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“Uzumaki!†A rage filled masculine voice yelled, causing the teen to stop putting the finishing touches on his latest prank. Seamlessly he ducked under the flying tackle of the Student Council Secretary, Genshirou Saji, causing him to crash painfully on the floor.
Quickly raising himself upright, the blond merely smirked at the groaning form of the Student Council member.
“Better luck next time, Mr Student Council Secretary.†Giving a quick mock salute, he spun on his heel in order to make his getaway, only to find his way blocked by the rest of the council.
“Good work, Saji," Souna Shitori complimented her underling, before turning her attentions to the mischievous blond with a scowl. “Now Uzumaki-san are you going to report to your detention willingly, or will we have to restrain you? Again.â€
“Aw, don’t tell me you’re still upset about that… Mahou-Kaichou?†Naruto responded, a wide grin stretching across his face, at the abject horror, and pure rage flashed across the president’s face as it practically glowed red at the name.
“…Restrain him,†she ground out, using all her formidable self-control to stop herself from throttling the infuriating student before her, even when her hands tightened into fists, and her knuckles turned white. The whisker faced teen had only been attending the Academy for three, almost four, months but in that short space of time, he’d quickly demolished the Student Council President’s patience.
“Ah, I’m afraid I’ll have to take a rain check on that…†He smirked, leaning against an open window. “I’ve got plans with my friends, maybe next time.†With a cheeky wave, he flipped himself out the window.
“Stop him!â€
“This is the second story!â€
“He’ll die!â€
Rushing towards the window, the council could only boggle at the blond, who was making a run for it.
“Come on, we can’t let him escape punishment again.†Spinning on her heel, the President ran towards the stairs, the other council members hot on her heels.
Meanwhile, “I didn’t even get to see anything!!†Hyoudou Issei yelled, as he and his two friends were chased by the enraged Kendo team, who had caught the trio peeping.
“Perverts!â€
“Trash!â€
“Scum!â€
“Die!â€
“Get out of the way!â€
“Eh?†Issei blinked, that last one had definitely been male. Familiar too…
“Eh!?†The perverted trio yelled, stumbling as Uzumaki Naruto shot past them at a speed a few athletes would be hard pressed to match, a good portion of the council on his tail.
“Damn it, just go away!â€
From his position on the ground, Issei sweat dropped.
‘Do your best Naruto…’ He gave mental words of encouragement to his friend, before an aura of malicious intent washed over him, and the other members of his trio.
“Don’t you think you should be more worried about yourselves?†Murayama, the Kendo club’s captain, called from behind, the edge in her voice making the results clear.
His head turned mechanically, to face one of the most terrifying sights he’d seen in his short life. The entire Kendo club had their shinai and bokutŠin their hands, their eyes completely shadowed, making their grins even more terrifying.
The Perverted Trio suddenly became intimately aware of the fact they had fallen over, and would be unable to get to their feet fast enough to escape the female’s wrath.
‘Damn you Naruto!’ Were their final coherent thoughts, before the pain drove all else from their minds.
A short while later, the perverted trio plus one, managed to escape, and arrive outside of an old school building.
“Damn it Naruto! This is your fault!†The bald headed Matsuda yelled at the blond, wincing as his numerous bruises ached at the movement. Motohama and Issei nodded, wincing in sync, while levelling the uncaring teen a glare.
“Geeze, you guys are acting like you’re the only ones who got beat up…†A thoroughly bruised and battered Uzumaki Naruto gave the trio a withering glare.
“Besides, you perverts got what you deserved! Peeping on girls like that…†Shaking his head at his friend’s antics, and forcefully shoving aside the memories of his late mentor, he instantly felt the presence of someone watching them.
‘That Gremory girl again? What can she sense from Issei that I can’t?’ Idly he noticed said boy had locked eyes with the crimson haired devil.
Well, as long as she didn’t do anything to harm anyone, he was content enough to leave her alone for the most part. Picking a fight with a group of devils, especially ones with that much Demonic Energy might not be easy, especially since Kurama still hadn’t recovered.
‘Who’s not recovered brat?’ The Biju’s voice echoed within his mind.
‘You’re still having trouble getting your Chakra back under control.’ He replied blandly to irritated fox.
‘You of all people should know how much power I have. Fifteen years your father kept half of my power from me, and I had grown accustomed to my weakened state. Suddenly having my full power returned all at once… Of course it would run out of control!’
‘Yeah, I know. But still, if I tried anything against her, or the Student Council, I doubt I would be walking away without serious injury. Not unless I caught them off guard, anyway.’
