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Watashiwa

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#26
Shaderic said:
Iiinteresting. Seems you're pretty good with tarot. How did you research? Specific site, book, or class?
PSYCHIC POWERS!!!

Er... actually, I had three sources. Firstly, wikipedia. Secondly, back at home, I have a thirty plus year old tarot book that I read (or rather, had read to me. My sister used to be pretty heavily into the occult) a few years back.

Lastly, I used this site. There are others, of course, but I like that they do the reversed meanings as well.

I know the tarot fairly well, but I'm not an expert, and I tend to jump to the easy "fanon" meanings of the cards unless I'm careful.

EDIT: Answer time

@Megaolix: When I was writing Elizabeth, I realized something: the girl is a teenager stuck in a room with an old man. She's not bouncy so much as she's bored out of her skull.

@Aranafan: Sorry it's taken me so long, but I'm not sure yet which S. Links he'd have maxed. Lovers because I'm a sap, Magician, Emperor, Chariot, Justice and Strength (though without sex) and Star. Probably Hermit, Hanged Man and Sun. Iffy on Moon, Noizomi might have annoyed Minato too much. Tower, probably (badass old man is badass). Probably Devil.
 

Vascudo

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#27
I kinda assumed that Elizabeth was the canon pairing because of P4.
Then again it could be just wishful thinking because Yukari grated on my nerves.:p
 

Watashiwa

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#28
An update?! YES! The second part of chapter 2 is here, thanks to Cornuthaum reminding me of my priorities.

This is of course nowhere near the whole chapter. We still have yet to see the signing of the contract and Minato's first day of school. I swear to God that it will not take over a year for the next segment to show up.

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A voice came over the loudspeaker.

"We are now approaching Tatsumi Port City. This is our final stop. Please check that you have all of your personal belongings, and that your area is clear of trash. Thank you."

I had pulled off my headphones to listen to the announcement, and now I replaced them, turning to look at my work.

On the table were my notes and recollections, random thoughts about my life this past/future, year, the events, the people involved and other things that I could remember about the time I had spent in Tatsumi city. Pages torn out of my notebook, filled with clumsy short-hand, covered the table and spilled over onto others in the small lounge.

I blinked. I had been so caught up in writing every detail about my life in the city that I had failed to notice how much I had written, or for how long. I looked to the sides, checking to see if anyone had seen my frenzy. A second later I relaxed. No one was close enough to see what I had written, and besides, my notes were illegible enough that anyone other than me would have trouble reading what I had written. I squinted; scratch that, IÆd probably have trouble with some of these.

Quickly, I collected all the papers, including the half sheets. No telling which of my recollections would prove useful, nor how many details I would remember in the coming months.

The train started slowing down. I picked up my stack of papers and left the dining car, down the rumbling corridors and into the car where I had left my bags.

Most of my belongings had been sent via the postal service, and would arrive at the dorm later in the week. Not that I planned to do anything with it; the first time around I had been unconscious when it arrived, and after that had been too caught up with SEES to bother ever unpacking more than clothing. All I had with me now was my handbags and a shoulder bag, which I stuffed my papers into.

From outside the train came the sound of squealing breaks. The clock read 11:56. Almost time, I thought to myself.

I moved quickly. The absolute last thing I wanted was to be caught on the train when the Dark Hour began. That had happened once last year, some time after Fuuka had joined SEES. It had proven an unforgettable experience, much to my regret.

Tick, tock went the station clock.

My first night here, the Dark Hour had begun moments after IÆd stepped onto the platform. This time, I was off the train as soon as the doors had opened, and even as I stepped onto the platform, I turned towards the stairs. I wanted to get out of the train station before the Dark Hour began; climbing over the turnstiles was never fun.

The Dark Hour arrived just as I reached the exit gate. The lights went out, and the air took on a sick greenish cast. Blood began to well up from the ground, filling invisible depressions forming pools of blood that I took care to avoid. From a long way off I heard the sound of grinding stoneùTartarus rising above Tatsumi Port City.

I tossed my bags over the barriers and vaulted over. With a quick tug, both were in my grasp again, and I took the first step on the stairs of my fate.
 

Cornuthaum

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#29
Written notes? Oh, this can't go wrong at all. ^-^
 

Aranfan

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#30
Huzzah! An update!

