Naruto Neesan

biigoh

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#26
*blinks*

wait... what... how did you get Chibi Usa in THERE?!?!? :blink:

I mean... that's not even close to what's going on with Gaara. I... I have clearly failed as a writer. -_-
 

Sect

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#27
biigoh said:
*blinks*

wait... what... how did you get Chibi Usa in THERE?!?!? :blink:

I mean... that's not even close to what's going on with Gaara. I... I have clearly failed as a writer. -_-
Actually, I thought that too. It certainly was the first thing that crossed my mind when I read it.

... Actually, I first thought of Serenity, THEN Chibi-Usa.
 

DhampyrX2

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#28
Well Gaara actually has a father, for one. And a bunch of "aunts" in the reality she goes to when asleep. And she's a redhead which is as close as you get to pink without being Sakura. My first instinct was that her father was Endymion, which makes her Chibi-Usa. It's a little stretch, but not much of one.

And it opens the gates for a Black Lady Fem!Gaara, too.
 

ascote

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#30
The scenes are quite interesting, do you have an actual story or just bits of inspiration glued together?
 

biigoh

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#31
Ahhh... I'll have to do more scenes for Gaara to make clear what's going on there... :snigger:

And no, Gaara isn't Chibi-Usa. Remember just what Gaara is hosting. A Tanuki demon priest (and a rowdy one at that)....

And I has a story, I'm just not sure if my scenes are expressing it well.
 

Sect

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#34
It could be the daughter of Chibi-Usa: "otousan" has silver grey hair, kinda like Pegasus.

EDIT:
And I has a story, I'm just not sure if my scenes are expressing it well.
Eh. All I can tell is that Naruto knows Saturn, who's stuck in a crystal, he knows an Uchiha who's also an ANBU, Sasuke got <s>burninated</s>Sharingan-ated (sorry, got mixed up with the psychoNaruto fic for a moment), Itachi may or may not be evil (he's a tricksy one), and Gaara's a girl. Who's a reincarnation of Chibi-Usa. Or Rei. Something like that.
 

Vorpal

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#35
Rei Hino's grandfather happens to be a rowdy (or at least perverted) demon priest, being a reincarnation of one of the daiyouma. But physically he doesn't really match the story.
 

explorerbean

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#36
I really like this a lot, but I'm a little confused as to when each of these snippets are occurring. Did the Uchiha Massacre happen offscren, ot was that a flash-forward? In any case, good job.
 

biigoh

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#37
sequence 1 and 2 = Naruto pre-academy with reasons why he wants to be a nin
sequence 3 = Sasuke in ninja academy and JUST post massacre
sequence 4 = Gaara (unstated time period, but still young and not quite kickass yet)
sequence 5 = still in the works, and revolves point of views of Uchiha massacre
 

biigoh

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#38
***
'neesan
Part 5
***

"Hey... didja hear?" Sakura blinked at the girl next to her, she vaguely recalled the burnette. She wasn't one of the mean girls who bullied her in the past, nor was she one of Ino-chan's other flowers. "About... Uchiha Sasuke."

"Erm... no?" the pink haired girl shook her head quizzically, the only thing she had heard from Ino-chan in the morning was that she had heard from her father that something bad had happened last night.

"Well..." the burnette, whose name Sakura still couldn't quite recalled, continued on. Excitment in her eyes at being the first to inform Sakura about this. "I heard from Ami who heard from Kasumi, who heard from Shion-kun... that there was a big fight."

Sakura idly listened to what Mizuki-sensei was speaking about the fearsome demon beasts of legend where he stood at the blackboard, her attention was however wholly forcused on the girl seated beside her. "Really? But aren't the Uchiha the police? Wouldn't they have stopped the fight?"

"Well... Shion-kun said that there was a big fight between all of the Uchiha, and that Sasuke-kun was hospitalized," Sakura's eyes widened at that.

"But... but they're nobles. A big clan. Wait, that's why Sasuke isn't here today? He's been hurt?" At the hesitant nod to her questions, the pink haired academy student blinked, not quite sure how to react to that. While learning to be a kunoichi meant being not quite as sensitive to things like a civilian, that didn't mean she was without feelings. Especially when it was a boy that she saw in her class on a daily basis.

Ino-chan would be interested in this news. Of course, she likely would have heard it by now. Turning to look at Mizuki-sensei, her instincts and still budding reaction was enough for her to catch the chalk thrown at her.

"Miss Haruno, since you feel my lecture is boring. Perhaps you would care to share your discussion with Miss Takaya," the smirk on the face of her instructor was enough to cause Sakura to blush furiously and sink back into her seat as the class' attention was drawn to her.

"Now then... to continue on. While the legendary one tailed tanuki is strong, his true power and danger rises from the fact that he used to be a human. A corrupt and fallen monk, true but intelligent in the use of chakra and his demonic abilities," The lecture continued with Mizuki satisfied that the gossiping had been stopped.

"Which is more than can be said of the Guardian of the North, the three tailed turtle. Gamera, while he is the so-called 'friend to all children', hardly possesses a human intelligence and as such is considered not quite as dangerous in combat." Sakura sighed as she continued to take notes.

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To be continued?
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Short... I know. :sweat:
 

Sect

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#39
... Huh. When can we expect Godzilla to pop up?
 

biigoh

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#40
*eyes the Kyuubi going rawrrr!*

Hmm.... it's not quite the same. Who knows? Besides... Gamera the guardian turtle needs more love.

He truly doesn't get the showing that he deserves. Has he not suffered protecting humanity? :sisi:

Also...

