Akamatsuverse Art Attack [LH]

Lord Raa

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#76
Art Attack

Art Attack


By Lord Raa


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Disclaim-me-do: There are no pies at the Nou Camp.


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Part 5


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The meal Tsuruko had treated Keitaro and Haruka to had been delicious, but expensive. Keitaro had seen the look on HarukaÆs face when sheÆd seen the total for the bill.

When heÆd tried to get a look at the figure, Tsuruko had waved him off.

ôI told you, Keitaro-san, this was an apology for my sisterÆs behaviour earlier.ö

ôBut still-ö The roninÆs protests were cut off by Haruka.

ôIf you still insist on paying for something, Keitaro, you could buy us a drink.ö

ôOk, itÆs the least I can do for you.ö

ôThen shall we move on?ö the swordswoman asked with a smile on her face.


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Back at the Inn, Naru was questioning KitsuneÆs logic.

ôI hate the concept of the æChristmas CakeÆ as much as the next woman, but that still doesnÆt mean that just because most men arenÆt interested in them, theyÆre going to become lesbian lovers, Kitsune-chan!ö the auburn-haired girl insisted.

ôOh, and what do you know about adult relationships, Naru-chan?ö Kitsune asked. ôYou canÆt seem to get beyond the childish æhitting the boy you likeÆ stage.ö

ôThatÆs not true!ö Naru insisted.

ôOh really, do you like Keitaro?ö

ôWellà Ià erràö

ôThen you donÆt mind if someone else goes out with him?ö

ôI wouldnÆt say thatàö the Toudai-bound girl said, suddenly finding her fingers rather interesting.

ôNot exactly disproving my point, Naru-chan, are you?ö Kitsune asked, a triumphant smirk on her face. ôStill, you donÆt just treat someone to a meal in a restaurant like AmaterasuÆs Garden on a whim.ö

ôYeah, but unless we can talk to Keitaro, Haruka-san or Tsuruko-san, weÆre not going to know why they went out.ö

ôDo you think Motoko-chan knows?ö the ash-blonde wondered aloud.

ôShe might, but sheÆs gone to bed,ö Naru added. She yawned herself. ôSpeaking of which, I think I might get an early night, too.ö

ôOk, see you tomorrow.ö

As she sat alone, Kitsune started to have a serious think about why Haruka, Keitaro and Tsuruko would be out together at a fancy restaurant. She hadnÆt picked up any hint that Haruka was a lesbian, but what did she know much about Tsuruko?

Tsuruko was MotokoÆs older sister, sheÆd been married and she was someone who intimidated Motoko.

It was hardly enough information to fill out a personality profile.

Besides, Tsuruko and Haruka were grown women. If they wanted to have such a relationship, it was their business and no-one elseÆs. But if they were having such a relationship, why would they bring Keitaro along?

What purpose would they have for bringing him along? There were other places in Tokyo for them to get to know each other better; places that didnÆt require a dress code and a small fortune to settle the bill.

So unless Tsuruko was asking for KeitaroÆs permission to date Haruka, that wasnÆt the reason for their dinner date.

The next possibility was that it was an apology for something. But this was the first time Tsuruko had come to visit Motoko at the Inn, at least as far as Kitsune knew. So what could Tsuruko be apologising for?

Well, perhaps it was something Motoko had done? But Keitaro never held a grudge against anyone; in fact heÆd started to smile at her again, despite the lies about blackmail!

NaruÆs suggestion that Tsuruko and Haruka were planning to kill Keitaro and split his inheritance was just so unlikely, it was laughable. Sure, Haruka smacked Keitaro around the head when he accidentally called her ôAunt Harukaö, but it wasnÆt even close to being in the same league of violence that Naru and Motoko had unleashed upon him.

That brought her to the final option: Tsuruko was interested in Keitaro. If Tsuruko was indeed single, why invite Haruka along? Keitaro wouldnÆt have tried anything improper with Tsuruko, and if he did, MotokoÆs tales of her sisterÆs martial prowess would have quickly put a stop to things.

The only reason to invite Haruka along was to have an omiai in the restaurant.

And now that she thought about it, Kitsune had recalled that Haruka thought that Keitaro was good husband material.

But all evidence pointed to today being the first time that Keitaro and Tsuruko had met. So that didnÆt make much sense to her.

Not that love ever made much sense to her. Some of the boyfriends her school friends had gone out with were proof enough of that.

Kitsune let out a loud yawn. Maybe there just wasnÆt an ulterior motive? There were people who took their friends out to dinner, after all. Not everyone had an agenda.


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Keitaro was trying to keep a respectful distance from Haruka and Tsuruko as they rode on the train. He thought that they were both attractive women, but felt that heÆd been riding his luck all evening. Experience had taught him that an incident was going to happen sooner or later. Luckily, nothing had happened in AmaterasuÆs Garden û heÆd even managed to keep his shirt clean.

No, something was going to happen soon, he could feel it in his gut.

That was why he kept both of his hands on the handle, in plain sight of his two companions.

The train pulled into the station, catching Haruka unprepared. She ended up leaning against Keitaro.

ôOh, sorry about that, Keitaro,ö she said. She looked down, and saw where heÆd caught her. æIf only his hand was just a little higheràÆ

Tsuruko, under the influence of the wine, looked on, feeling slightly envious. It had been a long time since sheÆd last been held by a man. The fact that it wasnÆt their stop put an idea in her head.

As the swordswoman watched Haruka right herself and smile at Keitaro, she repositioned herself so that she could fall against Keitaro the next time the train stopped.

æMaybe this time, his hand might catch him a bonusàÆ


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Lying on her bed, Motoko was thinking about her sisterÆs evening out with Keitaro and Haruka.

While at first glance it seemed unfair that she was being ignored, she understood her sisterÆs decision to leave her at home. It was something that she might have done in TsurukoÆs place.

In her defence, she hadnÆt meant to lie to her sister, it sort of just happened. A bit like how KitsuneÆs situation had resulted in her sitting on Keitaro while wearing nothing but an open kimono.