“…I’d be fine with it, but I haven’t even seen anything! This is so…†Returning his attention to the conversation between the Trio, he noticed Issei trail of, as he made eye contact with the “Spyâ€.
“There was someone in the old School building?â€
“Yeah, it’s the club “building†for the Occult Research Club.†Naruto remarked off hand. He’d done a little digging, so he could figure out where the people with demonic energy gathered routinely, in case things went bad.
“That deep red hair sure looks nice…†Issei muttered in a daze, seeing his friends state, Motohama decided to explain.
“Rias Gremory†He began, bringing the other teen’s attention to him.
“99, 58, 90. She’s a Third year student and President of the Occult Research club.â€
“A club which consists of some of the most popular students in School. Kiba Yuuto, Toujou Koneko, Himejima Akeno, and of course the president herself, Rias Gremory.†Naruto interjected, marking of the members names with his fingers.
“You sure know a lot…†The glasses wearing pervert sent the blond an accusatory look.
“Of course! The trick to pulling off a good prank is preparation.†He proclaimed, puffing his chest out with pride.
“…Out of curiosity what, exactly, were you planning on doing to them?†Issei asked a trace of nervousness in his voice. Doing anything to any of those people would bring the wrath of the whole school on the blonds head and theirs too by virtue of being friends with him.
“Hmm? I was planning on sneaking in and replacing the shampoo in the bathroom with this green hair dye.†He responded, pulling a bottle out from his coat pocket.
“But since Issei seems to be rather fond of Miss Gremory’s hair, I’ll have to think of something else…†He sighed disappointedly, giving the bottle in his hand a forlorn look.
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“Ara ara, seems you had a rather close call…†Himejima Akeno commented to the Red haired girl, who was nervously checking her shampoo bottle.
“Indeed. I can understand why Sona complains about him so frequently.†She sighed, placing the bottle onto the desk in front of her.
“Just to be safe though, I think I’ll use the shower at home for the foreseeable future.†Placing her cheek in her hand, she turned her attention towards the chess board that was set up, and moved a pawn.
“Checkmate. Anyway, that boy just now… The one in the red t-shirt.†‘Hyudou Issei-kun.’
“Hmm? Second year, class B. His name was Hyudou, correct?†She asked, checking for confirmation from her Master.
“You can sense something?†Rias thought process was always somewhat different than her own, so she couldn’t figure out what her king saw in him. He was cute, in a little brother sort of way, but he was unimpressive for the most part. She couldn’t even sense a Sacred Gear in him, although she didn’t have Rias’ talent for such things.
“No, I could just be mistaken.†She lied; she’d also thought she was mistaken at first, which is why she had discreetly observed him. He had a Sacred Gear, of that she had no doubt, but which one was lost on her.
“Shall I have my familiar keep an eye on him?†She questioned, packing away the chess set.
“No, I already have my own on the task.â€
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“Man, what a crappy day…†Hyoudou Issei sighed, leaning against the rail of the over pass, lightly rubbing his bruises.
“If things keep up this sort of pace, my high school days will be over without touching a single breast.†All of his dreams and ambitions seemed so far away…
“U-Um, excuse me… Could you possibly be, Hyoudou Issei-Kun?†A cute sounding voice broke the melancholic teen from his brooding.
Immediately a surge of energy ran through the perverted boy, and he did his best to compose himself in order to give a better impression. Smiling, he turned to address the girl, only to feel his breath catch in his throat.
She was beautiful.
Issei found himself at a loss for words, unable to adequate describe the beauty that stood before, fidgeting nervously under his gaze.
“Uh, yeah that’s me... Can I help you Miss…?†He certainly didn’t recognise the personification of beauty speaking to him, nor could he think of any local school’s with that logo.
Actually, come to think of it, how did she even know his name?
“My name is Amano Yuuma. This may seem like a strange question but… Are you going out with anyone currently?†Those seven words blew all other thoughts from his mind, as a deep, heavy weight, seemed to settle on his shoulders.
‘So she’s here to make fun of me, huh?’ He thought self-decrepitatingly.
“Not right, no…†He responded, subtly diverting his eyes before he had to watch her laugh at his misfortune.
“Ah! That’s great! Would you maybe…†She paused, building up her courage,
“Like to go out with me then?†She asked, eyes shining up at him with innocence.
“Yes, of course!†He responded immediately, warnings, and advice from Naruto and his Parents completely banished from his mind at the prospect of someone so beautiful asking him out.
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“W-What the hell!?†“What Madness is this!?†Matsuda and Motohama exclaimed the following morning, upon seeing the last member of their trio turn up, with a beautiful girl happily chatting away with him.