And yeah, having notes is going to bite him in the ass.
 

Serxeid

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Watashiwa said:
I swear to God that it will not take over a year for the next segment to show up.
It'd better not or I'll sic those Dugtrio on you! :p

And I concur, writing those notes is a terrible idea, unless they're in some kind of code. Oh, and I have this horrible mental image of Minato obtaining a new Persona that didn't exist the last time around: ZA WARUDO! *is shot*
 

Watashiwa

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DesDes-san said:
Watashiwa said:
I swear to God that it will not take over a year for the next segment to show up.
It'd better not or I'll sic those Dugtrio on you! :p
I hate you so much right now. I was in a library for Chrissake, and my screams nearly got me kicked out...
 

Serxeid

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#33
Ehehe~ At least I didn't go with an even more disturbing image? :sweat:
 

Watashiwa

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IT'S HEEEEEEEEERE!!!

Explaining the Dark Hour to someone whoÆs never experienced it isn't easy.á It's hostile to life, in ways that have nothing to do with the Shadows. You can talk about water becoming blood, the green sky, the coffins, but all of that just scratches the surface.á Every breath you take feels like breathing sand. Every muscle in your body seems to weigh an extra twenty kilos, and you always feel cold, even if the actual temperature is boiling hot.á

The Dark Hour has other, non-physical ways of messing with people, too.á Obviously, the first time you awaken to the Dark Hour you have a breakdown, as your brain tries to process the transformed world.á Survive that first night, and you get the choice to go back to your normal life, or become a full resident of the Dark Hour.á Most people drawn into the Dark Hour are attacked by the Shadows, and most of the survivors leave their memories behind and go back to their normal lives, but a few people have the strength to remain in the Dark Hour.á Of those, a few experience a second awakening, to our power: Persona, the inner self destined to fight against the Shadows.

Something that always bothered me though, is how those adults who awakened to to the Dark Hour survive without having a Persona.á One of the first things that Mitsuru and Ikutsuki told me is that people without a Persona are always targeted by the Shadows during the Dark Hour.á Yet both Ikutsuki and Mitsuru's father experience the Dark Hour, and had for years.á Have, now that they're still alive.

Urgh, time travel makes my head hurt.

And speaking of time travel... my feet, moving as quickly as my mind thought, brought me to the S.E.E.S. dormitory.á? I stopped outside for a long moment, staring up at the building where I would spend the next year.á Even though I knew how bad things would get, I still felt myself start to smile.á No matter what tragedy the future brought, I still had the promise of good things to balance thatùgood friends and allies along the path of my journey.

And this time... "You guys don't remember it, because it hasn't happened yet.á It might not ever happen, because I'm going to change everything I can.á But this time, on Graduation Day when this is all over... I'll be waiting for you on the roof.á I promise."

And with that, I opened the door.
I wrote this with the intent of having this be the chapter's midpoint, but it could be chapter end. It'd make for a really short chapter 1 though, so I'm going to finish the first night and call that chapter one.

Thoughts comments and criticisms are appreciated! Let me know where I can improve it!

Last part of the chapter will be up later today. :mmm:
 

GenocideHeart

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Wata, have you noticed Igor's peculiar wording when you are given the choice of gender for the assistant? He implies that Liz/Theo look the way you EXPECT them to look. Which... pretty much means they are formless creatures, and only take a humanoid form for your convenience. Kinda like Galactus, who's perceived differently by every race.

In short, a Liz pairing is kinda like Main x Shub-Niggurath, lol. Liz is an eldritch abomination. :rofl:
 

Watashiwa

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#39
GenocideHeart said:
Wata, have you noticed Igor's peculiar wording when you are given the choice of gender for the assistant? He implies that Liz/Theo look the way you EXPECT them to look. Which... pretty much means they are formless creatures, and only take a humanoid form for your convenience. Kinda like Galactus, who's perceived differently by every race.

In short, a Liz pairing is kinda like Main x Shub-Niggurath, lol. Liz is an eldritch abomination. :rofl:
SONOVA--

You know, I had an odd thought. The residents of the Velvet Room aren't fully human. We know this.

I say they're half demon. They all had one mortal parent, and one parent who, like Zeus in ancient Greece, decided s/he wanted to shack up with the mortal parent.

