Naruto Reimu's Writer Notes

Daneel Rush

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#76
I'm BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACK!!!!!!!!!

.........ahem. Just read.

Uchiha Madara

- Madara wasn't the first person to possess the Sharingan. He was just the first to possess it naturally. And he was the first to achieve Mangekyo.

- He would always consider the successful capture of the Nine-Tailed Demon Fox's Hoshi no Tama to be his greatest accomplishment. Sure, the Kitsune was sleeping and all, but, hey! It's the friggin' Nine-Tailed Demon Fox!!!

- The Hyuuga Clan was beyond shocked when Hyuuga Fuyuki's sister, Mawari, gave birth to a child without the Byakugan. Despite the shame and the humiliation that ensued, she loved her child and never bore any ill will towards him, despite his "deficiency."

When he developed the first tomoe at the age of 8, Mawari knew her sacrifices had been rewarded.

- The battle that created the landmark currently known as "The Valley of the End" didn't actually end there. It ended in Suwa.

- Madara believed his Mangekyo was powerful enough to dominate even Gods. He was holding this as his triumph card in case he had to challenge the First. When the time came to pull out his last resort, he found out he had always been wrong.

Horribly wrong.

Hina still goes into fits of giggles when her thoughts stray to the original Uchiha.



Kyuubi, set two

- Since it was a youngling two-tails, Kyuubi was ambitious. That ambition, combined with unparalleled cunning (even for Kitsune standards) and a talent to always stay several steps ahead of its opponents allowed him to gain more tails and more power. Kyuubi didn't have a set goal. If anything, it just wanted to see how far it could go.

Nothing more, nothing else.

- When it gained his ninth and last tail, transcending the boundaries of a physical, Kitsune body and becoming a living, thinking chakra engine, it thought it had reached its limit. However, there were still beings more powerful than it. Nothing but the most powerful A-Rank Supernals and the obscenely powerful S-Ranks could defeat it. Could it break through this final cap it had reached, and grasp the boundaries of creation like them?

Even as it slept, its disembodied and nigh-omniscient mind mused and pondered, looking for the elusive answer.

- Eventually, Kyuubi turned to a Supernal Art it hadn't used in centuries: Divination. What it saw surprised him and intrigued him immensely...until it clicked.

Kyuubi had its answer.

- Kyuubi didn't even try to resist the Shiki Fuuin. It had started laughing the moment it saw the human blond on the Frog Boss' head, holding a newborn human child in his arms. Kyuubi could only laugh.

Yes, this was the answer.

- Kyuubi discarded its name a very long time ago. It has never been known by humans and only a few Supernals still remember it.

- Kyuubi saw Uchiha Madara as a delusional fool.

Was it really possible that the pathetic human couldn't realize that the only reason he had been able to "steal" his Hoshi no Tama was because he had allowed it?

- Kyuubi thinks Dragons taste like chicken.


Sarutobi

- Due to the unnecessarily complex Hokage succession rules, Sarutobi had to include an statement in his will with the names of his chosen Fifth and Sixth Hokages, in case, they couldn't be appointed in any other way.

It's interesting to know that, no matter what, Naruto would have worn the cloak and hat sooner or later.

- Sarutobi was dead serious when he put Naruto's name on the Rokudaime slot.

He was pulling the mother of all pranks when he put Naruto in the Godaime slot, too.

- It's worth mentioning that the last statement of the will declared that Naruto's appointment as Godaime was, in fact, a joke, and shouldn't be taken seriously.

- Sarutobi does, indeed, know every jutsu created in Konoha by Konoha shinobi.

Every. Single. One.

- Konohamaru is Sarutobi's granddaughter only by adoption.

She is his daughter by blood.

- Sarutobi's title as "God of Shinobi," is a little itty bit more...literal than most people would think.

Orochimaru would find out in the most utterly painful of ways.
 

Luthorne

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#78
Reading the Madara section makes me snicker.

Reading the Kyuubi section makes me want to time travel to when this has been fully written and see what the heck Kyuubi has in mind...as well as thinking Kyuubi is awesome.

Reading the Sarutobi section makes me want to laugh maniacally. Especially the last part. :evil2:
 

Daneel Rush

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#79
Deidara

- The sheer idea of removing the explosive component of his clay is anathema to Deidara's nindo.

Shiki never revealed, not even to his wife, what he had to do for Deidara to give him the non-explosive clay for Naruto's mediums.

- Deidara never said this to any of his fellow Iwa-nin, but a part of him always wanted to have been born in Konoha.

