Naruto Children of the Fox

Mageohki

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#76
Good snipplet, but there are a few errors here and there.
I'd be pot, if I pointed them out.

A.
 

Innortal

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#77
Never once letting anyone see if it bothered him that the villageÆs Jinchuuriki.
Not sure what you're trying to say here.
 

Matdeception

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#78
Not sure what you're trying to say here.
Fairly obvious.

Never once letting anyone see if it bothered him that the villages Jinchuuriki had unknowingly knocked up his daughter.
Or something to that like effect.

No beta or anything.
And Gmusick2k if ya need a Beta, lemme know. I could certainly use the projects to get my own juices flowing.
 

Nanya

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#79
There is one thing...

You seemed to have Maeko a boy at first, then switched to a girl.
 

Matdeception

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#80
You seemed to have Maeko a boy at first, then switched to a girl.
Very true.

The young child, Maeko, dreading the consequence of being caught by his mother caught the corner of the door and made a sharp ninety degree angle, heading into the main room. His little feet almost tripped over themselves but he immediately righted himself.
Genma shook his head at the kids dexterity. Only two years old and he could see even at this early an age the girl was going to be something remarkable when she grew up.

Not even a second after the two year old girl came careening around the corner, his younger sister, Mai Shiaranui, came around hot on her heals.
Maeko is pretty much listed as a girl after that first sentence onward.
 

Gmusick2k

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#81
Yeah, just threw this out there for ideas and comments. The premise for this snippet at first was that one of Maeko's brothers was visitng as well and thats where the brother came in. I erased some parts and just started over.

Haven't sent to a beta cause Im still writing out parts. Probabaly two more till I close the chapter and send it off.
 

Matdeception

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#82
Something I noticed when I was re-reading the entire thread and came across your list of knocked up hookers.

Tsunade
Naoko
Shizune
Yuugao
Kurenai
Anko
Sakura
Ino
Hinata
Tenten
Ayame
Hana
Suzume (Academy teacher)
Tsubaki (Mizuki's old fiance')
Temari
3 Random Female Villagers

And a big maybe (Yugito)
Okay, you list quiet a few women here having the kids.

Tsunade/Naoko I'll count as one person. So that's One.

Shizune had a single kid apparently. That's two.

Mai had a single kid apparently as well. So that's Three.

Kurenai, Anko, Sakura, Ino, Hinata, Tenten, Ayama, Sizume, Tsubaki, Temari, and Two random Villagers are unaccounted for, but let's all assume they have one child each. So that makes twelve more children, for a total of 15.

This is Barring Yugito since we haven't gotten any idea/answer about her.

Now you must be asking yourself just *why* I mentioned this in the first place. Lemme alleviate that burden.

ôLook. I know you want to protect me but youÆre going about it the wrong way. Maeko came to me in the worst way imaginable, but I donÆt fault Naruto for it. He was as much a pawn as we were and even now I doubt he even knows it. Meanwhile IÆve had two years to grow use to the idea. So before you run off trying to get holy retribution on him think about this. There are over 30 kids heÆs fathered and heæs only sixteen years old. ThatÆs punishment enough.ö
OVER thirty kids fathered?! We'll assume thirty one for now.

Okay, given the informaion provided above, we have Tsunade/Noako with one, Shizune with one, and Mai with one.

We have at the very list twenty eight kids unaccounted for here and only twelve confirmed women (13 if Yugito as well) to split up between them!

That requires all of them to have twins, and at least two of them with triplets! Four of them having triplets if Yugito isn't included.

That's just to be average! I mean, holy shit! What are the fucking odds of this? No wait, I don't want to know, I'm just gonna assume I'm missing something, cause god damn this can't be possible...

And if it is, damn, Naruto's gonna be in for pure hell.

Hahaha. Better him then me, tho.
 

Ike

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#83
Well, first off, there are actually 18 women on that list.....after combining Tsunade and Naoko, you decided to leave Yugao and Hana off of it, too.

So, assuming, instead, that there are 17 women (discounting Naoko for whatever reason...must have been something I missed), and besides Mai (and Shizune...That might have been in a previous snippet that I'm forgetting, if you are referencing it), that leaves 15 women.

No triplets necessary, but almost everyone would need twins.
 

Matdeception

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#84
Well, first off, there are actually 18 women on that list.....after combining Tsunade and Naoko, you decided to leave Yugao and Hana off of it, too.

So, assuming, instead, that there are 17 women (discounting Naoko for whatever reason...must have been something I missed), and besides Mai (and Shizune...That might have been in a previous snippet that I'm forgetting, if you are referencing it), that leaves 15 women.

No triplets necessary, but almost everyone would need twins.
Whoops, musta missed Yuugo and Hana (I was scrolling down/typing/reading their names) my bad.

I count Naoko and Tsunade as one person for an obvious reason, and it pains me to have to point this out to you Ike. Naoko stole one of Tsunade's eggs and impregnated herself. Tsunade didn't go through any pregancy.