We know that Personas are gods and demons that live in human hearts. We know that Shadows are Personas. And lastly, we know that the demons start showing up whenever the world starts to cross over with the other side/the world of dreams. DEVA system, Tartarus, TV World, JOKER, etc. Add in Magatsuhi from Nocturne and "data" as perceived in DDS and we get a good system on how incarnation works in the SMT verse.
 

Watashiwa

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<><><><>

Stepping into the common room after my declaration was downright anticlimactic, regardless of the fact that it had been three months since I'd seen the room lit by the Dark Hour.á Some things really do stay with you forever, I suppose.

"Welcome."

Ah, now that was nostalgia inducing.

"You're late. I've been waiting a long time."

Standing behind the check-in counter was a ten year old wearing what seemed to be blue and white striped pajamas.á This was Pharos, the human avatar of the Thirteenth Shadow and the Appriser of Nyx. This was Death itself.

...Who also happened to be an adorable child who looked like he could be my precocious younger brother.

He was looking at me expectantly, and I realized he was holding out a piece of paper.á I took it from him, and he smiled.á "Please, sign here.á There's no need to be scared; it only binds you to accepting fullá responsibility for your actions."

Ah, of course.á The contract.á I took it from him and glanced over it.á "I chooseth this fate of my own free will," it said.á Everything seemed in order, so I lifted the pen Pharos handed me and prepared to sign my name, only to pause as a thought came to mind.

"Say... just what am I agreeing to, anyway?"á I put down the pen, and looked Pharos straight in the eye.á "It's not taking responsibility for my actions that I have problems with.á I have problems with choosing a fate for myself.á I don't believe that fate is set in stone."á Because if I did, I wouldn't have traveled back in time to change my future.á Unless it was fated for me to live out that future, then travel back andùgah!á Bad thoughts!á "I refuse to 'choose' my fate, because pre-selecting one entails shutting out the alternatives; which might be good or bad, but I'll never know if I decide my fate here and now!"

Pharos lost his customary smile and began tapping his fingers against the counter.á Was he nervous?á "That isn't the way it works.á Every time you make a decision, you have no choice but to accept the result.á This contract is the same. Whether you sign it or not, you still need to accept that your actions will have consequences."á He pushed pen and paper towards me.á "Sign the contract.á You have nothing to lose, and much to gain."

Wasn't that the truth?á It wasn't like I planned to not sign it, anyway.á Too much was at stake, and I doubt I'd be invited into the Velvet Room without my name on that paper.á So without further ado I signed my name at the bottom of the page, taking care to write each character as clearly as possible.á When I was done, Pharos lifted the paper, and smiled his creepiest smile.

"And so it begins... again."á Holding it up so I could see, he made to make it disappear.

"Wait."á He froze and glared at me, no doubt wondering why I'd interrupted. "Where's my copy?á I thought that both parties to a contract received a copy, so that neither contractor had any excuse to renege."

Pharos stared.á One of his eyebrows twitched.á He lifted the contract to eye level, flipped it around to show that there was only the single page there and twisted his hand at an impossible angle. Suddenly there were two identical copies of the contract in his hand.á He handed one to me, then stepped back into the shadows and disappearing without another word.

Death was not amused.

I smiled. I couldn't remember ever getting the best of my imaginary friend. As I moved towards the stairs a wave of tiredness crashed over me. Going to school the day before, dealing with soul sickness brought on by sealing Nyx, going back in time, and walking through the Dark Hour in a body totally unused to the exertion had left me completely spent.

As I made my way up the stairs, I once again went over my plans in my head. Stop the Shadows. Stop Strega. Keep Nyx from being summoned OR have a better seal waiting for her. Keep Shinjiro from dying...

àWhy do I get the feeling that I'm forgetting something?


My train of thought was brutally interrupted by a high pitched scream and the butt of the pistol smashing into my head. As I dropped to my knees clutching my head, I remembered that, indeed, Yukari Takeba had been ready to attack me the first time I entered the dorm. Before the savage girl could take another piece of my skull, I heard shouts from upstairs.

Ow.
DUN DUN.

Another natural ending place, and there's still more to come tomorrow! Minato gets to make some awful first impressions, and has a first day of junior year at a new school! Again!

