Snowblind

Ina_meishou

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#1
Months before his thirteenth summer, the men of the tribe had left. Just two months before he could have gone with them.

Sometimes, the shame of that burned in his liver, the thought that he could have joined the warband, found a man's glory in combat. It was a long journey to the earth kingdoms, he would have been of age before they saw battle. He could have...

Usually, he was far too busy to feel much of anything. Even as a boy, work was nearly endless, and with the men gone, all but the oldest of the elders, those too infirm to do much but sit and eat, the men's work fell to the shoulders of the boys.

And then, after a particularly bad winter, Sokka found that he was the only man in the village, the next oldest boys not of age until highsummer came again, and his work became not just that of a man, but of a chief.

He had thought, as a boy, that he knew what hard work was. When he took up a mans job, he had looked back on that childhood folly with a smile. Now, he knew that even a man's work was nothing before that of a leader.

Fortunately, winter had come, and the food was gathered, and there was little to do but huddle within the warren of the winter camp and keep track of the children and keep everyone from killing each other in a fit of winterfever, and make sure nobody ate more than their share of the food, and make sure the children learned the stories, and keep the lodges in repair and keep himself and the older boys well practiced with weapons for the hunts to come. That was enough to begin.

By the time the sun returned, and the stores of oilfish and frozen meat and blubber ran low, managing people had become bearable, and adding summer chores on top of it was only felt like an iceblock settling on his shoulders, rather than a berg. A heavy, but manageable weight.

And anyway, there was too much to do to worry about rest. There was meat to bring in, and bone and hides and snowroot and seaplums and the special sands and stones and dyes from the shallow waters off of hunguli'kituk, the serpent's point. There was carving to be done, and repairs, sealdogs to tend and train and break to harness, boys to teach the spear and club and boomarang. There were times, in the endless sun of highsummer, where he simply forgot to sleep at all.

And then when the darkness fell for the first time in weeks, there were the ceremonies of manhood, the ice-dodging, the hunts. There was the long vigil in the sweat-lodge, pouring water onto smoldering, tarry stones dug by hand from the seabed and telling the legends to the three who reached their thirteenth summer that year.

By the time his father had been gone two years, Sokka had entirely forgotten his shame at being left behind. His father had known he was the eldest left, should the elders die. His father had trusted him to lead the village well if that came, and he had done it. Every time he looked at the solid, well made domes of the family houses, the solid wall surrounding the village, well chosen iceblocks carefully stacked and the melted and refrozen into one piece, the lodge, whalebone struts and poles supporting clean hides and packed all round with snow and ice for insulation, he felt his chest lift with pride.

His people were thriving.

By the third year, he didn't even think of being left behind, except to wish that his father would return, to wish his father could see that his trust hadn't been misplaced.

In fact, by that time, Sokka only had one real problem left, outside the usual trials of life on the ice, and it was one that just wouldn't go away. There were almost a dozen men to work now, grown in the years since the warriors left to join the war, food was still plentiful, and the other villages had been quiet, most of their warriors had left as well.

But his sister.

She wasn't harming anyone, really, and there wasn't any cause to be ôdealing with herö, not yet.

But she was so odd...

It wasn't just a woman thing either, he'd asked Kanna, he hadn't thought of her as Gaanggan, Grandmother, in almost a year, and she didn't understand Katara either. Nobody in the village could. She didn't cook, or clean carcases, or store food. She didn't mend or make clothing, or any of the other tasks that women did. Sokka had had to take Tuklii, a girl of eight who's mother had died in childbirth and who's father had walked into a whiteout not an hour after telling stories as cheerfully as any last winter, into their families lodge to help Kanna with the work.

Katara spent all her time out on the ice, doing spirits knew what with waterbending, not that she seemed to accomplish much. Her tricks were useful, sometimes, when they worked. But sometimes they didn't work, and sometimes, too many times, they did just what they shouldn't, and ruined the labor of a day or more. He knew the men wouldn't take any action without his word. He'd lead them all through the rites, shepherded them all into manhood. And he lead them well. But the women, especially the ones of and near Katara's age, were beginning to talk behind his back, and his father had always said that that was a danger-sign as clear as a sealwolf's bark.

