On the Naruto Talk: Update thread, we were talking about a story that recently updated: "Naruto: Game of the Year Edition".
My thesis is, I want to design the "game" that Naruto will be "playing", and he's going to chase after every cheap bug and exploit he can.
I'm going to recap the discussion in this first post.
Skip to the <s>second</s> <a href='http://z14.invisionfree.com/The_Fanfiction_Forum/index.php?showtopic=21529&st=0&#entry22024550' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>third post</a> and I'll start talking about my ideas---and soliciting input from you.
So here I am, re-reading this because I couldn't remember what exactly was going on and I remembered it was good.
I'm about mid way through chapter 10, and I can't help but notice something about the characterization. The characters aren't moving forward; hell they aren't even static, which would almost be preferable to what they are doing, which is going back and forth like a ball in a tennis match.
Its especially noticable in Sasuke and to a lesser degree Sakura, who can at one moment be impressed by or simply respect Naruto, and then at the next they're treating him like he's his canon self.
Even Naruto keeps slipping into different emotions for no disenable reason.
The only character that doesn't ping-pong around is the Kyuubi, who so far is firmly on the "I hate you, want to kill you, but know that its in my best interest to protect you. Also, I wouldn't mind getting laid through you vicariously."
IMHO that is not only the author's fault, but also is 'semi-justified' in-universe because the system is freaking out and doing shit, Like the Haku genben, the Gai sexing femmes and the Yamato Nadeshko Hinata.
Honestly, I'd considered that. But I get the feeling that that would be the justification rather than the reason, if that makes sense.
Well, I've now finished whats been written.
Its a great concept and genuinely interesting, but it has some dodgy characterization and the occasional bout of forced drama, and its peppered with small blink and you'll miss it inconsistances.
Mist also makes absolutely no sense. Like literally none.
Hinata's shoe horning into the plot while Sasuke is fazed out is a minus, and the general use of cliches is tiresome.
Still, these are all so ultimately low key that the frankly fasinating plot mosly overshadows them.
I'd give it a 7/10.
Right now I'm mostly looking forward to the next avatar, as well as finding out what avatars he's unlocked.
My thesis is, I want to design the "game" that Naruto will be "playing", and he's going to chase after every cheap bug and exploit he can.
I'm going to recap the discussion in this first post.
Skip to the <s>second</s> <a href='http://z14.invisionfree.com/The_Fanfiction_Forum/index.php?showtopic=21529&st=0&#entry22024550' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>third post</a> and I'll start talking about my ideas---and soliciting input from you.
Ashaman said:
shioran toushin said:
Ashaman said:
thermopyle2 said:
Naruto: GOTYE updated. <a href='http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4823029/18/Naruto_Game_of_the_Year_Edition' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4823029/18/Nar...he_Year_Edition</a>
I'm about mid way through chapter 10, and I can't help but notice something about the characterization. The characters aren't moving forward; hell they aren't even static, which would almost be preferable to what they are doing, which is going back and forth like a ball in a tennis match.
Its especially noticable in Sasuke and to a lesser degree Sakura, who can at one moment be impressed by or simply respect Naruto, and then at the next they're treating him like he's his canon self.
Even Naruto keeps slipping into different emotions for no disenable reason.
The only character that doesn't ping-pong around is the Kyuubi, who so far is firmly on the "I hate you, want to kill you, but know that its in my best interest to protect you. Also, I wouldn't mind getting laid through you vicariously."
Well, I've now finished whats been written.
Its a great concept and genuinely interesting, but it has some dodgy characterization and the occasional bout of forced drama, and its peppered with small blink and you'll miss it inconsistances.
Mist also makes absolutely no sense. Like literally none.
Hinata's shoe horning into the plot while Sasuke is fazed out is a minus, and the general use of cliches is tiresome.
Still, these are all so ultimately low key that the frankly fasinating plot mosly overshadows them.
I'd give it a 7/10.
Right now I'm mostly looking forward to the next avatar, as well as finding out what avatars he's unlocked.
Inaba said:
Yeah, I guess I'm going to have to give up on giving that fic a second shot.
Do the inclusion of video game elements ever pick up? Because from what I remember, they were there but pretty understated, being not much more than a plot device that permits a combination of resurrection, reincarnation, time travel, and reality rewriting popping up from time to time rather than being woven seamlessly into the story itself.
Do the inclusion of video game elements ever pick up? Because from what I remember, they were there but pretty understated, being not much more than a plot device that permits a combination of resurrection, reincarnation, time travel, and reality rewriting popping up from time to time rather than being woven seamlessly into the story itself.