But her mind kept going over why Tsuruko would take Haruka and Keitaro out to a restaurant as fancy as AmaterasuÆs Garden.

The Tokyo metropolitan area was hardly lacking in eateries, so it wasnÆt a dearth of alternative options. Almost all of these alternates were cheaper, too, which fitted right in with KeitaroÆs modest tastes.

So it was either the simple fact that she was friends with the manager or it was an ulterior motive that made Tsuruko decide on AmaterasuÆs Garden.

While Tsuruko was capable of terrible acts, she wasnÆt the sort of person to concoct elaborate plans as part of a punishment or revenge.

Motoko let out a soft chuckle. ôI guess that itÆs really just a case of the simplest answer being the case.ö


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As the train pulled into the next stop, Keitaro was surprised to find himself somehow cushioning Tsuruko Aoyama from a fall.

ôOh, sorry, Keitaro-san,ö the swordswoman apologised. ôIÆm not normally this clumsy.ö

Haruka sighed softly. She could see what Tsuruko was doing, and she couldnÆt blame her for it. The thought of Keitaro holding her in his arms was becoming increasingly appealing. She glanced down to see that KeitaroÆs left hand was barely two centimetres above TsurukoÆs butt.

ôPerhaps we should skip the drinks if some of us are a little unsteady?ö the smoker suggested as Tsuruko woman righted herself. ôIt has been a long day, after all.ö

ôYeah, IÆm a little tired,ö Keitaro agreed.

ôYes, perhaps itÆs for the best,ö Tsuruko nodded.

The next stop was the one for the Hinata Sou, and the trio disembarked. The two women cast glances at KeitaroÆs backside, idly wondering if how much theyÆd enjoy giving it a quick squeeze.

It was then that Tsuruko made a decision. She liked Keitaro enough that she was going to pursue him, etiquette be damned!

As they exited the station, Tsuruko gave Haruka a look that the smoker couldnÆt decipher. Was she seeking approval? Was it a challenge? An invitation?

Haruka looked away, coughing to compose herself. ôAnyway, letÆs get going.ö


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Over the last few days, Kitsune had spent a fair amount of time thinking about her situation at the Hinata Sou. If she had just lost her job, things would be ok in that she could probably put off paying the rent until she got a new job. If she still had a job, she was sure that sheÆd be able to work out a payment plan with Keitaro for the rent arrears.

However, the fact of the matter was that she had no income and rent arrears of three months. Fortunately, Keitaro had agreed to let her stay rent free until she found another job if she helped with the cooking and cleaning.

It had been a second choice option, one that she had found forced upon her.

The first option was that Kitsune got married to Keitaro in order to avoid paying any more rent or board. It had started off sensibly enough, but in order to speed things up, a series of lies had been told and Keitaro had seen through them a lot sooner than sheÆd expected.

But why pick Keitaro? There were plenty of rich men in Tokyo; she could have been a kept woman.

But would she have accepted being the mistress of an older businessman?

No, she definitely didnÆt want to be touched by a balding Salaryman in the stationery cupboard after working hours. Older men wereà well, she couldnÆt say that they were creepy or uninteresting as she did have a crush on an older man when she was younger.

ôSetaàö the ash-blonde said as she looked up at her ceiling. æThereÆs a name I havenÆt thought about for a while.Æ

Seta Noriyasu: archaeologist, terrible driver, unreliable and former boyfriend of Haruka Urashima.

Why had she been attracted to him? She had no interest in old bones and broken pottery, and heÆd often stated that he wasnÆt in it for the ancient treasures.

He had a car, well a van, but so did Kentaro. That was another name she hadnÆt thought about for a while.

Kitsune quickly returned her attention to the reason for her crush on Seta. His unreliable nature had been the reason why Haruka had broken it off with him and Haruka was pretty forgiving.

She smiled, thinking about all the good times sheÆd had with Haruka: a few practical jokes and some serious teasing of their other friends. Kitsune did look up to Haruka; the smoker was so much more worldly, sophisticated and independent after all.

It was then that KitsuneÆs eyes opened wide.

ôDidàdid I like Seta because Haruka did?ö

Sure, sheÆd joked about finding where HarukaÆs soft spot for Keitaro was, but that didnÆt mean she wanted to sleep with her. Did it?

Well, maybe a few years ago, when Haruka and Seta were dating, it might have. But that was just a combination of a girlÆs hero worship and a girl-crush. It was a phase, part of growing up.

But the ash-blondeÆs mind flitted back to how forgiving the smoker was. A few slaps and stern words had cut short the teasing and games, but Haruka had always gone along with them until she felt that they had stopped being funny.

If Haruka hadnÆt liked it, she would have told her not to do it again; just like how sheÆd broken it off with Seta and how sheÆd told Su not to take parts from her fridge without telling her.

ôHang on,ö Kitsune closed her eyes tightly as she tried to recall the first discussion about the marriage plan with Haruka. ôDidnÆt Haruka-san sound a bit different when she mentioned getting married to Keitaro?ö

Now that she thought about it, Kitsune was beginning to be convinced that Haruka had certain feelings with regards to Keitaro. Feelings that hinted that there could have been company in the bedroom if cards had been played right.

ôCrapà if only IÆd told Haruka-san earlier, I could have made this work. And then I could have found out about KeitaroÆs jobàö


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T.L

Well-Known Member
#77
Art Attack

Those bumps certainly need ironing out.
I would have thought that Ivor Biggun would have appreciated a nice grope on the train, for research purposes only of course.
Finery's Keitaro seems to be the dominate persona after the merging of the two stories.
I know its only early days of the merging and rewrite of the two. Art Attacks Keitaro just felt stronger rather than the apathetic ( thats the way it reads to me. ) version of Finery's.

Awaiting new material to see where you are going.