So he'd followed her out today, leaving Mungka in charge of the village, it was good practice for Mungka anyway. He would be leading hunts before long, best get used to authority in the village, where everyone knew what to do anyway, and nothing seriously dangerous was likely to happen.

She'd walked a long way, almost a twelfth of the day, and days were long this close to highsummer. He followed, careful to use the tiny folds of ice and occasional drifts of snow to keep out of her sight.

But when he saw where she was going, he couldn't help but stop and stare.

There was a hole in the icepack, some quirk of current and pressure and sunlight and who knew what had contrived to open a pool three times as wide across as a foxwhale was long. And in the center of that pool, surrounded by a thin ledge of ice, was a perfectly smooth sphere of what looked like impossibly clear crystal.

None of that was what caught his gaze though. It was strange certainly, but he'd seen stranger things on the ice before. Two days travel to the south, near the somewhat larger village of Wangitutuklan, there was a soaring spire of Ice as black as the midnight sky, and almost a year ago, he'd had to pull Katugnuk out of the arms of an ice hag, the man still screaming and fighting him to get back to the crooning half-woman despite the ruin her claws had made of his face.

But in the center of that sphere was a human shape. Sitting cross-legged, dressed in pale oranges and yellows, and covered in swirling arrow-shaped lines that shone with a blue light that nearly matched the intensity of the sun.

When he wrenched his eyes back to his sister, she had already navagated across the lake, hopping from one small chunk of ice to another, and was frowning hard at the surface of the sphere, at an area he noticed now was worn and pitted.

And then she swept her arms up, hand flowing back away from the sphere and past her face.

And slowly, slowly, the surface of the sphere followed, first tiny chips of ice, then trickles of water, then a slow, steady stream of it. Pulling away from the ice that bound the...whatever it was and into the pond.

He didn't realize he was on his feet, screaming at her to stop, until the stream of water failed and she whirled, the look of joy on her face shifting to fear. But she didn't stop, she turned and gestured frantically, and where before there had been a steam, now a jet of water shot out of the sphere, a hole appearing almost instantly and burrowing deeper and deeper. He forced himself to slow down as he reached the waterline. Leaping on ice was hard enough when it wasn't drifting on water and he wasn't running, but every time he glanced up and saw his sister trying to free...the thing...he found his feet moving faster. He had just caught his footing on the ring of flat ice around the sphere when the jet of water cut off, and the air shook with the terrible, horrifying sound of ice shattering.

Time slowed as he traced the jagged line that leaped up from the hole his sister had made, racing up over the crest of the sphere, and then the world disappeared in a whirlwind of fog and ice shards and air that seemed to glow.

When it cleared, he pulled himself back to his feet and took stock. Katara was on the ground, caught, by the lump on her head, by a chunk of flying ice. But she looked alright except for that and a few scrapes. He was much the same, though his parka would need mending when he returned home.

He looked at the lip of the sphere, it had been meters thick, but the thing inside it had vanished.

Slowly, he forced himself to climb up to the lip and look down. In the bottom of the hollow formed by the last remnants of the sphere, there was a giant, white furred...something, an animal of some sort.

Sitting on the back of the animal, in what looked like a giant saddle, was a boy, dressed in yellow and orange, covered in no longer glowing tattoos.

The boy looked up.

ôwha laaitah shen maam dehmun sohng bahnliö

Sokka blinked. That didn't sound like any Water tongue he'd ever heard, or any of the Earth languages he'd half learned from the very rare traders. Or the Fire speech he vaguely remembered from nightmares of the raids during his youth.

What on earth was this boy?


O0O

Not sure if I should hold this as a short oneshot, or the prologue of a somewhat longer rewrite. regardless, this was sparked by several things. One, my own nagging frustration with canon. As usual, it's not meant to be slotted into canon, or to fit every nuance of the canon characterizations, in both cases because I find some aspects of them utterly infuriating, above and beyond my frustration with people for being people.

