@Without Remorse,
I'll pop in the other section and read that story by Lord Raa. Could use a bit of inspiration for more Kanako scenes.
Your guess is in the right ballpark. The whole "cursed doll" thing IS inspired by a manga. Not sure if it's the same one posted earlier but here's the link again,
<a href='http://www.batoto.net/comic/_/comics/ai-wa-noroi-no-nihon-ningyou-r6700' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>Ai wa Noroi no Nihon Ningyou</a>
Obviously there will be changes from the manga but ... anything more would be a spoiler. Sorry.
Keitaro's parents haven't been around for a long time. I'll put up a reminder to that fact in the next chapter or so.
That "useless info" makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. Thanks! :wub:
@EagleCeres,
Thanks for permission. I'm still trying to figure out how to squeeze some of those omakes in but at the very least you can be sure that I'm drawing a lot of inspiration from them!
Shinobu's already familar with magic. And while the regular populace don't talk much about it, the police know who to call when something really weird comes up. I thought about keeping it a secret, but it's just more trouble than it's worth for the story, IMO.
Motoko's just warring with herself about her feelings. Likewise for Keitaro. Though, he has the benefit of living with a female (sister) for years and knows how to behave himself. Not exactly the same situation for Motoko.
"updates on the fly" -> We just got lucky that we bumped into each other online. I was checking out the statistics for the link when I noticed someone click on it and you know the rest ... Hopefully, it will happen again more often.
@bespa,
Could you come in here and voice your thoughts? I can't force you, but I like to think that we get a more productive storyline that way. Regardless, I appreciate you pointing out mistakes in the chapter.
@everyone,
I've decided to make a few changes. Or rather corrections with the story. I'm going back and editing the earlier chapters to have Motoko refer to Tsuruko as "Aneue". And instead of "Coaching center" to "preparatory school". I was looking at chapter-1 earlier and frankly found it so horrible that I had to rewrite it. The plot is still the same, but expressed differently. Can I have your thoughts on it? Here's the link,
<a href='http://goo.gl/cFoik' target='_blank' rel='nofollow'>Chapter 1 :The Ronin (version 2)</a>
As for the original version, it's still up on FF.net (or check my signature). I'm a bit worried if I've taken the ...
interaction between Tsuruko & Motoko overboard with this second rewrite.
Also - does anyone remember the name of Motoko's sword? I can't recall any of their names.
Just went with a guess for now.
-chronodekar