T/L
 

PCHeintz72

The Sentient Fanfic Search Engine mk II
#78
Art Attack

Without Remorse said:
Those bumps certainly need ironing out.
I would have thought that Ivor Biggun would have appreciated a nice grope on the train, for research purposes only of course.
Finery's Keitaro seems to be the dominate persona after the merging of the two stories.
I know its only early days of the merging and rewrite of the two. Art Attacks Keitaro just felt stronger rather than the apathetic ( thats the way it reads to me. ) version of Finery's.

Awaiting new material to see where you are going.

T/L
Keitaro may have *wrote* and *drew* stories of that nature. That does not mean his active everyday life is that personality... This is not 'Type K'

That would be like noting Motoko's stories are a reflection of her life. Or for that matter... that the fan fiction authors here on this forum live out their lives as their SI's doe (for those that write SI's)... I doubt it.
 

T.L

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Art Attack

I not suggesting that Type K lives here. Nor is Keitaro like that at home.
But "Ivor Biggun" obviously needs research material, and IF it is being offered even if he doesn't know that, Then why not take the opportunity?
I still think, there is not enough information on the Art Attack version of Keitaro to make that distinction.

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Lord Raa

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Art Attack

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The trio of diners were approaching HarukaÆs teashop.

ôIà donÆt think I can make it up the hill. Forgive me, but could I possibly use your toilet, Haruka-san?ö Tsuruko asked with a look of concentration on her face.

ôOf course,ö the smoker nodded as she pulled out her keys. She unlocked the door and added, ôUp the stairs, first door on the left.ö

ôThank you.ö

When they were alone, Haruka turned to Keitaro. ôKeitaro, I think thereÆs something you should know.ö

ôOh?ö

ôYes, I donÆt know if you picked up on it earlier, but Tsuruko-san likes you.ö

ôWell, she did take us out to dinner,ö Keitaro shrugged.

ôTreating someone to dinner at one of the most expensive restaurants in Tokyo is not something you do if youÆre feeling ambivalent about them,ö Haruka countered.

ôWell, she said it was an apology for Motoko-chan,ö the ronin insisted. ôBesides why should she be interested in someone like me?ö

ôYouÆre a likeable person, Keitaro.ö

ôObviously not that likeable û IÆve never had a girlfriend.ö

ôYou would have if things had been different,ö Haruka muttered. She looked Keitaro in the eye. ôSo you donÆt like Tsuruko-san? Is that what youÆre saying?ö

ôThatÆs not it, Haruka-san. SheÆs a beautiful woman of wealth and taste, IÆll bet that she needs her sword to keep all the men who are interested in her away,ö Keitaro said in his usual earnest tone. ôShe deserves someone better than me.ö

ôWhat if she doesnÆt want better? What if she wants you?ö the smoker countered. ôWhat then? Are you going to hurt her feelings by rejecting her?ö

The ronin sighed. He realised he was caught between the devil and the deep blue sea.

He didnÆt want to hurt anyone, least of all someone who he was sure could cut him into sashimi in the blink of an eye, but the way things happened around him. He was sure that he was going to hurt Tsuruko more if she was in a relationship with him.

ôOr are you suggesting that women who like you have bad taste?ö

Keitaro blinked. Women liked him? ôWho else likes me?ö

Haruka shook her head. ôSometimes, you donÆt see the wood for the trees, Keitaro.ö

The bespectacled Urashima considered those words. Sure, Shinobu liked him, but that was like the time he lusted after that idol singer when he was 13. It was just a teenagerÆs crush, nothing more. Not to mention what would have happened if he did take things further with Shinobuà

MotokoÆs opinion of him had been raised to the point where sheÆd lied about being engaged to him. That wouldnÆt have happened when he first arrived, but it was far from the point where they could be dating.

Kaolla Su was Kaolla Su, who knew what she was really thinking.

Naru couldnÆt seem to make her mind up.

Mutsumi was a sweet girl, but she seemed to love everybody.

That left Kitsune. Kitsune was a difficult subject at the moment. Sure, she was very attractive and she was smart and fun, but she had also lied to him. It meant that he couldnÆt be sure what to trust about her any more.

As Keitaro scratched his head, thinking about the situation and who could be interested in him, Tsuruko returned.

ôThatÆs much better, thank you, Haruka-san,ö the swordswoman smiled, clearly more relaxed. ôI apologise for imposing on you further, Keitaro-san, but would it be all right if I stayed for another night or two?ö

ôYes, of course, but can I ask why?ö

ôIt feels slightly embarrassing to say it like this, but IÆd like to get to know my sisterÆs friends better. The way she described them in her letters made them sound rather interesting, however I canÆt take her opinion entirely seriously after the less than complimentary way she portrayed you,ö Tsuruko explained. ôIÆve only known you for a few hours, but youÆre not the monstrous creature that I was led to expect.ö

Keitaro laughed nervously.

ôYes, MotokoÆs attitudes towards men has clouded her judgement on more than one occasion,ö Haruka nodded. ôWhat did you have in mind, Tsuruko-san?ö

ôSomething similar to this evening, only a little more informal; a meal at the Inn with everyone there,ö the swordswoman replied. She bowed her head apologetically. ôI apologise for the assumption that you would agree to provide a large meal on such short notice. There are limits to what a guest can expect from a host.ö

ôTrue, but if youÆre willing to help with the grocery bill and wine list, I think itÆll be ok, donÆt you, Keitaro?ö the smoker asked.

ôOf course, IÆll let the others know in the morning,ö Keitaro nodded happily. ôAre you ready to head back? ItÆs getting late and I donÆt want to disturb the others.ö

ôThank you, Keitaro-san, I appreciate your kindness,ö Tsuruko smiled as she prepared to finish climbing the hill.


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After returning to the Inn, Keitaro walked Tsuruko to MotokoÆs room.

ôIÆm sorry, but I didnÆt have enough time to get you your own room organised, Tsuruko-san.ö

ôItÆs alright, Keitaro-san. IÆm sure that my sister wonÆt be too put out with me sleeping in her room,ö the swordswoman smiled. ôIf she does, well I could always s-ö

The door to MotokoÆs room opened and a sleepy, but concerned looking face appeared.

