Oaky, I totally love the changes you made. There was only one grammar error that I noticed - there might be more, but I only noticed one, which is pointed out as follows:
"The bespectacled mage would have never noticed him had the man not spoken up. A rest <-- [RED?] vest, leaf green male kimono, impossibly long hair tied into a ponytail and an enormous frame paints the image of the man that sits cross-legged at the base of the tree just next to him."
Great story, otherwise. And I totally think seals could be made to work for the folks at Mahora, either using their blood to activate it or magic as an energy source in and of itself. I think the ofuda and scripts used in the Eastern magic could be considered a foil to fuuinjutsu, so perhaps adapting it for the Western mages could work. Also, will Naruto be learning seals or chakra chains or anything like that? I also can't wait to see what he's going to learn from the folks at Mahora.
"The bespectacled mage would have never noticed him had the man not spoken up. A rest <-- [RED?] vest, leaf green male kimono, impossibly long hair tied into a ponytail and an enormous frame paints the image of the man that sits cross-legged at the base of the tree just next to him."
Great story, otherwise. And I totally think seals could be made to work for the folks at Mahora, either using their blood to activate it or magic as an energy source in and of itself. I think the ofuda and scripts used in the Eastern magic could be considered a foil to fuuinjutsu, so perhaps adapting it for the Western mages could work. Also, will Naruto be learning seals or chakra chains or anything like that? I also can't wait to see what he's going to learn from the folks at Mahora.