The Golden Rule

[snthsnth]

She could be clearly heard by the Imperial soldiers, and flaunting the loss of a high-priority target to them.

The second part of this doesn't really fit properly with the first. It needs a 'was obviously' or a 'seemed to be' in there somewhere.

"The Citadel has shown itself to be many things, but hopelessly incompetent at the highest echelons is not one of them, so far.

The 'so far' removes punch from this line. It feels like he's trying to dance around an insult rather than just making it.

...not a public conversation you listened in to.

Should be 'listened in on.' or 'overheard.'

cultivated by yourselves backing off and allowing

'yourselves' should be changed to 'you'.

We did not come with hostile intentions, only to round up the last of our targets.

You may consider adding '...intentions towards the Citadel, only...'

Before the smaller Asari could shoot at the humans or an order at C-Sec,

Y seem to have missed a verb in the latter part of this bit.

It's a shame to see that diplomacy is truly dead in the 40th millennium. I'd say Shepard should have put more points into intimidate, but I expect that the Specters have similar dialogue scores, and are therefore immune to his powers.

Hopefully Blasto can use his excellent negotiating abilities to get them to stop shooting at the very least.

 

[Dakaath]

Man, I love this story.

I usually try to avoid reading Warhammer40k fanfiction as most don't seem to capture the universe well, but this story is an exception to that.

The scenes flow well, the grammer is good, and there are dozens of things implied but not outright said that make the story so very interesting.

 

[SEG-CISR]

Just an update. I'm triple-sorry I didn't get anything down. I've been really too busy to do anything in the past few months, even through summer vacation. Senior year's about thrice as hard as last year was, but I've noticed I'm getting a lot more work done in a lot less time. Somehow. Must be because I've been in class for less than a week, or maybe it's as Russell theorizes; school just turns my writing muscles on.

The rambling aside, expect an update within a week. I've only got to go to class in about an hour, which I'm spending writing. So. Promises, niggas.

Also, as always, thanks snthsnthsthnshtnshtnshtnshh for the little corrections, when I can I'll put them into effect.

 

[snthsnth]

Just an update. I'm triple-sorry I didn't get anything down. I've been really too busy to do anything in the past few months, even through summer vacation. Senior year's about thrice as hard as last year was, but I've noticed I'm getting a lot more work done in a lot less time. Somehow. Must be because I've been in class for less than a week, or maybe it's as Russell theorizes; school just turns my writing muscles on.

The rambling aside, expect an update within a week. I've only got to go to class in about an hour, which I'm spending writing. So. Promises, niggas.

Also, as always, thanks snthsnthsthnshtnshtnshtnshh for the little corrections, when I can I'll put them into effect.

\o/ Yayifications! \o/

And honestly, how hard is it to hit 'snth' several times in a row? Let's break down your attempt: snth snth sthn shtn shtn shtn shh. Notice that you did well for the first eight letters, but then you misplaced an 'n', then devolved into a vowel free form of shitin', but the worst is the final group of three, THREE, letters. GAH. Lol.

BTW, I use a Dvorak keyboard layout, so my version of the home row (asdf gh jkl is different. (aoeu id htns) So hitting my right Pinky->Ring->Middle->Pointer finger produces snth, and doubling ends up as my user account on a fair number of things that I don't think that I'll care about. I signed up on TFF thinking it would be crap, so there you go.

I also realize that it's pretty hard to SNTH on Qwerty KBs.