ôAneue, youÆre back.ö

ôYes, and IÆm staying for another couple of days, Motoko-han,ö Tsuruko calmly informed her. ôThatÆs not going to be a problem, is it?ö

ôN-noàö

ôGood,ö the older sister smiled. She turned to face Keitaro. ôThank you for the pleasant evening, Keitaro-san. I look forward to tomorrow evening, where I will finally get the chance to properly get to know everyone.ö

ôT-tomorrow evening?ö Motoko repeated. ôBut thatÆsàö

ôBut thatÆs what, Motoko?ö Keitaro asked.

ôWeà well, Naru-sempai, Shinobu-chan, Su and I were going to visit Kobe tomorrow. We were going to be gone for a few days.ö

ôThatÆs tomorrow?ö the ronin asked. ôThatÆs come around quick.ö

ôYes.ö

ôIf you donÆt mind my asking, what attracts you to Kobe, Motoko-han?ö

ôShinobu-chan and Su have a project for their history class, and Naru-sempai said that she wanted to do some shopping,ö Motoko explained.

ôOh, I see,ö the older sister nodded. æIt might work out better this wayàÆ ôWell, I shall see you off tomorrow, but I might have to leave for home before you and your friends return. But I will get to know them, Motoko-han, you canÆt hide them from me forever, you know!ö

ôIÆm not trying to hide from you, Aneue, itÆs, well, itÆs just unfortunate timing, thatÆs all.ö

Tsuruko caught her sisterÆs slip of the tongue, but said nothing. ôThese things happened, Motoko-han, you shouldnÆt worry about it.ö

ôWell, I shall let you two get some sleep. IÆll see you in the morning, Tsuruko-san, Motoko-chan.ö

ôGood night, Keitaro-san.ö

ôGood night, Keitaro.ö


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Kitsune heard footsteps approaching.

æThatÆs probably Keitaro,Æ she mused. æI wonder how his evening wentàÆ

The idea of confirming that it was Keitaro and checking up on him was tempting, but she was already in bed.

Her warm and comfortable bed.

æNo, I donÆt need to know that badly,Æ she thought with a yawn. æBesides, IÆve got to do the laundry tomorrow while ShinobuÆs in Kobe.Æ


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Lord Raa

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Tsuruko watched her sister and friends leave for the train station. There had been a brief introduction at breakfast, but the need for a quick departure had prevented a proper chance to get to know each other.

æIt is a shame,Æ the widow thought sadly, æMotoko-hanÆs friends seem nice.Æ

She turned her attention to Kitsune, who had just started to hang a basket of fresh laundry out to dry. The ash-blondeÆs technique caused Tsuruko to realise something. æSheÆs not used to chores. Motoko-hanÆs description of Konno-san was of someone playful and slovenly. WhatÆs made her change?Æ

A glum looking Keitaro emerged from his room.

ôIs something the matter, Keitaro-san?ö

ôMy part time job isnÆt going as well as it was,ö the ronin admitted.

ôWould you like to talk about it?ö Tsuruko asked.

Keitaro shrugged. ôI donÆt knowàö

ôDespite what Motoko-han might have told you, I can be a very sympathetic person.ö

ôI appreciate the offer, but IÆve got to get through this myself. I donÆt want the others to know what I do.ö

The swordswoman was intrigued. Motoko had mentioned that Keitaro had a second job, but she didnÆt have any details to share.

Kitsune had finished hanging out the laundry and approached the two. ôIs something wrong, Keitaro? YouÆre looking a bit down.ö

ôItÆs nothing, IÆm just having a bit of difficulty with my job,ö Keitaro answered. He looked around, clearly uncomfortable with discussing the situation.

ôYou know, you never really told us about your jobàö the short-haired girl teased. ôPerhaps we could help you?ö

ôI donÆt know,ö the ronin said. ôIÆm going to the kitchen, do either of you want a drink?ö

ôPlease could I have some tea, Keitaro-san?ö the swordswoman asked politely.

ôIf youÆre putting the kettle on, IÆll have some tea, too,ö Kitsune smiled.

As Keitaro left earshot, Tsuruko turned to Kitsune. ôWhat do you know about Keitaro-sanÆs job, Konno-san?ö

ôPlease, call me æKitsuneÆ,ö the ash-blonde insisted. ôAs for KeitaroÆs job, well, we know itÆs some kind of writing gig. He uses a pseudonym, but thatÆs about it. He must have some reason for keeping it a secret, butàö

ôIt would be rude to dig deeper,ö the swordswoman nodded, not quite getting the exact reason for KitsuneÆs discretion. ôBut still, you must be curious as to what he does?ö

ôIt wasnÆt so bad at first,ö Kitsune replied.

ôBut?ö

ôBut a few weeks ago, curiosity did start to get the better of us. We havenÆt ransacked his room or anything, but we did ask a few questions. ThatÆs how we found out about his pseudonym. æBiggunÆ, I think.ö

ôInteresting name,ö Tsuruko commented. ôI donÆt suppose you think Keitaro-san is some sort of manga artist, do you?ö

ôItÆs possible, I guess, but he hasnÆt got the time to do it full time. HeÆs trying to get into Toudai.ö


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Sighing as he put the kettle on, Keitaro couldnÆt shake the feeling that things were going to change very soon.

His run of inspiration had been good, but the reception to his latest idea hadnÆt been quite what he had expected: despite the usual favourable reaction to his art style, the editorial staff did not like the story.

They had felt it a step down from his usual standard, that it was lacking something.

ôMaybe IÆve just run out of writing talent?ö he asked with a rhetorical sigh. ôJust as well, I donÆt know how I managed to keep everyone from finding out for this long.ö

ôFinding what out, Keitaro?ö Kitsune asked as she entered the kitchen with Tsuruko beside her.

ôNothing, IÆm just being silly,ö the ronin insisted.