Also as usual, any thoughts, comments, criticisms, etc. are greatly appreciated, and will be rewarded with sparkly rainbows and cookies, maybe a pony or two.

Or nothing at all, probably nothing at all.
 

biigoh

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#2
Much liking this... :lol:

So which languages for which nation?
 
#3
Very intriguing. MOAR is requested.
 

clockworkchaos

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#4
in both cases because I find some aspects of them utterly infuriating, above and beyond my frustration with people for being people
May I ask which?
 

Ina_meishou

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#5
clockworkchaos said:
in both cases because I find some aspects of them utterly infuriating, above and beyond my frustration with people for being people
May I ask which?
oh any number of things. The global language, the lack of any real cultural differences besides one nation being fairly militaristic and one being sexist, the anachronisms, people living lifestyles that just wouldn't work given their environment and tech level, characters being highly inconsistent, contradicting what appear to be deeply held principles routinely, characters lacking skills that they have every reason to have. I could go on.

Essentially, look for the things that are obviously compromises to make the show suitable for children, despite the fairly complex and muddled nature of it's premise and overall plot, and those are aspects I dislike.
 

clockworkchaos

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#6
Ina_meishou said:
clockworkchaos said:
in both cases because I find some aspects of them utterly infuriating, above and beyond my frustration with people for being people
May I ask which?
oh any number of things. The global language, the lack of any real cultural differences besides one nation being fairly militaristic and one being sexist, the anachronisms, people living lifestyles that just wouldn't work given their environment and tech level, characters being highly inconsistent, contradicting what appear to be deeply held principles routinely, characters lacking skills that they have every reason to have. I could go on.

Essentially, look for the things that are obviously compromises to make the show suitable for children, despite the fairly complex and muddled nature of it's premise and overall plot, and those are aspects I dislike.
.....

Alright. What does turning Katara into someone who refused to do any sort of women's work have to do with making it more realistic? I'm not condemning it, I'm just not sure where your going. Because honestly that feels less realistic to me. The only time in show she got really angry (aside from one one-off joke about sewing) with the feminist thing was when she was refused waterbending. Which is something specifically noted in her culture as being available to both sexes.

I'm not condemning, I'd just like to see your reasoning. If it's plot related and would be spoiling things, feel free to PM me.
 

Prince Charon

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#7
Interesting.
 

Ina_meishou

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#8
clockworkchaos said:
Ina_meishou said:
clockworkchaos said:
in both cases because I find some aspects of them utterly infuriating, above and beyond my frustration with people for being people
May I ask which?
oh any number of things. The global language, the lack of any real cultural differences besides one nation being fairly militaristic and one being sexist, the anachronisms, people living lifestyles that just wouldn't work given their environment and tech level, characters being highly inconsistent, contradicting what appear to be deeply held principles routinely, characters lacking skills that they have every reason to have. I could go on.

Essentially, look for the things that are obviously compromises to make the show suitable for children, despite the fairly complex and muddled nature of it's premise and overall plot, and those are aspects I dislike.
.....

Alright. What does turning Katara into someone who refused to do any sort of women's work have to do with making it more realistic? I'm not condemning it, I'm just not sure where your going. Because honestly that feels less realistic to me. The only time in show she got really angry (aside from one one-off joke about sewing) with the feminist thing was when she was refused waterbending. Which is something specifically noted in her culture as being available to both sexes.

I'm not condemning, I'd just like to see your reasoning. If it's plot related and would be spoiling things, feel free to PM me.
Its just an extension of the very thing you noted. It's not that she's deliberately refusing to do any women work ever as some obscure point of principle. It's that while waterbending is technically open to both sexes in the southern water tribes, currently nobody knows how the hell to do it. Katara is the only one with the gift.