He had only heard the best comments on Konohagakure's ANBU Demolition Corps...

- When Marisa asked Naruto which of his many battles he deemed the most AWESOME, everyone expected him to mention his Itachi, Taisho, or even Fuuka, but Naruto didn't hesitate to declare "Deidara."

This was followed by a rather rambunctious recollection of the aerial battle between the Akatsuki member versus Naruto and the ADC over the skies of Konoha that left little Marisa with stars on her eyes.

In Naruto's words: "Explosions here! Explosions there! Explosions EVERYWHERE!!! Deidara releasing stream after stream of his clay bombs, the ADC offering support fire from the ground, Yatagarasu and Deidara's clay bird outmaneuvering each other in a sky of flames...if that wasn't the MOST AWESOME THING EVER, I don't know what was."

The rest of Konoha's population would strongly disagree.


Tobi, set two

- His spoon he got from Itachi. His pot he got from Naruto.

- By the time Tobi becomes an official member of Akatsuki he has (accidentally, of course) gathered so much dirt on the rest of the members he could have gotten away with blackmailing them without fear of reprisal.

Of course, this explains why Tobi was made an official member of Akatsuki.

- Tobi's ridiculous luck can only be overcome by Naruto's.

Their score in games of chance would end Naruto 63 - Tobi 49.

- Only Ryuuguu Mayu would get to see Tobi's face while he was alive.
 

Tenmu

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#80
I pray to all that is good that the whole 'Tobi is Madara and when Madara awakens we will never see Tobi again' thing does not happen. :sisi:
 

Luthorne

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#81
Mm, I doubt Daneel's going that route, but if they do, it's my opinion that it'll be so well-written that it'll manage to be awesome anyways. :sisi:
 

Daneel Rush

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#82
Uchiha Mikoto

- Uchiha Mikoto grew up without a family. Her mother, Uchiha Eri, a nineteen-years-old Chuunin, returned from a simple C-Rank mission pregnant and insane, muttering nonsense about "dancing in the moon" and "the new age."

Eri died of a heart attack a day after Mikoto's birth, laughing insanely and raising her arms to the ceiling, claiming "I'M COMING!!! I'M COMING!!! WAIT FOR ME, MY SILVER GOD!!!"

- A few hours before her death, Uchiha Eri gave Mikoto her name. She said "Uchiha no Mikoto." The nurse rolled her eyes and ignored what she believed was a noble's naming scheme.

- When she was asked to write the name in the birth registry, however, Eri strangely wrote it as "??????" (Mikoto Uchiha). The nurse assumed it was another nonsensical whim of the insane woman and "corrected" it, switching the order of the names.

The nurse assumed that Eri had written Mikoto-Uchiha. What Eri actually intended to write was Miko-to-Uchiha.

- Uchiha Fugaku drew the ire of the Clan Council when he expressed his intention of courting the orphan girl.

What the Council didn't know was that Fugaku had actually done his homework.

- Only a handful of people would know, but, in the end, the most special of the Uchihas was never Itachi.

Or Sasuke.

Definitely not Madara.


Anko

- It was Sarutobi himself who took a week-old Anko to the orphanage to be taken care of.

It was also he who came up with the name "Mitarashi Anko."

- Anko has no memories of her life before getting the Curse Seal, and the period between Orochimaru's "love bite" and her escape from his clutches would remain blurry until the end of her days.

- It was Houraisan Saya who found an emaciated, broken Mitarashi Anko, who was desperately trying to reach the only home she knew, Konoha, even when she was way past her limit.

- Orochimaru didn't know Anko's origins when he took her in. He adopted her because he saw some value in her as a specimen, not because he knew anything special about her.

He did find out eventually, but it made no difference to him.

He did find it amusing, though.

- Sarutobi shared the secret of Anko's origins with Jiraiya, Minato and the Houraisan couple; so that they would protect the truth should something happen to him.

- After Orochimaru, Hyuuga Hinata would be the next person to find out.

She was quite surprised.

- All in all, Anko had a good life. She lived enough to see Orochimaru die (for good). Naruto was the son she never asked for. Ino became the daughter she would have liked to have one day. She would live in the memories of many of Konoha's males...and females, too.

Her only regret would be not being able to see the finale of the crazy soap opera that was Naruto's love life.


Jiraiya, set two

- Jiraiya partly disliked Minato's decision of entrusting Naruto to Shiki instead of to his sensei. He could understand Minato's reasons, though. That didn't stop him from trying to help the boy, even if, by the time they met, there was nothing much Jiraiya could do for him.