ôItÆs clear that something is bothering you, Keitaro-san,ö Tsuruko said firmly. ôWould you like to talk about it?ö

ôNot really,ö Keitaro said, his discomfort becoming clear as day.

ôOh, donÆt be like that, Keitaro,ö the ash-blonde pouted. ôWe might get the idea that you donÆt like usàö

The artist closed his eyes and shook his head. ôIf you really want to know, IÆve had something rejected at my job. And if I donÆt get something to replace it, IÆm in danger of being reassigned.ö

ôReassigned to what, Keitaro-san?ö

ôIà itÆs hard to say without telling you all the details,ö Keitaro replied.

ôThen tell us the details, Keitaro,ö Kitsune smiled.

ôI canÆt do that, Kitsune.ö

The sound of the kettle boiling cut off the discussion for the moment. After filling the teapot, Keitaro looked up to see that the two women standing not two metres away from him were still looking for answers.

ôWhy canÆt you tell us the details, Keitaro?ö Kitsune demanded. ôYou already said that itÆs nothing illegal that youÆre doing; so why all the secrecy?ö

ôBecause I know what youÆll say and do if you knew,ö Keitaro shot back. ôYouÆd tease me and Naru and Motoko would get the wrong idea and try to hurt me.ö

ôWhat about me, Keitaro-san?ö Tsuruko asked. ôWhat do you think I would say or do if I was to find out?ö

ôYouÆd also misunderstand things, Tsuruko-san.ö

ôPerhaps if you were to explain things, then I, we, might be able to help you. Or at least, not get the wrong end of the stick,ö the swordswoman smiled.

ôButàö Keitaro sighed. ôFine, if you promise not to tell anyone, IÆll tell you what my job is.ö

ôI give you my word that I will not tell anyone, Keitaro-san.ö

ôMy lips are sealed, Keitaro.ö

The ronin took a deep breath. ôI donÆt know if you know, but I like to draw a bit when I was younger. Someone decided that I was good enough to draw things professionally.

ôAnd because of this, I used to draw for a writing team. The team broke up some years ago. I donÆt know the details, I was just a kid and when they said that I wasnÆt going to be drawing those stories, I didnÆt ask. To be honest, it was a little weird for me to be illustrating those stories.ö

ôWho did you draw for, Keitaro-san?ö

ôA writing team called æRed DragonÆ. I wasnÆt the only artist, and I only did one or two volumes in their anthology series.ö

ôRed Dragonà the name doesnÆt ring a bell,ö Kitsune mused. ôSo what did you draw for them?ö

ôThis is why I asked for your promise not to tell anyone,ö Keitaro said as he poured three cups of tea. ôI illustrated a volume of æTales of RibaldryÆ. I also contributed a story and the artwork for a couple of stories in another of the publisherÆs magazines.ö

Tsuruko blinked. ôIÆm sorry, Keitaro-san, but æTales of RibaldryÆ sounds like itÆs an adults-only publication.ö

Keitaro laughed nervously. ôYeahàö

Kitsune giggled. ôI guess Naru-chan was right when she said you were a pervert, Keitaroàö

ôItÆs not what you think, Kitsune, I mean that was before I came here to the Inn.ö

ôSo what is the problem with your current job, Keitaro-san?ö

ôPart of my job now includes writing and illustrating my own stories. My last submission didnÆt go down well,ö the ronin explained. ôIÆd worked really hard on it, but the editors felt it was ôa bit too much like a Comiket doujinö and rejected it.ö

ôWhy did they say that?ö Tsuruko asked.

ôI took what I thought were romantic comedy tropes and tried something original,ö Keitaro answered. ôHowever, it was decided that I was just writing a parody of some popular titles. I was, sort of, but obviously I made the characters too unrelatable.ö

ôOh, but still, IÆm sure that youÆll come up with something else that theyÆll like, Keitaro-san,ö the swordswoman smiled reassuringly.

ôI have two weeks to give them a proof-read draft of a 20 page manga story and I donÆt know what to write.ö

ôTwo weeks? ThatÆs a little bit harsh, isnÆt it?ö Kitsune asked.

ôI had the rejection note two weeks ago, but then certain events happened which distracted me,ö the artist said, handing over two cups of tea.

ôAhàö the ash-blonde said, knowing full well what Keitaro meant by that.

It wasnÆt like Kitsune had wanted to sabotage KeitaroÆs career, in fact she had no idea about this rejection. It was just that her own situation had started to go horribly wrong at the same time. Keitaro would still have a place to stay and there would be food in his belly.

The same couldnÆt have been said for Kitsune.

ôWhat was the last story of yours that had been well received?ö Tsuruko asked. ôPerhaps you could go back to something along those lines?ö

ôFreeter Deluxe? I suppose, but I donÆt like retreading old stories. Besides, itÆs not like IÆve ever come up with something like Journey to the West that can be told and retold in all sorts of settings,ö Keitaro replied. ôSo, now you know why IÆm feeling a bit down.ö

The trio drank their tea in silence for several minutes before Keitaro started to notice TsurukoÆs body language.

He had been too nervous to pay attention to it last night, but he was starting to get an inkling as to what she liked and what she was looking for in a man.

ôIs something the matter, Keitaro-san?ö the widow asked after she realised that she was being casually, but closely observed.

ôIà Sorry, Tsuruko-san, I didnÆt mean to make you feel uncomfortable, I justàö the ronin took a deep breath. ôI tend to notice certain things about people. Sometimes, I can get a feel for what they like. Sometimes it takes a while to realise what it is, but sometimes I can get a handle on things pretty quickly.ö

ôOh, really? And what does this gut instinct of yours tell you about me?ö

ôPromise you wonÆt hit me?ö

ôI promise I will not hit you, Keitaro-san,ö Tsuruko said solemnly.

ôVariety and adaptability,ö Keitaro said, shying away to avoid righteous wrath.