So yeah, One child to Naoko/Tsunade. One for Shizune. One for Mai, leaving us with 14 women, and 28 children (It's 'over' thirty, so assuming it's at least 31) to divide among all of the. That's two per woman.

Yeah...
 

Gmusick2k

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#85
Yeah well that list is kinda old now. I can't manage to even stay on track with my own ideas. I get an idea, and just keep revising it. Just how I am :huh.: So sorry for the mix-up. This is the list as of today.

24 women in the end
(17/24)

Tsunade/Akagi Naoko
Shizune
Yuugao
Yuuhi Kurenai
Mitarashi Anko
Haruno Sakura
Yamanaka Ino
Hyuuga Hinata
Tenten
Ichiraku Ayame
Inuzaka Hana
Suzume (Academy teacher)
Tsubaki (Mizuki's old fiance')
Temari
Shiranui Mai (Fatal Fury)
Majikina Mina (Samurai Showdown V)
Taki (Soul Calibur)
 

Innortal

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#86
And then you have Random Kunoichi #1 and so forth. For some of them, they may be mothers as well as their daughters. And that is assuming that no other parent had a different egg inside them. It would be a bit too much to think that Akagi somehow came across Uchiha eggs and implanted them into someone.
 

Ike

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#87
Gmusick2k said:
Yeah well that list is kinda old now. I can't manage to even stay on track with my own ideas. I get an idea, and just keep revising it. Just how I am :huh.: So sorry for the mix-up. This is the list as of today.

24 women in the end
(17/24)

Tsunade/Akagi Naoko
Shizune
Yuugao
Yuuhi Kurenai
Mitarashi Anko
Haruno Sakura
Yamanaka Ino
Hyuuga Hinata
Tenten
Ichiraku Ayame
Inuzaka Hana
Suzume (Academy teacher)
Tsubaki (Mizuki's old fiance')
Temari
Shiranui Mai (Fatal Fury)
Majikina Mina (Samurai Showdown V)
Taki (Soul Calibur)
I would honestly advise against using large amounts (and in this case, I consider 3 a large amount) of crossover gals for the sole reason of adding more kids, and showcasing more babes. It's just gonna make it a lot harder for ya to manage everything, and seems rather gratuitous.

Frankly, I think just leaving canon Naruto girls and like a villager or two, and just giving them all multiple births (perhaps the girls own chakra interacted with the Kyuubi chakra that exits within Naruto's sperm, and caused a lot of eggs to split off into twins and such)....the kind of interaction between, say, "Bastard made me deal with twins!"!Ino is much more entertaining than "Yeah, you don't know me"!Crossover-character with a child.
 

Gmusick2k

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#88
Yeah, and that was my original intent. But when you have 42 women and only a got 15-18 make it thats a lot of death to factor in. The abortions can be included yeah but I dont see it being that many in the end. There are other factors to include but I cant imagine the tally being 20+ women losing their kids.

I may be wrong, so Im open for ideas.
 

zerohour

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#89
You could have some carry them to term, then give them over to Konoha.
 

Gmusick2k

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#90
Thought about that at one time and may have to go back to it. But where would they go? Tsunade wouldnt just let anyone get possession of them. I know the major clans wouldnt mind getting them but with all the canon clans covered almost that would just be adding another kid to that family. And I'm trying to keep each woman and kid as unique as possible. A seemingly crazy goal with so many women involved but oh well.
 

Cuchullain

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#91
Instead of using yugito, who i think would be to difficult for
Konoha to have captured alive, why not use Tayuya?

After the fight with Temari she is picked up by a medic squad
and taken to the village for interogation, to make sure she stays
alive during the questioning the bring in Naoko who impregnates her
Tayuya sees this as her chace to leave a cell alive and decides to keep
the baby.

Thoughts?
 

Gmusick2k

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#93
Not bad, not bad at all. In fact Tayuya might be the next snippet for chapter 1. Wasn't planning on doing Yugito though. Like others pointed out tying to tie her into the story was going to take some work.
 

Innortal

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#94
Besides, that would hint about Tayuya needing a reason to have survived, and a major character overhall.
 

Prince Charon

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#95
Interesting. Mommy!Tayuya FTW! I wonder If she'll swear less, after the baby is born.

Also, wondering who would get twins/triplets. Hana, perhaps?

Good snippet.

Moar soon, pleez!
 

fitzgerald

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#96
OMAKE:

[From Prolouge]

Tsunade was not going to leave anything to chance.

'I'm sure you all have questions and they will be answered. You are not going to like the answers to them, that is a promise, but let me finish speaking and then if you still have questions, ask.'

'At one point in the past few months each one of you has visited Naoko Akagi, or Head of Staff in Konoha hospital, for what you thought were going to be normal check-ups. Nothing of the sort was done.'

'Each one of you were impregnated with a sperm sample.'

The quiet was once again shattered but she would not be detered. Taking a deep breath Tsunade surged ahead, clapping her hands together loud enough to cause a small boom inside the room. The noise was loud enough to instantly bring the room to silence.

Eyes narrowed in annoyance, Tsaunde continued speaking. 'The entire purpose behind this was to track the evolution of bloodlines and more specifically genes. That if a catalyst.......