“Ah, Matsuda! Motohama! How great to see you this morning.†Issei cheerfully greeted them, his grin eerily reminiscent of their prankster friend.
“Issei! Who is this beautiful woman, and why is she with you!?†The cheerful teen’s friends yelled, startling the dark haired girl, as she clung to Issei’s arm, burying her face in his shoulder.
Idly wrapping his arm around in a protective hug, Issei levelled a minor glare at his friends.
“This girl is Amano Yuuma.†A smirk made its way onto his face. He was going to savour this moment.
“And she’s my Girlfriend.â€
At that proclamation, the two perpetually horny teens froze up completely. The shock of hearing something that sounded so impossible, crashing their systems, and leaving them gaping at the two like a pair of goldfish.
“Ah, by the way, where’s Naruto? I was hoping I’d get to introduce Yuuma-Chan to him…†Issei asked, disappointment creeping into his tone.
“He said something about itching powder, the staff room and the student council before he ran off. He was also rubbing that bottle from yesterday rather fondly.†Motohama responded robotically, Matsuda nodding beside him, thinking about the way the prankster had taken off cackling gave them a headache anyway.
Meanwhile, the subject of their discussion had been captured before he could finish setting up the itching powder in the Teacher’s Lounge, much to his growing horror.
“Really, Uzumaki?†Venom dripping from her words, the Council President glared down at the captured student, who was futilely struggling against the rope, tying him to the chair.
“But green’s a good look for you! Honest!†He practically begged, flashing an award winning smile, causing the devil face to turn a darker red, and her glare top intensify. It took all of her considerable willpower, not to just blast him away with her demonic power.
Taking a deep breath, she tried to forcefully rein her temper in, and was at least partially successful. Pushing her glasses up her nose, allowing the light to reflect off them, hiding them, a bloodthirsty smile grew on the girl face, sending chill up the captured teens spine.
“Um, Kaichou?†Naruto asked nervously; sweat dripping down the back of his neck of his neck, as his instincts kicked in, warning him of danger.
“Since it seems regular punishments have no effect on you, perhaps it’s time to use a different approach.†A dark chuckle slipped out, causing Naruto to earnestly return to trying to escape his bindings.
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“Uzumaki!†A rage filled masculine voice yelled, causing the teen to stop putting the finishing touches on his latest prank. Seamlessly he ducked under the flying tackle of the Student Council Secretary, Genshirou Saji, causing him to crash painfully on the floor.
Quickly raising himself upright, the blond merely smirked at the groaning form of the Student Council member.
“Better luck next time, Mr Student Council Secretary.†Giving a quick mock salute, he spun on his heel in order to make his getaway, only to find his way blocked by the rest of the council.
“Good work, Saji," Souna Shitori complimented her underling, before turning her attentions to the mischievous blond with a scowl. “Now Uzumaki-san are you going to report to your detention willingly, or will we have to restrain you? Again.â€
“Aw, don’t tell me you’re still upset about that… Mahou-Kaichou?†Naruto responded, a wide grin stretching across his face, at the abject horror, and pure rage flashed across the president’s face as it practically glowed red at the name.
“…Restrain him,†she ground out, using all her formidable self-control to stop herself from throttling the infuriating student before her, even when her hands tightened into fists, and her knuckles turned white. The whisker faced teen had only been attending the Academy for three, almost four, months but in that short space of time, he’d quickly demolished the Student Council President’s patience.
“Ah, I’m afraid I’ll have to take a rain check on that…†He smirked, leaning against an open window. “I’ve got plans with my friends, maybe next time.†With a cheeky wave, he flipped himself out the window.
“Stop him!â€
“This is the second story!â€
“He’ll die!â€
Rushing towards the window, the council could only boggle at the blond, who was making a run for it.
“Come on, we can’t let him escape punishment again.†Spinning on her heel, the President ran towards the stairs, the other council members hot on her heels.
Meanwhile, “I didn’t even get to see anything!!†Hyoudou Issei yelled, as he and his two friends were chased by the enraged Kendo team, who had caught the trio peeping.
“Perverts!â€
“Trash!â€
“Scum!â€
“Die!â€
“Get out of the way!â€
“Eh?†Issei blinked, that last one had definitely been male. Familiar too…
“Eh!?†The perverted trio yelled, stumbling as Uzumaki Naruto shot past them at a speed a few athletes would be hard pressed to match, a good portion of the council on his tail.
“Damn it, just go away!â€
From his position on the ground, Issei sweat dropped.