ôWhat is that supposed to mean, Keitaro?ö Kitsune asked. ôVariety and adaptability are words youÆd use to describe an actor.ö

The artist took a deep breath. ôWhat I mean by that is that I have this feeling that Tsuruko-san is willing to try a variety of things and that can mean adapting to different roles.ö

ôWhat sort of role might I be willing to adapt to, Keitaro-san?ö

ôRemember that you promised not to hit me, but things like the traditionally male role of initiator.ö


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MTing

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Hahaha. The "don't hit me" thing is so Keitaro. The story looks like it starting to meld together, at least slightly. The only question I have about this chapter is that, if Keitaro did indeed have a job going through high school, wouldn't his family at least know about it? I mean, if Kanako thought that her brother had a secret, she would have dug in for it, even as a little girl.
 

PCHeintz72

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ôRemember that you promised not to hit me, but things like the traditionally male role of initiator.ö
Damn, can read a girl that well when he turns the ability on, yet still does not even realize when someone likes him...


Still... he likely was in the right to ask to not be hit after a line like that, as it could easily be misinterpreted.

I'm actually curious onwhat their reactions are to be... perhaps embarrasement and and even perhaps shame on Tsurukos part, and jelousy on Kitsunes, or something else for a surprise, after all this is you we are talking about.
 

Prince Charon

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Its good. Looking forward to Tsuruko's response.
 

T.L

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#85
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Good to see that iron starting to work.
I'm also awaiting Tsuruko's response.
 

PCHeintz72

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æIÆve been classed as a FreeteràÆ
If she does not know what it is about, how can she know that, or if it is even good or not.
 

Prince Charon

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Is 'Freeter' short for 'freeloader', or something else (and if the latter, what)?
 

FinalMax

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Prince Charon said:
Is 'Freeter' short for 'freeloader', or something else (and if the latter, what)?
It's a term used to describe someone who goes around doing lots of part-time work. Sometimes depicted as drifters as well.
 

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PCHeintz72 said:
æIÆve been classed as a FreeteràÆ
If she does not know what it is about, how can she know that, or if it is even good or not.
Kitsune was first thinking about how Motoko was the inspiration for Miko-Miko Revolution.

The is hit her that she might have been the inspiration for Freeter Deluxe.

In this case, I'm using Freeter as a term for part-time freelancer. I know it's not the classical definition of the term, but I'd like to think that it's the best option for this fictional story.


If that makes any sense.
 

PCHeintz72

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But... doesn't this create a bit of a timeline issue.

I thought the stuff he did previously under the penname was before he was at the hinata... thus it would be prior to meeting any of the gang...

So I guess... whom are those stories *really* based off of if not the Hinata gang.


Or am I wrong, and this is the 3rd series he has done since the meeting with the negotiator and the other two are after the gals...
 

Lord Raa

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PCHeintz72 said:
But... doesn't this create a bit of a timeline issue.

I thought the stuff he did previously under the penname was before he was at the hinata... thus it would be prior to meeting any of the gang...

So I guess... whom are those stories *really* based off of if not the Hinata gang.


Or am I wrong, and this is the 3rd series he has done since the meeting with the negotiator and the other two are after the gals...
Kitsune's flirting in chapter 1 was the inspiration for Freeter Deluxe.

Miko-Miko Revolution was one of the first stories he wrote when he got his new contract.
 

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Disclaim-me-do: Suffer not the mutant, unless theyÆve got something to offer, that is. Like shovel-hands or beer-bottle opening belly buttons. Or free standing genitalia.


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Part 6


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Tsuruko Aoyama sat in silence as she considered the words Keitaro had spoken.

He was right, but how could he know that she was, well, not quite desperate, but certainly willing to try almost anything to keep a suitable man?

She certainly hadnÆt mentioned what she was looking for in a man, only that there were certain aspects of Keitaro that reminded her of Akira.

Kitsune was also impressed with KeitaroÆs ability to read desires and sexual tastes. æHeÆs only known Tsuruko-san for a few hours. Somehow I doubt Tsuruko-san is the sort to discuss bedroom behaviour at a place like AmaterasuÆs Garden. I know Haruka isnÆt.Æ

Keitaro was beginning to feel uncomfortable at the silence. æCrap, IÆve upset Tsuruko-san.Æ

ôWhat else have you written, Keitaro-san?ö Tsuruko asked, changing the topic. ôI mean the stories that were well received.ö

ôI think Miko-Miko Revolution and Freeter Deluxe, were the most popular.ö

The widow followed up. ôWhat were they about?ö

ôMiko-Miko was about a shrine maiden who finds her life turned upside down by the arrival of ronin,ö Keitaro answered, his cheeks turning red.

Kitsune chuckled, clearly seeing where the inspiration had come from. Then, realisation struck her. æIÆve been classed as a FreeteràÆ

ôI see,ö Tsuruko nodded in understanding. æKeitaro-sanÆs been using his life with his friends here as inspiration for his stories. But if he feels that heÆs run out of inspiration, maybe I could help him out?Æ

Before Keitaro could stammer out an apology, the swordswoman spoke up. ôKeitaro-san, about your rejected story; what was different about it from your more successful work?ö

ôWhat?ö the ronin asked, taken aback by this unexpected attitude. HeÆd been bracing himself to a torrent of accusations and violence; not what appeared to be support.

Kitsune was also surprised by TsurukoÆs question. She had felt a little betrayed by the way Keitaro had used her and Motoko for inspiration, but couldnÆt really complain, given her own precarious situation.

æThough, perhaps I could use KeitaroÆs job as an alternative to doing the chores?Æ

ôI mean that there must have been something in Miko-Miko Revolution and Freeter Deluxe that is missing from your new idea. Or perhaps your new idea has something in it that your editorial staff feels disrupts the story in some way?ö Tsuruko clarified.

