensei gets used to the flow of the game."

"That's not why I'm conc-"

"Bring it on Mana." The redhead cut of her well-intentioned friend. She'd been cooped up in bed, a little competition would do her wonders... besides she was feeling lucky today. Sayo sighed a little and Konoka gave a mischievous giggle having kept silent in the debate. This was going to be fun...

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Ranma stood across from Asuna, face neutral and pigtail dancing in the wind behind him. The girl had here hands clasp tightly, hair ornaments jingling. The silence was brief but felt like an eternity as their minds moved a mile a minute.

"Well?" Ranma broke the silence first the tension of the moment grating on his frayed nerves. Asuna took a breath to collect herself and began.

"Fine.... First off I would like to apologize for last night." A small note of surprise appeared briefly on the boy's face but was quickly snuffed. "I had no right to hit you like that, we've know each other far too long for that to be excusable." her gazed hardened, "But I still don't agree with you."

"Keh, figures."

"This is my life, and with Negi always getting in over his head he needs someone to pull him out before he hurts himself. I'm not going to let a kid get himself hurt, mage or otherwise."

"Hm? I thought you didn't like kids."

"YouÆre right I don't, but things happen." she gave her non-answer with a note of firmness.

"Look... that's all well and good but this isn't stopping a kid from some debunked love potion, this is about fighting a powerful supernatural baddy. Now helpin' is all well and good, but you need to learn that some things are out of your league."

"I'll be the judge of that."

"No, you won't." his eyes narrowed. "You don't have the skills to take on a real vampire. Don't fool yourself to a good showing when the bag of bones wasn't even close to full power. YouÆre just setting yourself up to be hurt."

"Just because I'm not some martial arts prodigy doesn't mean I'm not able to help."

"Damn it Asuna, I'm not going to let you fight. This is for your own good." the neutral face was long gone, replaced with annoyance and frustration.

"Oh since when have I been your jurisdiction?"

"Since you've proven youÆre too stupid to think this out."

"I'm stupid now." she glared at the insult.

"Don't change this around..." he groaned having let his mouth get away from him.

"Change around? I'm just using your own words." she snorted. "You're always doing this, trying to be the big strong man protecting the ladies in distress. Drop the knight act, Sir clueless. Girls can be knights too."

"You stupid tomboy, I'm tryin' to protect you!" he growled.

"I'm doing the right thing. I won't let the brat get hurt again." she said firmly getting right in his face. "So drop it all ready! I'm going!"

"No, I won't let you!"

"You stubborn jerk!"

"YouÆre too important to me!" he shouted fists clenched tightly at his sides. Asuna blinked as the echoing words started to sink in.

"What?" she had lost a bit of heat in her voice unsure if she'd heard that correctly. Ranma for his own part had clamed up and backed off.

"...Never mind..." he muttered withdrawing rather quickly. Going to the roof edge he paused only briefly before jumping the gap to the next roof.

"Ranma wait." He didn't stop and kept going until he dropped between two buildings, vanishing from sight. She was left puzzled with an even mixture of frustration left from the fight and a somewhat uncomfortable feeling from the words. "How can he just shout crap like that and walk away? Jerk..." she muttered a light pinkish tinge to her face. "J-Just because you say something like that doesn't mean you win the fight!" She shouted out childishly if only to settle her flustered stomach.

Asuna slowly took a seat on the roof, as her frustration drained away it was replaced by a warm if somewhat uneasy feeling. The boyÆs, apparently unintentional, admission bounced freely about her mind. "Important..." her hands clasp tightly in her lap as she kept her eyes to the horizon. It was not like she had ever believed that the boy didn't consider her a friend it was just a matter of closeness in comparison. That casual affection he would show here and there, compliments, outings... she wanted just a bit to prove there was something that set her above girls like Ku Fei and Mana. That knowing him all these years meant something in the scheme of the boy's attention.

You're too important to me!

"Important could mean a lot of things..." The heat increased slowly as she fiddled with her skirt. He had just blurted it out and ran, like it was unintentional... like it was a secret. For a girl only looking for a nickname or a smile such an event seemed unreal. When compared his casual affection seemed diluted, this was more raw. Unrehearsed and unexpected by both parties. It filled her with a different feeling than she expected.