Ashaman said:
Its still simmering under the surface, but occasionally something video game related will pop up.
Like Sub-routines for NPC's.á Hinata activated the Yamato Nadeshko sub-routine, which gave her a power and confidance boost, which allowed her to defeat someone who a month earlier had handed Neji his ass.á The fact that it was activated through a glitch not withstanding.á
Sakura also activates a Yandere subroutine, when that shouldn't have happened either.á Oh, and she activated it against Hinata.á As the Admin fixed it, Naruto experinced a blip in the game, and the next thing he knew Hinata had won.á
There's also been Skill Checks introduced,which so far has only been a (You need so many Charisma points to succeed). A Morality metre has been introduced too, but dunno what that's about yet.
Like Sub-routines for NPC's.á Hinata activated the Yamato Nadeshko sub-routine, which gave her a power and confidance boost, which allowed her to defeat someone who a month earlier had handed Neji his ass.á The fact that it was activated through a glitch not withstanding.á
Sakura also activates a Yandere subroutine, when that shouldn't have happened either.á Oh, and she activated it against Hinata.á As the Admin fixed it, Naruto experinced a blip in the game, and the next thing he knew Hinata had won.á
There's also been Skill Checks introduced,which so far has only been a (You need so many Charisma points to succeed). A Morality metre has been introduced too, but dunno what that's about yet.
Altered Nova said:
I didn't like GotYE. I read the first and most of the second chapter, and thought the writing was decent and the premise was interesting, but then I got to the point where a panicked ANBU murders the several hour old Naruto when he speaks aloud. And then the next chapter he magically converts the entire Uchiha clan to his side by defending their heir from a bully. My suspension of disbelief shattered and I lost any interest in reading further.
I am wondering though, is there ever a point where Naruto despairs at the realization that his entire life is a lie, nothing but a pointless video game simulation, everyone else a non-sentient npc program? I don't think I could take that revelation nearly as well as he does.
I am wondering though, is there ever a point where Naruto despairs at the realization that his entire life is a lie, nothing but a pointless video game simulation, everyone else a non-sentient npc program? I don't think I could take that revelation nearly as well as he does.
daniel_gudman said:
The generally accepted answer to the Simulation Problem is, "so what?"
That is, if the entire universe is a simulation running on some super-vast computer "one layer up", then what exactly can you do differently? How does it change the "way you live", ie, "the way you interact with the universe"?
If the "non-sentient npc program"s are Turing-capable (as they demonstrably are), than literally nobody has figured out a way to distinguish them from "sentient beings", let alone a dumb kid like Naruto.
But, the proof that Naruto is somehow "important" might matter... well, I guess the end question, and one that Naruto as a generally positive guy would ask is, "knowing what I know now, what should I do differently?"
...
Actually, what I would do (if I was Naruto in this situation) is became <a href='http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/DangerouslyGenreSavvy' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>Dangerously Genre Savvy</a>, find the <a href='http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/DiskOneNuke' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>Disk One Nuke</a> and generally <a href='http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/FakeSkill' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>cheat</a>, until I got to where I could <a href='http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/NewGamePlus' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>really cheat</a>. And we know from some of the peripheral material (like that one credit roll) that he's at least got a Famicom analog....
Shit, now I want to write a version where Naruto really does all that.
That is, if the entire universe is a simulation running on some super-vast computer "one layer up", then what exactly can you do differently? How does it change the "way you live", ie, "the way you interact with the universe"?
If the "non-sentient npc program"s are Turing-capable (as they demonstrably are), than literally nobody has figured out a way to distinguish them from "sentient beings", let alone a dumb kid like Naruto.
But, the proof that Naruto is somehow "important" might matter... well, I guess the end question, and one that Naruto as a generally positive guy would ask is, "knowing what I know now, what should I do differently?"
...
Actually, what I would do (if I was Naruto in this situation) is became <a href='http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/DangerouslyGenreSavvy' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>Dangerously Genre Savvy</a>, find the <a href='http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/DiskOneNuke' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>Disk One Nuke</a> and generally <a href='http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/FakeSkill' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>cheat</a>, until I got to where I could <a href='http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/NewGamePlus' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>really cheat</a>. And we know from some of the peripheral material (like that one credit roll) that he's at least got a Famicom analog....
Shit, now I want to write a version where Naruto really does all that.
Hardcore Heathen said:
I'd read it. To the ideas forum?