Jiraiya always thought he had failed Naruto. Naruto would be eternally grateful to the old pervert, just for Rasengan. If the Fuujin jutsu series built his reputation, Rasengan and its subsequent variations cemented his position as the God of OVERKILL.

- Jiraiya's Icha-Icha legacy would remain in "good hands." Reimu had a major seizure when twelve-year-old Marisa showed her the draft of "Icha-Icha Renewal: Young Blossoming Lillies."

It was a (brilliant) prank, of course, but the REAL "Icha-Icha Renewal," released three years later, would be acclaimed by the masses, who would never find out it was written by a fifteen-years-old girl with no hands-on knowledge of sex whatsoever.
 

marthf1

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#83
Ah, these are just awesome. Too bad they will remain mere comments about the characters for the foreseeable future.
 

zeebee1

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#84
When did the yondaime entrust Naruto to Shiki? Wouldn't that mean that Shiki should have taken him in sooner?
 

Daneel Rush

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#86
zeebee1 said:
When did the yondaime entrust Naruto to Shiki? Wouldn't that mean that Shiki should have taken him in sooner?
In the first chapters Shiki mentioned a promise he made to the Yondaime. As for why Shiki didn't adopt Naruto since the beginning, well, it's mostly a matter of wording. It will all make sense by the end of this chronicle.
 

Daneel Rush

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#87
SirBino said:
Shiki

The Yondaime

Marisa
Seriously, which part of NO MORE REQUESTS don't you people get? As much as I enjoy writing these things, I have an actual story to write. I haven't been able to write the nekomimi!Mikoto scene yet! I'm so behind schedule......yeah, sure, I SHOULD be studying Tissue Engineering, but......agh, I suck.

Enough rambling. The point is: NO MORE FACTS until further notice. Okay?
 

fenixzero

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#88
Daneel Rush said:
SirBino said:
Shiki

The Yondaime

Marisa
Seriously, which part of NO MORE REQUESTS don't you people get? As much as I enjoy writing these things, I have an actual story to write. I haven't been able to write the nekomimi!Mikoto scene yet! I'm so behind schedule......yeah, sure, I SHOULD be studying Tissue Engineering, but......agh, I suck.

Enough rambling. The point is: NO MORE FACTS until further notice. Okay?
The problem is that you are still add facts from the before you said no more requests.

Just add a line saying that you are working on the backlog and still not excepting new requests.
 

Daneel Rush

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#90
I just suddenly felt like making these. Enjoy!

Namikaze Minato

- While Minato was always wary of Orochimaru, he was very grateful when the Snake Sannin was thoughtful enough to summon him via Edo Tensei.

- His battle with Houraisan Naruto was quite enlightening. It wasn't much of a battle itself, Minato being leagues beyond Naruto's level at the time (the boy's original jutsu impressed him quite a bit, though), it showed the Fourth that his village was in good hands. It also allowed him to warn the boy of his suspicions regarding Kyuubi.

- Minato is the only non-Supernal in history who has defeated the Houraisan couple in battle. Not even Shiki's and Saya's perfect teamwork was a match for Hiraishin no Jutsu.

- Minato will eventually make it out of the Death God's stomach, after making a deal with the Lord of Endings. He thought it wasn't that bad of a deal. It would be a rather boring way to spend eternity, but it still didn't compare to the endless nothingness of the Shinigami's insides.


Houraisan Shiki

- Shiki never forgave himself for dragging Saya along with him when he made his deal with the Death God. He loathed himself for his selfishness and cowardice -he knew he'd go insane if he spent who-knows-how-long all by himself-, but he never regretted it.

He just tried not to think about it.

- Jiraiya, when he was still a Chuunin, jokingly asked Shiki what he loved the most, Saya or Fuuinjutsu. Shiki, man of few smiles, only sipped his cup of sake and replied: "Saya, of course. Most unfortunately, my seals cannot love me back." Saya was about to glomp him when he finished: "On the other side, my seals have and will never betray me." Jiraiya wisely chose to stay silent. The look on Saya's face said everything.

- There's a very simple reason Shiki has not and will not cheat on his wife, ever. Many centuries ago, when they were innocent, ordinary humans, they made an oath together. Amidst giggling and blushing, they swore to love and respect each other until the day they died and even beyond.

That day Shiki remembers as the happiest day of his life, and he would never stain that memory, no matter what.

- Much to his chagrin, that oath didn't extend to his subconscious, it seems. Yukina, the Twins' mother, was one of two occasional protagonists of his erotic dreams, even after her death.

Hina was the other.