ôOh,ö the ronin replied before taking a sip of his tea. ôWell, I guess that the new story has a different focus. I mean, the main character is a young man, rather than a young woman, like my more successful work. I donÆt know why, but Hajime, the main character, just doesnÆt have the same appeal as the others I wrote about.ö

ôPerhaps you made him too generic, too much of an everyman?ö Kitsune suggested. ôMaybe your editors feel the blank canvas approach doesnÆt always work?ö

ôThat makes sense,ö Keitaro nodded. ôI donÆt think that IÆm going to be able to rewrite everything in time for the deadline though.ö

Tsuruko looked surprised by this. ôReally?ö

ôYeah, itÆs not as easy as æfind and replaceÆ; you need to change how people interact,ö the artist replied. He wet his lips with tea before explaining further. ôFor example, when I first met your sister, I know that she would have treated me differently if I was a martial artist who regularly placed in the local tournaments. IÆm not saying she would have fallen in love with me, but she would have seen me in a different light because IÆm a skilled martial artist.

ôMaybe sheÆs willing to help me with training? Maybe she develops a crush on me? Maybe sheÆs threatened because thereÆs a man whoÆs skilled at fighting under the same roof? But letÆs say, for the sake of argument, that MotokoÆs attitude to me was positive; a mutual respect because of the effort we both put in.

ôBecause of this, she would be more understanding about my attempts to get into Toudai; she sees that IÆm juggling a time consuming interest, a promise and my academic studies. This positive attitude is transmitted to the other residents, and instead of the hostility I faced when I first arrived, IÆm made welcome and IÆm able to enter Toudai on my next attempt. Quite the difference, donÆt you think?ö

ôYes, a marked difference,ö Tsuruko nodded.

ôHostility?ö Kitsune repeated. The look she received from Keitaro made her follow up question of æthatÆs a bit harsh, isnÆt it?Æ seem a little foolish. ôYou do have a point, Keitaro. So, what will you do now?ö

ôI donÆt know, Kitsune, IÆve got a couple of other ideas that I could work on, but IÆd spent quite some time on this. It seems a shame to just abandon it. Do you know what I mean?ö

æI think I do, Keitaro-san, I think I do,Æ the swordswoman thought with a smile.


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Kitsune decided that she needed to talk to a friend about what she had learned that morning. Someone mature and responsible, so that ruled out Naru and Motoko.

No, that left Haruka as the only option.

ôHaruka-san,ö she said, waiting for an opportune moment to strike.

ôWhat is it, Kitsune?ö

ôI found out about KeitaroÆs part time job.ö

ôOh?ö Haruka asked, looking at her friend quizzically.

ôIt turns out that Keitaro has got some artistic skills thatÆs heÆs putting to good use,ö the ash-blonde explained.

ôSo heÆs drawing again?ö

ôYeah,ö Kitsune nodded. ôWait, æagainÆ? You know about what KeitaroÆs been drawing?ö

ôYou seem shocked, Kitsune,ö the smoker smirked before explaining. ôOf course I know, IÆm family and I get on well with Keitaro.ö

ôWell, why didnÆt you say anything earlier?ö

ôWhat do you think Naru and Motoko would have done if they knew about KeitaroÆs work? TheyÆd still be cleaning the blood off the walls.ö

Kitsune winced. Keitaro was a likeable enough person, but his accidents and unfortunate timing often infuriated her friends. The knowledge that Keitaro drew pictures of an erotic nature would have pushed them over the edge.

ôSo, what do I do about this?ö

ôIf youÆre planning to blackmail Keitaro into letting you stay for free, you can forget it. Like I just said, Keitaro is family. YouÆve caused him enough of a headache lately, so if you do try anything, I will have to take desperate measuresàö Haruka trailed off for effect.

ôIÆm not planning to blackmail Keitaro, Haruka, itÆs just, well, I was thinking that if IÆd known about his job earlier, I could have offered to help in exchange for rent and a few yen, thatÆs all,ö Kitsune explained.

ôOh. Well, I suppose that could have worked. What help did you have in mind?ö

The voluptuous woman casually drew attention to her breasts. ôIÆm sure that I could come up with something to assist Keitaroàö

ôI hate to tell you the bad news, Kitsune, but IÆm not sure that Keitaro really needs a model for his artwork.ö

ôW-what? Are you sure about that?ö

Haruka smiled knowingly. ôKeitaroÆs work is good enough to be sold professionally; do you really think his women have man-faces and bowling balls under their shirts?ö

ôWell, no, but still, maybe I could help inspire him?ö Kitsune suggested.

ôInspiration can come from many sources,ö the smoker agreed, though her expression was one of wistful remembrance rather than true concession.

æWhat arenÆt you telling me, Haruka?Æ the ash-blonde wondered. ôActually, I think I might have been the inspiration for one of his stories.ö

ôI saw some similarities between you and Megumi Kanno from Freeter Deluxe.ö

ôWait, so youÆve read KeitaroÆs work?ö Kitsune demanded.

ôWho do you think gave him his pen-name?ö Haruka smirked.

ôBiggun?ö

ôThe full name is æIvor BiggunÆ. ItÆs a pun; in English, æIvor BiggunÆ sounds a little like æIÆve a big oneÆ if the speaker has a certain accent,ö the smoker explained.

A thought occurred to Kitsune. ôA big what? Is Keitaroà you know?ö

ôYes, in fact, Keitaro has half a dozen two-metre long prehensile penises. You donÆt forget an encounter with tentacles, I can tell you!ö

ôYouÆre mocking me, arenÆt you?ö

ôHey look, Buzz, thereÆs an alien!ö Haruka deadpanned. ôYouÆre the one who sleeps in the room next to him, Kitsune; you would have a better idea than me.ö

ôYou make it sound like I should be sneaking into his room to peep on him when heÆs naked, Haruka,ö Kitsune replied.

ôIf you had been peeping on him, you could have used it as part of your scheme to get out of paying the rent,ö the spinster said as a casual aside. ôKeitaro doesnÆt pick up on subtle hints, so catching you in the act would have shown him that you liked him.ö


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Tsuruko knocked on the door to KeitaroÆs room.

ôCome in,ö the ronin said.

ôKeitaro-san, thereÆs some I wanted to ask you,ö the swordswoman said as she approached where the young man was seated.