Oh, and S. Links. Yes. Anyone have a clever idea of how to write them in-story?

Night all!
 

GenocideHeart

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#41
The one he's probably forgetting about is Chidori.

Also, for an idea... why not have Minato somehow mess up in a way that attracts the attention of other Persona-users? It would be an interesting way to add a couple guest stars from previous games, which would be a nice touch.

Also, refresh my memory, does the policeman who sells you weapon have a S.Link?
 

Watashiwa

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#42
GenocideHeart said:
The one he's probably forgetting about is Chidori.

Also, for an idea... why not have Minato somehow mess up in a way that attracts the attention of other Persona-users? It would be an interesting way to add a couple guest stars from previous games, which would be a nice touch.

Also, refresh my memory, does the policeman who sells you weapon have a S.Link?
No.

But he's not awake in the Dark Hour, just generally aware of its existence.

As for the other Persona users... nah. Too complicated. I have other ideas that could involve them, and I've got enough on my plate for this one.
 

DrTempo

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#43
Hmm..In terms of how S.Links could be handled, I point you to SamJaz's legendary P3: Fairly English Story.
 

Watashiwa

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DrTempo said:
Hmm..In terms of how S.Links could be handled, I point you to SamJaz's legendary P3: Fairly English Story.
Not touching it with a pointy stick. -_-

Tried the first few chapters, left a bad taste in my mouth. Could you explain how he does them?
 

TkMacintosh

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Honestly, I'm hoping for fun with the Hermit Arcana and Toriumi >.> When he gets in deep enough with the Social Link, I'd really like to see him drop the bomb on her...

...Yeah....but either way, good to see the story still alive :D
 

grant

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#47
Considering that he's been out of things for a while how much does the MC remember about his friends?
 

Draveziovas

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#48
... So, Minato started a New Game + on Maniac mode, did he?

Will he get Orpheus Telos in this playthrough?



And I have to say, while I honestly am happy with your story so far, it'd have been a bit hilarious if he'd ended up doing his NG+ on the female story, instead of the male.
I suggest this for an Omake, if you feel like it, and nothing more.


But again, I must say that the your current work is excellent.
 

DrTempo

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Watashiwa said:
DrTempo said:
Hmm..In terms of how S.Links could be handled, I point you to SamJaz's legendary P3: Fairly English Story.
Not touching it with a pointy stick. -_-

Tried the first few chapters, left a bad taste in my mouth. Could you explain how he does them?
Well, he is doing a rebuild of those first few chapters as a seperate story... And basicaly he did this:(Snip from when the Tower S.Link is formed.)
Kazushi was stunned. No surprise, considering the damage to his leg. "You seem optimistic about the future kid. Don't be. Because when you don't get what you hoped for outta life, it's gonna crush ya. Then you're gonna hafta drink and smoke just ta get through the day."

The monk stood up. "You're nothing like those punks I normally see around here; Always getting inta trouble with the police and at school. Can't say the same for my son thoughà" he looked at us. "I'm gonna remember your faces kids. Next time I see you in here, I'll get the bouncer to throw ya out." He turned away. "When you've had yer fill, go home. And don't come back." He walked off into the crowd.

SMASH.

Aww, what!

Thou art Ià and I am thouà

You've gotta be kidding meà

Thou shalt have our blessing when thou choosest to create a Persona of the Tower Arcana...
Basiaclly, he does the smash sound, and the "thou art I" bit when the link starts, and uses the "Thou shalt have our blessing" line only whenever a link is leveled up.
He also used the link complete line whenever a link was finished..In other words enough to know the link has leveled up, no more, no less.

As for Fairly English Story itself, just slog through the chapters that're bothering ya..That's when things get interesting.
 

Watashiwa

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#50
Hey all, at a bit of an impasse. After I shot my writer's block this afternoon, I finished the chapter. Finally.

I'm going to edit it in a bit, but I need to ask: should I keep the honorifics? In one scene, Mitsuru is going to be speaking formally to Minato, and I'm debating whether to have her call him Arisato-san or Mr. Arisato. The first sounds right, but I'm trying to keep the story in one language.

If I go the honorific-less route, I'm going to drop the "senseis" and "-sans". I'll keep "Yuka-tan" and "Koro-chan" because those are nicknames, but everything else goes.
 
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