‘Do your best Naruto…’ He gave mental words of encouragement to his friend, before an aura of malicious intent washed over him, and the other members of his trio.
“Don’t you think you should be more worried about yourselves?†Murayama, the Kendo club’s captain, called from behind, the edge in her voice making the results clear.
His head turned mechanically, to face one of the most terrifying sights he’d seen in his short life. The entire Kendo club had their shinai and bokutŠin their hands, their eyes completely shadowed, making their grins even more terrifying.
The Perverted Trio suddenly became intimately aware of the fact they had fallen over, and would be unable to get to their feet fast enough to escape the female’s wrath.
‘Damn you Naruto!’ Were their final coherent thoughts, before the pain drove all else from their minds.
A short while later, the perverted trio plus one, managed to escape, and arrive outside of an old school building.
“Damn it Naruto! This is your fault!†The bald headed Matsuda yelled at the blond, wincing as his numerous bruises ached at the movement. Motohama and Issei nodded, wincing in sync, while levelling the uncaring teen a glare.
“Geeze, you guys are acting like you’re the only ones who got beat up…†A thoroughly bruised and battered Uzumaki Naruto gave the trio a withering glare.
“Besides, you perverts got what you deserved! Peeping on girls like that…†Shaking his head at his friend’s antics, and forcefully shoving aside the memories of his late mentor, he instantly felt the presence of someone watching them.
‘That Gremory girl again? What can she sense from Issei that I can’t?’ Idly he noticed said boy had locked eyes with the crimson haired devil.
Well, as long as she didn’t do anything to harm anyone, he was content enough to leave her alone for the most part. Picking a fight with a group of devils, especially ones with that much Demonic Energy might not be easy, especially since Kurama still hadn’t recovered.
‘Who’s not recovered brat?’ The Biju’s voice echoed within his mind.
‘You’re still having trouble getting your Chakra back under control.’ He replied blandly to irritated fox.
‘You of all people should know how much power I have. Fifteen years your father kept half of my power from me, and I had grown accustomed to my weakened state. Suddenly having my full power returned all at once… Of course it would run out of control!’
‘Yeah, I know. But still, if I tried anything against her, or the Student Council, I doubt I would be walking away without serious injury. Not unless I caught them off guard, anyway.’
“…I’d be fine with it, but I haven’t even seen anything! This is so…†Returning his attention to the conversation between the Trio, he noticed Issei trail of, as he made eye contact with the “Spyâ€.
“There was someone in the old School building?â€
“Yeah, it’s the club “building†for the Occult Research Club.†Naruto remarked off hand. He’d done a little digging, so he could figure out where the people with demonic energy gathered routinely, in case things went bad.
“That deep red hair sure looks nice…†Issei muttered in a daze, seeing his friends state, Motohama decided to explain.
“Rias Gremory†He began, bringing the other teen’s attention to him.
“99, 58, 90. She’s a Third year student and President of the Occult Research club.â€
“A club which consists of some of the most popular students in School. Kiba Yuuto, Toujou Koneko, Himejima Akeno, and of course the president herself, Rias Gremory.†Naruto interjected, marking of the members names with his fingers.
“You sure know a lot…†The glasses wearing pervert sent the blond an accusatory look.
“Of course! The trick to pulling off a good prank is preparation.†He proclaimed, puffing his chest out with pride.
“…Out of curiosity what, exactly, were you planning on doing to them?†Issei asked a trace of nervousness in his voice. Doing anything to any of those people would bring the wrath of the whole school on the blonds head and theirs too by virtue of being friends with him.
“Hmm? I was planning on sneaking in and replacing the shampoo in the bathroom with this green hair dye.†He responded, pulling a bottle out from his coat pocket.
“But since Issei seems to be rather fond of Miss Gremory’s hair, I’ll have to think of something else…†He sighed disappointedly, giving the bottle in his hand a forlorn look.
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“Ara ara, seems you had a rather close call…†Himejima Akeno commented to the Red haired girl, who was nervously checking her shampoo bottle.
“Indeed. I can understand why Sona complains about him so frequently.†She sighed, placing the bottle onto the desk in front of her.
“Just to be safe though, I think I’ll use the shower at home for the foreseeable future.†Placing her cheek in her hand, she turned her attention towards the chess board that was set up, and moved a pawn.
“Checkmate. Anyway, that boy just now… The one in the red t-shirt.†‘Hyudou Issei-kun.’
“Hmm? Second year, class B. His name was Hyudou, correct?†She asked, checking for confirmation from her Master.