"See the TURTLE of enormous girth!
On his shell he holds the earth.
His thought is slow but always kind;
He holds us all within his mind.
On his back all vows are made;
He sees the truth but mayn't aid.
He loves the land and loves the sea,
And even loves a child like me."
- Roland Deschain (The Dark Tower series)
 

biigoh

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#41
I'm not making a killing from the Sasuke or the Sasuke : Sharingen manga, anime or even games. So characters like Naruto don't belong to me. They belong to Kishimoto.

There is a cross-over element, but I'm sure that Naoko Takeuchi of Bishojo Senshi Sera Mun fame will forgive me. Well... I'm fairly certain.

In any event, on with the show....

***
'neesan
Part 6
***

"Do not be afraid."

With those words, Saturn stepped into the temple. The barriers and glamour that had shielded the presence of the rituals within the temple, as one, shattered with the chime of a crystal bell. Protective barriers, panels of energy (essence, magic) shattering like windows of glass struck by a hammer before dissipating in the freezing air beneath the dark heavens.

"You have called. Know that it was not in vain."

With each step into the fane of darkness, each click of her boots upon the granite floor echoing in the shadows that surrounded the walls of the temple, she could see the despair and rage writ large upon the faces of those turning to face her; worshipers of a near forgotten religion forbidden by the Pax Selene. Relics of an era before the unification, before the ascension of the House of Serenity, before the Pax Selene.

One by one, the wards carved painstakingly into the granite floor and which should bar her and her sisters, for mayhaps a moment or two, glowed crimson before fading to darkness from her presence. Their energies (essence, life) consumed and silenced.

"For I have come in answer."

"Dog of the moon witch, know this," the priest at the alter glared at the advancing senshi who had discarded her robe at the entrance, the river of shimmering darkness that was her hair in stark counterpoint to the snow white of her immaculate uniform. His dusky skin tone indicated that he was a native of a warmer world than the moons of Saturn. "We do not fear you nor your mistress."

"All the worlds, in your Pax Selene," here he spat to the side, his disdain clear to the senshi's eyes. "The peace bought by submission to the whore you call a queen, once belonged to Those Who Came Before. And one day, when the stars are right, they will return to reclaim what was theirs."

"And yet, here I am. Where they are very much not," she stepped forward once more, her glaive twirling from behind her back to stand by her side upright and resolute. "Your... gods, they are long gone. Banished by the light of the First Serenity. Even if you pray, it is of no use. They will not aid you, they can not aid you. Nor do I intend to ignore you."

"Listen to me well, oh children of earth. Recant your faith before it is too late. You can yet return to the light. All of you can," the rustling of those within the temple as they shifted in their seats, glimmering eyes inset upon pale faces as they gazed upon the one whose presence seemed more solid and real than the temple they were in.

"Words... all you have are words. Too little," emerald light, patterns tracing impossible geometries, shone from his eyes as his clothing rippled like waves of a thick vicious liquid.

"Far too late. For they come... their return is nigh!" A raised eyebrow as she who was Saturn slid her silver glaive into a guard position, delineating the region that she controlled and that which lay beyond; her circle of death.

The brief pause as she brought her energies (essence, life) to bear in her defense, her wall of silence, was enough for her to see the priest's body explode outwards into an undulating tide of flesh. Eyes that glowed with light the hue of verdigris covered brass, gazed unknowingly at her, from where they were formed and unformed in tendrils that consumed the worshipers within the temple.

Were she any lesser being, she might have been driven insane by the manner the flesh folded and unfolded itself beyond the rules of reality.

Were her barrier created by any one weaker than she, the wave of flesh would have consumed her instead of slamming her against the ceiling of the temple and then... beyond as the granite at her back cracked and then crumbles. The walls of the temple carved whole from the mountain proving weaker than the force the wave of flesh could muster, and far less durable than the senshi and her protections.

Flesh sloughing and melting together was her impression as she pushed away from the abomination that reached for her from the solidity of the mountain where the temple once was. Motes of lavender light (essence) trailed behind her as she flew upwards, ignoring gravity to gain some distance between it and her.

As it pushed its way into the cold (freezing) atmosphere of Theia, Saturn could see it pulling itself into a more coherent form. A jagged spike of raw red flesh, chitinous armor with gapping holes, gills that sucked clean air in before exhaling fetid air out, all surrounded by a cloud of dust and rubble that settled not so gently on to the ground.

As it breathed, she could hear (think) a rustling of countless voices out of synchronicity as they whispered, prayed and gibbered. One word over and over again in countless repetition.

"Tekeli-li."


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To be continued...
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CatOnFire

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#42
So it's a Naruto/Sailor Moon/Lovecraft crossover... so... much... win.
 

biigoh

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#43
I see you got that part of the reference. :lol:
 
#44
biigoh said:
I see you got that part of the reference. :lol:
... would the phrase 'Maiden of Endings' account for another part?
 

Lanceavalon

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#45
So which side are the "Tailed Beasts" on?
Wasn't this fic the one with a senshi in Naruto's mind?
 

biigoh

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#46
S.K. said:
biigoh said:
I see you got that part of the reference.? :lol:
... would the phrase 'Maiden of Endings' account for another part?
Not quite. But appropriate.

*rolls several die to resist having Saturn bust out some Sidereal Martial Arts charms*

Lanceavalon said:
So which side are the "Tailed Beasts" on?
Wasn't this fic the one with a senshi in Naruto's mind?
There are no sides... really. And you'll see with regards the Tailed Beasts. :D
 
#47
Ummm.... Correct me if I'm wrong, but how did Naruto get caught up in all this? Because if I'm much mistake- Oh.

I see.

Being a recluse tends to do that... I guess there's lurking to be done.
 
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