daniel_gudman said:
Was it clear that it was Diabel implicitly asking Shirou to help him up?
It was unclear that the gesture was aimed specifically at Shirou. It seemed like he was asking anyone to help him up, but Shirou acted first because he didn't hesitate to help.
Stupid Archaic English plurals gumming up our modern 1/2+ sentence construction with 1/more/most formulations... I wasn't sure this was right when I wrote it but I didn't feel like pulling out a dictionary, I guess I'm going to think about it more.
Wait, I was mistaken. I misread the passage. "More superior" is the correct phrasing when there's a phrase like "four times" attached. My eyes skipped over that for some reason.
Rather, "four times superior" would be odd. "Four times better" would be fine. I'm just not used to seeing "more superior" in a context where it fits.
For example, there's never a context in which "more happier" works.
This came up a few times in SAO so I assumed everyone would know it, but since it's technically incorrect to use an acronym without spelling it out the first time, I'll fix it.
I haven't seen or read everything about SAO (and I'm probably never going to), but your fic has been pretty newcomer-friendly so far. At least from the SAO side of things.
(Being newcomer-friendly on the FSN side of things is probably much, much harder. Such a dense and complicated setting.)
According to translate.google.com,
"Akuma" = devil
It means a bunch of other stuff too, and it can mean a devil or The Christian Devil, but either of those was the reading I was going for.
The meaning of "Christian devil" is a johny-come-lately connotation, while Satan has been the primary meaning behind the English word "devil" for ages.
The point is that Diabel bears more resemblence to Satan than to the wide variety of creatures called "akuma".
But, I became interested in why the player chose to name himself "Devil", when then he tried to be [The Hero]....
Well, it's not as mysterious when one considers that the game he found himself in was not the game he intended to play. Which you illustrate very well. I certainly love the explanation you came up with.
This line was supposed to mean something like, "even though people carrying on was usually annoying, hearing everyone chattering and cheering actually sounded really good right then."
Better than any BGM, yes. Didn't that also imply that there wasn't any BGM playing at that time and place?
Kirito is experiencing the same euphoria as everyone else... ditto the thing with Asuna being all smiles, it's not that she's flirting with him there, it's that everyone is [High on Life].
I didn't see her as flirting, but rather unconsciously expressing the beginings of fondness. Though "high on life" certainly clarifies the picture. (And possibly helps the begining of fondness.)
Compared to the SAO canon...
Frankly speaking, in canon, Kirito creating the class called [Beater] just meant that [Suspicion against strong and/or solo players] became normalized.
Yeah. It was without a doubt the best thing
Kirito could think to do, but it also showcases that he really didn't have the understanding to handle the situation
well. That ability died along with Diabel.
Kirito could have possibly pointed out that the katana skills he recognized from the 9th Level obviously hadn't been in the 1st level of the beta, otherwise it would have been included in the information everyone got. Kirito couldn't have known that the boss was different, just as he couldn't have known that Diabel was going to charge the boss alone at precisely the time when everyone knew it was going to become the most dangerous. Furthermore, Diabel himself had assigned Kirito to a marginal position that placed him too far away to react in time.
With a completely different delivery than "laughing, half-mad scorn", this might have worked to absolve him. Then a more talented fellow could take the fear and anger and resentment of the crowd and direct towards the true villain: Kayaba, who not only trapped them in the death game, but also changed the game itself so that even beta players needed to watch out.
Then a talented fellow could tie that right into a point about the beta testers being in the same boat as everyone else.
But again, that talented fellow was Diabel, who was dead.
Maybe Diabel subverted the lesson [Magic is Serious Business] or [To be a Magus is to walk with Death], but on the other hand... how can I put it, I don't think Diabel was wrong.
No, I definitely didn't think he was wrong either. Even when Muramasa's words led me to doubt, and even though I doubt the integrity of Diabel's motives, I can see no fault in his actions.
No one else is stepping up to be the leader everyone needs. The people who most threaten to steal the glory the leader needs (by accident) are both unsuitable for the position AND unwilling to take it.
Diabel is both willing and competent. He is absolutely the leader everyone needs right now, and he took the best course of action for becoming that leader.
And I admire the ruthless, competent pragmatism with which he pursues that role.