The dreams involving Yukina and Hina made him feel ashamed the day afterwards.

Those involving Yukina and Saya or Saya and Hina made him feel a bit uneasy.

The ones involving Yukina, Hina and Saya made him giggle like an idiot for days afterwards.

He called them "Epic Dreams," and he always looked forward to those.

Saya did, too, albeit unknowingly.

She never found out why, from time to time, Shiki suddenly went into a sexual frenzy of legendary proportions.

- If he had had a choice, Shiki would have never learned how to fight. He knew, however, that he'd need to know how to defend himself if he wanted to stay alive in such a conflicting world, so he learned how to use his Fuuinjutsu as a combat method. However, most of the time he just left the fighting to his wife, who seemed to revel in it.

Ironically enough, Shiki would die in battle. He died to save the woman he loved, so he guessed it was okay.

- In his dying throes, Shiki saw the figure of the Death God looking down at his fallen form. His eyes would meet the hollow pits of the Death Lord's, and he would understand. He would realize just why the Death God agreed to their deal on their first place.

Shiki could do nothing but chuckle.

His last thoughts were: "I really should have read the fine print, shouldn't I?"


Houraisan Marisa

- By the time Marisa was born, the world as a whole had decided that no one, no one, could get even close to Naruto's levels of OVERKILL. They decided Naruto's power was the absolute limit of OVERKILL.

Marisa laughed at the world's face, said "Limit? What limit?" and proved them wrong.

- While Rock Lee overcame his disability by becoming a Master of Taijutsu, Marisa overcame hers by becoming a Mistress of Mass Destruction. She would enter the annals of history as the only ninja who made it to Jounin without even learning the Tree-Climbing exercise.

Her father could not be more proud. To Marisa, that's everything that mattered.

Besides, how many people could brag of having turned Water Country into Water Archipielago?

- Marisa was quite aware of the effect she had on Reimu. She even exploited it for her own amusement; after all, there were few things more adorable than a flustered Hyuuga Reimu. However, she would never take her teasing too far.

She loved Reimu way too much to hurt her like that.

- Marisa was no idiot. She clearly understood the full extent of her feelings towards her father. While she never acted on those taboo feelings, she never acted against them, either. It led to a rather sad and frustrating life.

It didn't help that Naruto was such a caring and devoted father, either.

- She never achieved her dream of becoming her father's successor, the Shichidaime ("Or is it Nanadaime? Papa!"). She did, however have a very successful career as the Supreme Ultra-Commander (self-appointed title) of the ANBU Demolition Corps.

Among her fellow ADC-ers, she was known as the "Avatar of Awesome."

- At the age of thirty, Houraisan Marisa disappeared from the face of the earth.
 

Kiroi Senko

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#91
These are all extremely interesting.

If these facts are anything to go by, this story is going to be dark.


I love it.
 

Mrriddler

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#92
I agree on the dark part, but it's probably premature. It could be that Daneel's just using this thread to get a "feel" of how certain plot twists might be accepted. Sort of like a sampling poll. :p If he were to use ALL of these stuff, his story would get very nasty, very quickly.

That said, some components could definitely be used. Nothing makes a story grow stale and bland faster than a lack of conflicts. After all, you can't appreciate the dizzying highs if you never suffered the abysmal lows. Case in point would be the twist between Shiki and Saya. I certainly hope you include it or at least allude to their little bump at some point. It adds an important dimension, I think, to their relationship.

Oh yeah, great work overall, Daneel. Fascinating stuff, as usual.
 

Kiroi Senko

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#93
Hinata going "evil" is really kind of heart wrenching :(

And if Sasuke does indeed go crazy, I also feel sorry for him, unlike canon!Sasuke.

Gai :(


WHY MUST GAI DIE IN EVERY FIC :(
 

JiigarGhen

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#94
Kiroi Senko said:
Hinata going "evil" is really kind of heart wrenching :(

And if Sasuke does indeed go crazy, I also feel sorry for him, unlike canon!Sasuke.

Gai :(


WHY MUST GAI DIE IN EVERY FIC :(
Well....because the Gates are literally tailored for him to die heroically. Pretty much, in all stories that involve battle, there will be a time when the heroes cannot win. It may be cliche, but during those times, one person will unfailingly volunteer to act as a rearguard. And Gai....and all users of the Gates...are the perfect rearguard. After all, when you know you're going to die, there is nothing stopping you from going all out to protect those that you love. The Death Gate simply expediates death, as I doubt any Gate user would open it for anything but an otherwise impossible situation.