“You can sense something?†Rias thought process was always somewhat different than her own, so she couldn’t figure out what her king saw in him. He was cute, in a little brother sort of way, but he was unimpressive for the most part. She couldn’t even sense a Sacred Gear in him, although she didn’t have Rias’ talent for such things.
“No, I could just be mistaken.†She lied; she’d also thought she was mistaken at first, which is why she had discreetly observed him. He had a Sacred Gear, of that she had no doubt, but which one was lost on her.
“Shall I have my familiar keep an eye on him?†She questioned, packing away the chess set.
“No, I already have my own on the task.â€
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“Man, what a crappy day…†Hyoudou Issei sighed, leaning against the rail of the over pass, lightly rubbing his bruises.
“If things keep up this sort of pace, my high school days will be over without touching a single breast.†All of his dreams and ambitions seemed so far away…
“U-Um, excuse me… Could you possibly be, Hyoudou Issei-Kun?†A cute sounding voice broke the melancholic teen from his brooding.
Immediately a surge of energy ran through the perverted boy, and he did his best to compose himself in order to give a better impression. Smiling, he turned to address the girl, only to feel his breath catch in his throat.
She was beautiful.
Issei found himself at a loss for words, unable to adequate describe the beauty that stood before, fidgeting nervously under his gaze.
“Uh, yeah that’s me... Can I help you Miss…?†He certainly didn’t recognise the personification of beauty speaking to him, nor could he think of any local school’s with that logo.
Actually, come to think of it, how did she even know his name?
“My name is Amano Yuuma. This may seem like a strange question but… Are you going out with anyone currently?†Those seven words blew all other thoughts from his mind, as a deep, heavy weight, seemed to settle on his shoulders.
‘So she’s here to make fun of me, huh?’ He thought self-decrepitatingly.
“Not right, no…†He responded, subtly diverting his eyes before he had to watch her laugh at his misfortune.
“Ah! That’s great! Would you maybe…†She paused, building up her courage,
“Like to go out with me then?†She asked, eyes shining up at him with innocence.
“Yes, of course!†He responded immediately, warnings, and advice from Naruto and his Parents completely banished from his mind at the prospect of someone so beautiful asking him out.
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“W-What the hell!?†“What Madness is this!?†Matsuda and Motohama exclaimed the following morning, upon seeing the last member of their trio turn up, with a beautiful girl happily chatting away with him.
“Ah, Matsuda! Motohama! How great to see you this morning.†Issei cheerfully greeted them, his grin eerily reminiscent of their prankster friend.
“Issei! Who is this beautiful woman, and why is she with you!?†The cheerful teen’s friends yelled, startling the dark haired girl, as she clung to Issei’s arm, burying her face in his shoulder.
Idly wrapping his arm around in a protective hug, Issei levelled a minor glare at his friends.
“This girl is Amano Yuuma.†A smirk made its way onto his face. He was going to savour this moment.
“And she’s my Girlfriend.â€
At that proclamation, the two perpetually horny teens froze up completely. The shock of hearing something that sounded so impossible, crashing their systems, and leaving them gaping at the two like a pair of goldfish.
“Ah, by the way, where’s Naruto? I was hoping I’d get to introduce Yuuma-Chan to him…†Issei asked, disappointment creeping into his tone.
“He said something about itching powder, the staff room and the student council before he ran off. He was also rubbing that bottle from yesterday rather fondly.†Motohama responded robotically, Matsuda nodding beside him, thinking about the way the prankster had taken off cackling gave them a headache anyway.
Meanwhile, the subject of their discussion had been captured before he could finish setting up the itching powder in the Teacher’s Lounge, much to his growing horror.
“Really, Uzumaki?†Venom dripping from her words, the Council President glared down at the captured student, who was futilely struggling against the rope, tying him to the chair.
“But green’s a good look for you! Honest!†He practically begged, flashing an award winning smile, causing the devil face to turn a darker red, and her glare top intensify. It took all of her considerable willpower, not to just blast him away with her demonic power.
Taking a deep breath, she tried to forcefully rein her temper in, and was at least partially successful. Pushing her glasses up her nose, allowing the light to reflect off them, hiding them, a bloodthirsty smile grew on the girl face, sending chill up the captured teens spine.
“Um, Kaichou?†Naruto asked nervously; sweat dripping down the back of his neck of his neck, as his instincts kicked in, warning him of danger.
“Since it seems regular punishments have no effect on you, perhaps it’s time to use a different approach.†A dark chuckle slipped out, causing Naruto to earnestly return to trying to escape his bindings.