So while usually, she'd be perfectly proper, spending her days learning bending arts and doing the kind of work that used bending, because she is entirely self taught, and not particularly useful with it, many of the villagers sort of assume she'll move to the usual women's work by default. It's casual sexism, rather than the institutionalized version in the Northern tribe.

Also remember that this is written mostly from Sokka's point of view so far. And while Sokka has managed, by luck and gumption mostly, to be a fairly successful chief, he's still fifteen, and the girl in question's sister. Katara does in fact help with some chores, not as much as a non-bending woman would be expected to but some, and keeps her own clothes in repair and the like. Sokka is just sort of blind to it.
 

lask

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#11
The sexism shouldn't be overplayed though - remember that their grandmother ran away from a loving marage to someone it's implied she cared about because she found the treatment of women so supirior in the Southern Water Tribe. They might not be as progressive as the fire nation (the fire nation isn't far from having it's first female Fire Lord - Zuko is still alive, but Azula is the one favored to get the throne, so yes, they are progressive. Their also racist imperialst's and firm belivers in the 'Fire-man's Burden'), but they aren't that bad.
 
#12
lask said:
The sexism shouldn't be overplayed though - remember that their grandmother ran away from a loving marage to someone it's implied she cared about because she found the treatment of women so supirior in the Southern Water Tribe. They might not be as progressive as the fire nation (the fire nation isn't far from having it's first female Fire Lord - Zuko is still alive, but Azula is the one favored to get the throne, so yes, they are progressive. Their also racist imperialst's and firm belivers in the 'Fire-man's Burden'), but they aren't that bad.
We don't even know she's the first. Granted, Azula's suprised to be Fire Lord. But that might have as much to do with her being 15 or her father being quite alive and not near retirement age as anything else.
 

lask

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#13
clockworkchaos said:
lask said:
The sexism shouldn't be overplayed though - remember that their grandmother ran away from a loving marage to someone it's implied she cared about because she found the treatment of women so supirior in the Southern Water Tribe. They might not be as progressive as the fire nation (the fire nation isn't far from having it's first female Fire Lord - Zuko is still alive, but Azula is the one favored to get the throne, so yes, they are progressive. Their also racist imperialst's and firm belivers in the 'Fire-man's Burden'), but they aren't that bad.
We don't even know she's the first. Granted, Azula's suprised to be Fire Lord. But that might have as much to do with her being 15 or her father being quite alive and not near retirement age as anything else.
Quite right. While it's imperialism is a horrible black stain, the fire nation seems to be very progressive in it's own way - it just have utterly evil leaders, who it has great loyalty to.

It is clearly in the wrong, but that doesn't erase it's good points.
 

da_fox2279

California Crackpot
#14
Just read this... I like it. It's a nice start to a more realistic (as realistic as a cartoon can get) version of the show.

Very nice. Looking forward to more.
 

zerohour

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#15
Hm... I hop that Aang is capable of speaking all four of the primary languages, if you go that route. He's travelled all over the world, so it would make sense for him to speak all languages, since there isn't the massive diversity of language we have here.
 

Aarik

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#16
zerohour said:
Hm... I hopE that Aang is capable of speaking all four of the primary languages, if you go that route. He's traveled all over the world, so it would make sense for him to speak all languages, since there isn't the massive diversity of language we have here.
That WOULD make sense.

Both logically, culturally, and spiritually, logically, he's been to all four nations, he SHOULD KNOW or at least picked up some stuff, culturally, the Air Nomads lived on mountaintops, they would have had to of traded for most of their goods, and would therefor need to be able to communicate to trade, and spiritually... What are words but breath on the wind?

Plus the whole four winds thing could tie into that, four winds, four languages.
 

clockworkchaos

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#17
zerohour said:
Hm... I hop that Aang is capable of speaking all four of the primary languages, if you go that route. He's travelled all over the world, so it would make sense for him to speak all languages, since there isn't the massive diversity of language we have here.
I has assumed he would. If he can't, the fic would get really dull really fast. (though he should speak an archaic form)

Also, wonder how close NWT and SWT are, language wise?
 