ôOh?ö Keitaro asked. He looked up and noticed that the normally calm and collected woman seemed to have a pink tinge to her cheeks. ôIs everything alright, Tsuruko-san?ö

ôIÆm fine,ö Tsuruko insisted as she took up a place opposite her host. She cleared her throat. ôErr, Keitaro-san, there is something that I wanted to ask you. I like to see people doing their best, and sometimes people need a little help to bring the best out of them. IÆd like to help you with your work.ö

The ronin was lost for words; especially when Tsuruko followed up with, ôI donÆt suppose you could let me read one of your stories?ö

ôIàö

ôItÆs just that Kitsune-san seems to think that æMiko-Miko RevolutionÆ might be interesting.ö

When it became clear that Tsuruko wasnÆt going to let the matter drop, Keitaro sighed in defeat. ôOk, but promise me you wonÆt hit me after youÆve read it?ö

ôI promise that I shall not hit you after I have read your story, Keitaro-san.ö Although the widow said with a calm, composed voice, she couldnÆt help but feel attraction towards Keitaro.

ôOk, but you promised!ö the artist said as he retrieved a copy of the story from his bookcase and handed it over.


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DhampyrX2

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Poor Kitsune is losing in a contest she's not even fully aware that she's part of. Although part of me wonders if Tsuruko will ask Motoko her opinion of Tsuruko pursuin Keitaro? Even with the mess Motoko has made of things her sister has to realize that Motoko has some interest in him as well.
 

kevinasher

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DhampyrX2 said:
Poor Kitsune is losing in a contest she's not even fully aware that she's part of. Although part of me wonders if Tsuruko will ask Motoko her opinion of Tsuruko pursuin Keitaro? Even with the mess Motoko has made of things her sister has to realize that Motoko has some interest in him as well.
Not to mention that Tsuruko would find it to be a suitable punishment for Motoko to watch as her sister makes moves on the man she had finally started to feel attracted to. I don't know, however, how much Tsuruko would try to actively salt the wounds Motoko was recovering from; namely having to accept the fact that she likes Keitaro in the first place...
 

DhampyrX2

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I would see it more as preparing Motoko to avoid those exact hurt feelings rather than salting the wounds. Kind of a "I won't pursue him if you intend to," warning and Motoko struggling between Tsuruko's potential happiness and her own conflicted feelings. Honestly I don't think Motoko has it in her to deny Tsuruko at this point.
 

PCHeintz72

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Hmmm... lots of innuendo and potential for misunderstanding in that Haruka/Kitsune talk. nicely done.

ôKeitaro-san, thereÆs some I wanted to ask you,ö
'some' s/b 'something'


ôI promise that I shall not hit you after I have read your story, Keitaro-san.ö
Bah... Keitaro did not ask the right thing, should have asked just not to be hit, she can hit him during, or far later, and not go against what she promised.

ôOk, but you promised!ö the artist said as he retrieved a copy of the story from his bookcase and handed it over.
How has he managed to keep those away from Suu.... I'm pretty sure I remember a scene where Suu searches his magazines.

Although part of me wonders if Tsuruko will ask Motoko her opinion of Tsuruko pursuin Keitaro? Even with the mess Motoko has made of things her sister has to realize that Motoko has some interest in him as well.
Somehow, I doubt Tsuruko would go to Motoko for insight or approval... after all, Tsuruko should still be put out at being lied to.. Also, the deception Motoko attempted proves had it been real Motoko herself would not think of going to Tsuruko for thoughts on 'her man' before taking the plunge.
 

Prince Charon

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This is good. Feel a bit sorry for Kitsune, though.
 

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Tsuruko sat out on the porch, basking in the mid-morning sunshine as she read the story Keitaro had written and illustrated. The first few chapters were setting up the blend of historical fiction and mythology.

It was only with the appearance of the mysterious ronin that things got interesting.

And that was not just because of steamy fantasy Minako indulged in after she saw his fighting prowess.

ôOh my,ö the swordswoman murmured as she turned page after page of KeitaroÆs erotic novella.

Before Tsuruko knew it, Keitaro was calling her name to let her know it was lunch time.

ôOh, sorry, Keitaro-san, I got engrossed in your book.ö

The bespectacled young man laughed nervously.

ôI mean, the way you described MotokoÆs desiresàö

ôMinako,ö Keitaro corrected, a drop of sweat trickling down his cheek.

ôPlease, Keitaro-san, itÆs clear that my sister was the inspiration for Minako Kageyama and her situation,ö the widow said, casting a half-lidded gaze at him. ôSo, how did you get Motoko-han to open up to you?ö

ôIà What?ö

ôHow did you get my sister to talk to you about her desires? ItÆs clear that you know what makes her excited.ö

ôI never talked to her about it. I mean, what would she do if she found out about my job? It took ages for her to tolerate me as her landlord, sheÆs not going to be the sort of person who opens up about what sort of man she likes,ö Keitaro replied.

ôSo how did you find out about the sort of man that my sister likes?ö Tsuruko asked, genuinely curious. ôWas it your gift?ö

ôYes. I-ö

ôLunch is ready!ö Kitsune called out, interrupting Keitaro.

ôDonÆt worry, Keitaro-san, IÆm not going to tell my sister that she was the basis for an erotic novella.ö

ôT-thank you, Tsuruko-san.ö

Tsuruko smiled as she followed Keitaro to where Kitsune was serving up the meal. ôAlthough, I think that we might have to discuss your characterisation of the older sister, Torikoàö

Keitaro swallowed nervously. ôB-but sheÆs only mentioned in passingàö

ôI know, but doesnÆt she deserve her own story?ö

The ronin started to sweat profusely. ôIàö

ôThere you are, IÆm getting hungry!ö Kitsune chided as she handed out the plates of food.

ôSorry, Kitsune, Iàö

ôItÆs my fault, Kitsune-san, I was discussing something with Keitaro-san,ö the widow said as she took her place. ôIt can wait until after weÆve eaten.ö


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