It's true though, Gai is awesome. I find that he and Lee can be the most interesting characters to write, especially if you attribute their odd attitudes to the fact that they _know_ someday they are going to open the last Gate.
 

Mrriddler

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#95
Nice explanation, JiigarGhen. I have never thought of it in that fashion, but it does make a lot of sense.
 

zeebee1

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#96
Hinata's not going evil. She's finishing her path towards insanity.
 

Megaolix

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#97
Before anyone complain, this isn't necroing. Daneel Rush told me that it was never closed.

Anyway, here are the 3 names I want.

Suika

Lee (How come now one ever asked about him?)

Reimu

I ask the last one because of the

- At the age of thirty, Houraisan Marisa disappeared from the face of the earth.

I can't help but think... No, KNOW that Reimu is an important part of that fact.
 

maheshjr2000

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#98
Third

Fourth(if already done, Tsunade)

Hanabi(no alternates I LOVE hanabi :D)
 

DeathGod666

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#99
Ok so Hanabi is the mother of his children right?

First kiss and he 'brutally' ended her career as a Shinobi, which can mean that she would not return to being a shinobi to take care of Marisa right?

Also another guess is that Reimu is the daughter of Hinata right?

Since depending on when Hinata died she was either the clan heir or the Head of the clan so that means Reimu would be her daughter right?
 

Daneel Rush

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Tsukiji Suika

- The day she met Houraisan Naruto she realized her days in the world were approaching their end. That young boy represented the winds of change, in which the old disappears to give way to the new, allowing the renovation and evolution of the living world. And she was old. Very old.

- This did not stop her from showering the boy with motherly affection, something she seemed to possess unlimited amounts of. That is, when she wasn't training him.

Naruto would remember her as "that crazy frog lady with huge tits and a sadistic streak."

- Only one of the Four Great Elemental Gods would survive the Dragonwar.

It was not her.


Rock Lee

- Lee, since he has memory, has lived with his father, a humble retired tailor whose prodigious hands can no longer work their magic. They are a humble family who has managed to survive with a combination of luck and the father's savvy money management in his younger days. Lee has never asked about his mother, no matter how much the curiosity eats away at him.

Somehow, his father's face when he thinks his son is not looking says everything.

- Lee will be forced to make a painful decision. In the end, it won't matter.

He will watch his mother die in front of his eyes.

- The worst thing that could have ever happened to Lee was drawing the attention of The Lady of Snakes.

Sure, it was not really his fault (more like Gai's and Hina's), but, really, he could have lived without the hassle.


Reimu

- Some would call her "The Little Goddess." Some would call her "The Perfect Ninja." Some would call her "Uchiha Itachi on Steroids." Some even called her "That Fucking Sue," whatever that meant. Regardless of title, Reimu was the most talented ninja in the entire history of Konohagakure, second only to the Fourth. She would also be remembered as the Greatest Taijutsu Master in History, above luminaries such as Maito Gai, Rock Lee, Hyuuga Hinata, Hyuuga Hanabi and Houraisan Saya, as well as the only True Master of Houraisan no Fukyuu no Ryuu.

- Reimu's life ended the day Houraisan Marisa disappeared. Naruto's direct descendant was the light that kept her warm and gave her the strength to persevere under the crushing pressure of her responsibilities as clan leader, counselor to the Seventh Hokage and the world's expectations as Konoha's greatest. Without her support, her confident, her loyal companion, her one true love, Reimu simply could not go on anymore.

The stress began to kill her, and her beauty and youthfulness quickly began to fade.

- Seven years later, at the age of 37, a destroyed Reimu was on her deathbed. Without a child to succeed her, she was forgotten and forsaken by her clan, which succumbed to discord and inner succession wars.

Her nurse and only companion in her last days was Houraisan Saya, Naruto's third daughter, who could only watch in tearful silence how the greatest woman she had ever known succumbed to her own sadness.

- In the last night, Reimu's mind completely broke. Memories and reality mixed up, and Reimu spent her final hours in delirium, desperately calling the names of those she had loved and lost: Naruto, the man she had loved as a father, and Marisa, the young, shining girl who claimed Reimu's heart. Beautiful, kind Saya, unable to watch Reimu's agony a minute longer, gave her friend and heroine one last moment of illusory happiness. Pretending to be Marisa, she responded to Reimu's sorrowful declarations of affection in kind.

They made love.

- The next morning, Saya woke up to find an empty bed. Reimu was gone. Like Marisa before her, she disappeared from the face of the earth.

With her passing, the Golden Age of Konohagakure came to a bitter end.
 
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