Ina_meishou

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#18
clockworkchaos said:
zerohour said:
Hm... I hop that Aang is capable of speaking all four of the primary languages, if you go that route.á He's travelled all over the world, so it would make sense for him to speak all languages, since there isn't the massive diversity of language we have here.
I has assumed he would. If he can't, the fic would get really dull really fast. (though he should speak an archaic form)

Also, wonder how close NWT and SWT are, language wise?
Aang is fluent in eight languages, the four classic languages of the Air Temples, the private language of the Laughing Breeze order, what Zuko would instantly recognize as Court Flame, which is highly conservative, and only spoken habitually, in the modern time, by members of the Imperial Family and their close associates, Oman, the prime language of the Kingdom of Omashu, and an archaic version of a southern water tribe dialect who's tribe is extinct. It's sort of understandable to anyone in the southern water tribe, at the baby talk and massive misunderstandings level.

He's also at a light conversation level in a half dozen other languages, including NWT, which is thank the spirits also a highly conservative language, and he learns languages quickly. As you might imagine, the Air nomads, outside a few select orders, had a massive tradition of raising polyglots.

NWT is related to SWT, and while they aren't really mutually comprehensible, knowing one makes it much much easier to learn the other. The structures are mostly similar in detail, and a-lot of the words are fairly close.
 

tcm

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#19
What's the ninth language? By my count I see eight in that post. . .
 

clockworkchaos

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#20
I count seven

1. Northern Temple
2. Southern Temple
3. Eastern Temple
4. Western Temple
5. Laughing Breeze
6.Oman
7. Extinct SWT

We also know he played with Kuzon, so he should at least speak the basic Fire Nation language.
 

Aarik

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#21
clockworkchaos said:
I count seven

1. Northern Temple
2. Southern Temple
3. Eastern Temple
4. Western Temple
5. Laughing Breeze
6.Oman
7. Extinct SWT

We also know he played with Kuzon, so he should at least speak the basic Fire Nation language.
Forgot Court Flame, so eight.
 

clockworkchaos

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#22
Aarik said:
clockworkchaos said:
I count seven

1. Northern Temple
2. Southern Temple
3. Eastern Temple
4. Western Temple
5. Laughing Breeze
6.Oman
7. Extinct SWT

We also know he played with Kuzon, so he should at least speak the basic Fire Nation language.
Forgot Court Flame, so eight.
Misread his post as implying that court flame and laughing breeze were the same thing.
 

Ina_meishou

Well-Known Member
#23
Aarik said:
clockworkchaos said:
I count seven

1. Northern Temple
2. Southern Temple
3. Eastern Temple
4. Western Temple
5. Laughing Breeze
6.Oman
7. Extinct SWT

We also know he played with Kuzon, so he should at least speak the basic Fire Nation language.
Forgot Court Flame, so eight.
you are correct, he knows eight.

my bad ^_^
 

zeebee1

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#24
I'm just waiting for a change besides different languages.
 

Ina_meishou

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#25
ask and ye shall receive Zb.


O0O

Kuei, Fourty Fourth Lotus of the High Courtyard, The Gentle Hand, Blessed of the Great Beast, Speaker of the Realm, Divine Arbiter, King of the Four Corners of the Land, High King of North and South, King of Earth, and several dozen other titles besides, was eating lunch in the courtyard of his sanctum when the world went white.

He sat on nothing, breathed nothing, saw nothing but unending white. The light was worse than the sun, but nothing, not his eyelids nor his up-flung hands, shielded his eyes from it. It seemed to fill him, running into and through him, rendering him as insubstantial as mist. There was nothing but the white, brighter than anything he had ever seen.

Then he saw a shape. It was brighter even than the light, but he could not look away. It was a boy, no more than twelve, floating legs crossed and arms on knees. Kuei couldn't make out any features, no eyes or mouth or nose. But the boys forehead and cheeks bore shining blue arrows formed of swirling script that seemed clear and distinct for all it's tiny size.