She rolled her head back to look at the darkening sky, she thought it would calm her anxiety. Knowing that she wasn't just some throwaway friend who happened to be Konoka's roommate would grant her a bit of peace. Instead the words had struck like an earthquake shattering the foundation she stood on shifting wildly leaving her unsure of what remained behind in the aftermath. Her stomach twittered nervously... while hardly unpopular, she had gone to only girl schools all her life the only men in her life were Takahata-sensei, Ranma, and now Negi. She never liked kids and men like Takahata made her melt, but Ranma... well he'd never shown any indication of this. Always snide, poking fun, infuriatingly prideful but somehow in a nice way...

But...

You're too important to me!

His graying blue eyes were intense and totally genuine. Her heart thumped in a way it rarely did, her breath had caught. The raw powerful emotion in his voice. "I'm Important..." it was hard not to say that with a twitch of a smile but that brought up a wholly unexpected issue. If she was important to Ranma... what was Ranma to her?

That wellà Ranma was Ranmaà Frustrating but kind, dependable but always vanishing, friendly yet antagonistic. He was a walking contradiction. They hung out together, rarely just the two of them but it was always more fun with Ranko or Konoka around as well. If he were to fit into her æfamilyÆ heÆd likely be that frustrating older brother but over all ôI guess heÆs my boyfriendàö she muttered softly before she choked, ôI mean BOY - FRIEND. Two words! Clearly two words!ö She flushed realizing she was arguing with air.

You're too important to me!

Asuna covered her face and groaned, the scene just kept going over and over. She banged her head lightly on the stone behind her hoping to jar it free. Why did he have to make it so much like a confession? She realized that was a forbidden word for the moment as her face heated up once again and her heart thumped.

ôDamn Ranma you tainted my brain! IÆm supposed to be mad at you!ö She didnÆt care how crazy she sounded as she shouted and pulled her knees up and rested her head on them. She groaned lightly and closed her eyes, trying to wish some peace into her mind.

Soo, how long have you been crushing on Ranma?

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Sitting around the participants looked to the pile of cards in the center, all accounted for but one. The joker, which was staring right at the pigtailed girl from her hands. Ranko's eye twitched in annoyance... the card was taunting her. She slammed the card face down, that would teach it, and looked the smiling dealer. "One more time, for real this time."

Konoka seemed unphased as she gathered up the cards.

"I was under the impression the last two were for real." Mana said getting a tick from the girl's shoulders. The mercenary had heard a rumor or two but she'd never expected it to be this bad... she'd never thought a fluid and erratic martial artist could be so... predictable.

"I-I was just getting into my groove."

"Maybe we should play something else..." Sayo suggested with a guilty sweatdrop. Card games were not particularly her strong suit but the worst she could fall in the end was second to last as long as Ranko was in the game.

"Yes it doesn't seem... fair." Setsuna said carefully. She had arrived shortly after the seventh game and had played the last two.

"Fair enough, I think we've had enough practice runs then right?' Konoka smiled innocently as she shuffled looking to Negi. "YouÆre starting to get the hang of things right Negi-kun?"

"Um yes." The boy teacher had nearly lost the first few as Mana and Konoka had quite potent poker faces... but Ranko. He glanced over to the girl who, despite his constant failures looked even more determined. It was somewhat admirable it a way... futile but admirable.

"Good." The headmaster's granddaughter scanned over the faces of her classmates and teachers. "Then we'll move on to a little poker... with some raised stakes." she smiled brightly. "We'll make it a penalty game. The winner can make the loser do one task. Anything..." the innocent smiled was countered by a mischievous gaze that put the twins and Paparazzi to shame. "So who's in?"

"You can't scare me off." Ranko smirked, "There ain't no way I'm going to lose." The red head's tone held total confidence and the plan suddenly became clear. The winner of this game would be able to get Ranko to do anything. Eyes went from Ranko back to Konoka's innocent smile.

"Anybody else?" Mana and Sayo locked eyes for a moment and in unison raised their hands.

"I'm in!" Konoka turned her gaze to her old friend and smiled.

"Secchan?"

"Yes." The swordswoman looked to Ranko and shook her head, obviously the other girls had something dastardly in mind. Perhaps if she could succeed then the boy/girl's humiliation could be lessened.

"Great!" she giggled, "What about you Negi-kun?"

Sometimes you can be a truly devious woman Oujo-sama... she scooted closer to the table as the 'chips' where passed out. Everyone started with the same amount though Ranko probably deserved some manner of handicap bonus.

"What about you Negi-kun?"

"Um I really don't know poker..." he tired to weasel out of it, it seemed rather unfair after all.

"Nonsense, it's fun. We'll play a couple of mock hands so you can get the rules straight." she said passing him some chips. Konoka smiled as she dealt it all out and began to work through he mock hand explaining the rules and what card combinations he would be looking for. it was simple enough to grasp and despite his moral misgivings for the outcome of this game it sounds like it would be fun. ôall right, lets get this started.ö Konoka cut the deck and fanned the cards together. ôIÆll deal.ö

The cards were just starting to come out when a small pulse of warmth came from the pendent around her neck. It had taken longer then she expected but it seemed her clone was finally done with whatever business Asuna had with him, The memories would be coming shortly after. She preempted the rush by rubbing her temples a little. ôGimme a sec, I'm gonna take a few aspirin...ö She muttered as she started to stand.

ôHeadache again?ö Negi frowned a little. ôLet me get them for-ö

ôNah I got it, it's a small one. I'll only be a second.ö she absentmindedly waved off the offer as the rush hit her. It was a small jumble and would sort itself out quickly enough, heading to the kitchen and filling a glass on the counter. Emotion hit before the context, waves of frustration and annoyance ôGreat... another fight.ö she sighed trying not to let to memories ruin her current good mood. ôStubborn Tomboy.ö she muttered taking a sip of water as the dialog begun to play out filling in the blanks.

You're too important to me

Water sprayed against the wall followed by a fit of coughing as she tried to clear the water from her lungs.

ôAhh Ranko? You okay?ö Sayo peeked around the corner but Ranko manged to wave her off.

ôJ-Just went down the wrong tube.ö she sputtered not daring to look up. Her cheeks burned as Asuna's own blushing face was etched firmly into her mind. Clearly just as stunned as she was at what had transpired. Somehow a very standard argument had taken a totally different turn. Now it was not that her clone had lied, Asuna was important to her. All her friends were, she didn't have much else in the world but well... with the private setting under the stars after such a heated exchange it came out with a completely different feel... she'd been exposed to enough sappy romance movies from Konoka to see that much and her old friend's flustered expression made it all to clear she noticed that.

Though the beating of her own heart from the heated exchange wasn't helping things. The red head went back to the sink splashing some water on her face to cool down. It was insane, This was Asuna she was thinking about. The same stubborn tomboy she'd been butting heads with for years... well that was hardly fair, she was a nice enough girl. High energy, Loyal to a fault, and she had this infectious smile that was s- ôGah!ö she shooked her head free of that dangerous line of thought and rested her head on the counter. ôWhat the hell am I thinking?ö she groaned, doing her best to calm herself. The ghost emotions had already past but she had to settle her heart all over again. ôI'm overthinking this, she's likely just as confused... I'll just have to straighten all this later.ö

ôRanko?ö

ôYeah, I'm comin'!ö she called back taking a deep breath. What was said was said, nothing could be done about that. She'd just put it aside for later, focus on the night at hand. Nice safe denial... ôAll right, deal me in.ö

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Eva frowned as he eyes twitched toward the clock, ôHe's sure taking his sweet time,ö she muttered calmly before glancing back to the window. The night was young but she and Saotome should have been well into the session by now. The date was approaching and there wouldn't be many more opportunities. ôHe's never been this late before...ö

ôHeh, Well ain't you the mother hen all of a sudden.ö Chachazero's demented snicker carried across the room from her placement amongst several non animated dolls.

ôQuiet you.ö the vampire grumbled. Her eyes were about to shift back to the clock when she heard the door open. ôIt's about time yo-...oh.ö she immediately lost her bluster as she saw Chachamaru alone. ôSo any word on our beloved Sensei?ö she gained a slight smirk, curious as to how the son of the thousand master was handling things. It would make a good distraction at the very least.

ôNegi-sensei seems to have gathered a few dedicated supporters, both Asuna Kagurazaka and Konoka Konoe seem to be fully in his confidence. I did not venture close enough to be sure but I believe Setsuna Sakurazaki is also fully involved.ö Chachamaru reported calmly.