I Come

there was no voice, nothing his ears could comprehend. His mind gave it the crack of shattering stone, the roar of a fire, the crash of waves, the howl of a tornado.

I Come.

And then he was once more in his courtyard, his servants staring at him, the delicate teacup of worked bone in his hand. The table before him was still standing, but his breakfast was in ruins. Food and broken plates and trays and pitchers scattered across the table.

He started, that scatter was not random. It formed a circle, bisected into quarters, each quarter with the symbol of one of the elements in it.

He shivered, remembering that unheard voice. Then sat bolt upright as it came again, this time in the waking world.

Be Ready

O0O

The Fire Lord's war room which had for ninety years been the throne room in all but name, was silent save for the faint hiss of the wall of flames which cloaked the Fire Lord, turning his massive figure into a eerie silhouette. Twenty messengers stood along the walls of the lower level of the room, their faces staring blankly at the opposite wall, hands clasped behind their stiff backs.

The world went white.

I Come

The voice fell upon Ozai like a huricane. It crashed over his shoulders like a rockslide, tore at him like a tsunami.

I Come

The light faded, and he was once more in his throne room. But the wall of flame, the boundary that cloaked his holy person from the sight of the unworthy, was gone, his control over it broken in those moments of strangeness. And in front of him, gauged from the stone of his platform, was a quartered circle, each quarter filled by the symbol of an element.

The servants were still rigid, still staring blankly ahead, but he could see the sweat running off them, feel their terror in the air. To look upon his form without permission was death.

ôLookö he said, and as one, all eyes snapped to him, ôlook upon your lord, and obey.ö

The servants dropped to their knees and pressed their faces to the floor.

ôAs the Blood of Agni speaks, so do we obey.ö

ôThen go!ö Ozai thundered, ôGo and tell my advisors and generals to come here, they will await my call in the anteroom. Go!ö

They fled, but before the last one managed to leave the room, Ozai gestured him to remain.

ôYou will tell my daughter to attend me, at once.ö

The man collapsed to the ground once more, shaking with fear.

ôBy your word, Lord of Flames.ö

He leaped to his feet and ran. Ozai thought he could see tears in the man's eyes.

'my daughter' he thought, 'must learn much, and quickly.'

The voice that was not came again.

Be Ready

O0O

Toph had used the tremors of the earth to understand the world for so long she no longer consciously thought of it. She simply knew that the Boulder was twenty paces to her left, winding up for one of his signature barrages of stone.

She stepped forward, slid her feet twice, and jerked her knifed hands up and then down. The Boulder went flying, but not quite out of the ring.

Alright, so he'd been practicing.

She was about to finish him off, when the world went white.

Toph nearly screamed. There was...some sort of sensation, she couldn't understand. The world was, was...she didn't even know what the word was. It...something was new, about her perception. There was something shining on her, it felt like the sun, but more. Shining not just on her, but through her. And her eyes hurt, there was... light? Was this what it meant to see?

I Come

What? Sound but not quite sound, there weren't any vibrations, nothing she could use to find who was talking.

ôBoulder? Boulder? This isn't funny you ass!ö

I Come

the strange, unsettling sensation vanished, and she could feel the arena again. But that wasn't important.

'What the hell was that...' she thought, 'what was...'

She shook her head, it could wait. She had a tournament to win.

ôHey Boulder, you won't get rid of...ö

She cut off as something slammed into her gut and sent her flying off the platform and into the pits.

Groggily, she pulled herself to her feet. Above her she could hear the cheers, for the boulder this time, when she'd had the match in the bag before that....

ôYou come huh?ö she muttered, ôwell, come on then, real quick. Cause I got some words for you asshole.ö

Then the Voice came again.

Be Ready

Toph snorted.

'Oh don't you worry, I'll be ready alright.'

The grin stretched across her face would have terrified anyone who saw it.

O0O

There will be other reactions. Zuko, Paku, and Zhao primarily, and others in the story will have mentions of things they experienced in their visions, though I won't go into them in detail.

but those are for another day.

thoughts?
 
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