ôHm, I expected Kagurazaka. The headmasters daughter is a bit troubling... even if the old fart isn't fully aware of whats going on he'd probably know if she got too involved. The sword girl should make things more interesting but nothing we can't handle. Maybe the kid might make some sport of this afterall.ö she smirked. ôSo I take it they're all back at the dorm plotting?ö

ôNot... Exactly.ö the android hesitated slightly, immediately catching her master's fully attention. The last place I saw them heading into was Saotome-san's apartment building.ö

ôWhat?!ö

ôYes, they seemed to be in good spirits. I believe they brought snacks.ö

ôHeh heh, so Ranma's fraternizing with the enemy eh? That's got to be worth a few stabs right?ö Chachazero said with a hint of Hopefulness.

ôNo, Ranma and I have an agreement. He won't toss that aside casually.ö Eva said with finality. Though shortly after she clenched a fist tightly. ôThat doesn't mean he's getting off lightly for skipping out on training to have a house party.ö Eva took a moment to collect herself before making her way to the stairs. ôI'll be up in my room, don't disturb me unless it's important.ö

ôYes Mistress.ö

ô I say she's just sulking since Saotome stood her up.ö Chachazero spoke up slyly. The puppet gave a dramatic sigh as he eyess twitched in Chachamaru's direction unable to move any other part of her body without the proper ambient magic. ôReally though I can't believe the 'Dark Evangel' has fallen so far, playing games with the thousand master's son and getting all mopey over the gender bender. It's a dam- eh?ö she paused as she could feel a tug on her arm, a near invisible string tracing all the way back to the top of the stairs were Evangeline stood, just outside the door to her room. ôAw crap. Um, just kidding?.....Ahhh!ö the little puppet was flung across the room landing in an upside down heap on the other side of the room, limbs tangled chaotically. As the upstairs door slammed the little puppets eyes searched to room. ôUm little help here... anyone?ö

To be continued...

That's it for now. As said the last bit of the chapter will be up as I'm finishing tweaking it. It has a bunch more changes due to what I've done so it will be altered a lot. The next chapter will be completely different and a whole new beginning to me as this story goes.
 

Seed00

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This is even better than last time, and this time It's easier to think of them as the same person. Clone male Ranma was talking with Asuna, while real Ranko was playing poker.

Verry awkward moment there for Asuna, and poor Evangeline is miffed. I guess Ranma softened her up a bit. Add in Negi later on, and she's done for. Still looking forward to seeing Ranma's pactio card (or cards in this case).

Sayo and Mana are staking their claims really quick, and Mana gets what she wants.
 

Tsuki_CB

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Remind me again, does Konoka know the truth about Ranma and the clones? I think she does, but I can't remember.
 

Ryogas_BF

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Tsuki_CB said:
Remind me again, does Konoka know the truth about Ranma and the clones? I think she does, but I can't remember.
She does, but she plays along with the split a lot so I don't blame you for being confused sometimes :sweat2:
 

Tsuki_CB

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It's not that, it's just been awhile since I read the previous chapters so I couldn't remember. Really I should go back and read them, but I recently bought a 360 and have been catching up on epic games I've missed, first up was Gears of War. Now it's GoW 2, which I plan to finish before the third comes out.

Tis Epic.
 
This is somewhat better than the version on FFnet, though there were still a few minor errors I spotted in spelling and crap like that.

To be quite honest, I don't know why you're including Ranma's lack of card-game skills. The Gambling King arc was, first, one of the dumbest stories in the manga, serving no real purpose whatsoever; and second, Ranma later played card games of some kind with Hinako and had no issues at all. It just makes no real sense and isn't that funny, to be frank. The chapter would be better off without it.

It's your story though, so I won't harp on it. Likely I'll just skip over that scene when you get the new version up.
 

Tsuki_CB

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He included it because Kanoka is probably going to use it strong arm him in some way.
 

Dumbledork

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Sorry for only posting now, but I've only just finished rereading the whole fic.

There are some things I'm wondering about:

1) Why does Ranma keep the clone around after his first day of missing school, or even after he leaves the appartment once the party group has arrived? Is the clone somehow manipulating the real Ranma into jkeeping him around all the time?

2) Does Ranma know that Konoka has been training her magical skills?

3) If Ranma and Setsuna are opposed to Konoka forming a pactio with Negi why don't they simply tell the old man?


In the end I just hope that Ranma and the clone won't split completely. I hate split curse fics. More interesting would be Ranma developing a secondary personality of some sorts.
 

Lanceavalon

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Dumbledork said:
In the end I just hope that Ranma and the clone won't split completely. I hate split curse fics. More interesting would be Ranma developing a secondary personality of some sorts.
Oh hell no, and where the hell are you reading where split fics are so very numerous?!?

 
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