There was a small voice from the crowd that spoke up and asked, 'Who is the father?'

Tsunade sighed, getting more annoyed by the second, but this interruption allowed her to slice to the root of their concerns and deal with the following problems.

'Uzumaki Naruto.'

[End Snip]

Tsuande was expecting utter shock, chaos, and mayhem to erupt following Naruto's name. She was not expecting what happened next.

"Alright I managed to last eight hours with the kid and I'll be damned if I'm loosing him to any of you" came a determined shout from the crowd.

Blinking at this Tsuande suddenly got an inkling of why Akagi had marked Anko down as one of four in the control group. This got confirmed moments later when Hinata and Ayama stood up.

"Naruto-kuns mine!" was the cry from both teenagers as they stood up.

Tsuande could only twitch an eyebrow as she looked down at three women currently carrying Naruto's children conceived the old fashioned way.

Tsuande searched the crowd for Yuuhi Kurenai's younger sister Makoto who was simply sitting there red faced for a quiet moment before leaping up and asking "Which one of you three taught him the French Flipper Trick? Because I owe you a really big favour for that. I was worn out after four hours of absolute great sex after I grabbed him stepping out of Anko's apartment."

Anko's shit eating grin just got wider at that "So it was you who grabbed him after he left my apartment. Makoto-chan I always knew you were the smarter one of the Yuuhi sisters. You can pay me back in Dango honey. "

Palming her face Tsuande watched the crowd of civilian woman, Leaf Kunoichi, daughter of the Yondaime Kazekage and a kunoichi prisioner from Sound stop and consider this news. By any account Naruto wore out two kunoichi with twelve hours of nonstop great sex and he was going on a training journey with Jiraiya. He should be a master by the time he got back.

It was Shizune that finally broke her, after all Naruto was Tsuande's little brother in everything but blood, there was just some things you really didn't want to know.

"So we'll be drawing up a schedule to share Naruto out then working on the assumption of twelve hours a day. Tsuande-sama do you mind me pulling out the white board here, we've got a complex scheduling problem to work out."
 

elric

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#97
fitzgerald said:
OMAKE:

[From Prolouge]

Tsunade was not going to leave anything to chance.

'I'm sure you all have questions and they will be answered. You are not going to like the answers to them, that is a promise, but let me finish speaking and then if you still have questions, ask.'

'At one point in the past few months each one of you has visited Naoko Akagi, or Head of Staff in Konoha hospital, for what you thought were going to be normal check-ups. Nothing of the sort was done.'

'Each one of you were impregnated with a sperm sample.'

The quiet was once again shattered but she would not be detered. Taking a deep breath Tsunade surged ahead, clapping her hands together loud enough to cause a small boom inside the room. The noise was loud enough to instantly bring the room to silence.

Eyes narrowed in annoyance, Tsaunde continued speaking. 'The entire purpose behind this was to track the evolution of bloodlines and more specifically genes. That if a catalyst.......

There was a small voice from the crowd that spoke up and asked, 'Who is the father?'

Tsunade sighed, getting more annoyed by the second, but this interruption allowed her to slice to the root of their concerns and deal with the following problems.

'Uzumaki Naruto.'

[End Snip]

Tsuande was expecting utter shock, chaos, and mayhem to erupt following Naruto's name. She was not expecting what happened next.

"Alright I managed to last eight hours with the kid and I'll be damned if I'm loosing him to any of you" came a determined shout from the crowd.

Blinking at this Tsuande suddenly got an inkling of why Akagi had marked Anko down as one of four in the control group. This got confirmed moments later when Hinata and Ayama stood up.

"Naruto-kuns mine!" was the cry from both teenagers as they stood up.

Tsuande could only twitch an eyebrow as she looked down at three women currently carrying Naruto's children conceived the old fashioned way.

Tsuande searched the crowd for Yuuhi Kurenai's younger sister Makoto who was simply sitting there red faced for a quiet moment before leaping up and asking "Which one of you three taught him the French Flipper Trick? Because I owe you a really big favour for that. I was worn out after four hours of absolute great sex after I grabbed him stepping out of Anko's apartment."

Anko's shit eating grin just got wider at that "So it was you who grabbed him after he left my apartment. Makoto-chan I always knew you were the smarter one of the Yuuhi sisters. You can pay me back in Dango honey. "

Palming her face Tsuande watched the crowd of civilian woman, Leaf Kunoichi, daughter of the Yondaime Kazekage and a kunoichi prisioner from Sound stop and consider this news. By any account Naruto wore out two kunoichi with twelve hours of nonstop great sex and he was going on a training journey with Jiraiya. He should be a master by the time he got back.

It was Shizune that finally broke her, after all Naruto was Tsuande's little brother in everything but blood, there was just some things you really didn't want to know.

"So we'll be drawing up a schedule to share Naruto out then working on the assumption of twelve hours a day. Tsuande-sama do you mind me pulling out the white board here, we've got a complex scheduling problem to work out."
:rofl: :rofl:
 

fitzgerald

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#98
Another Omake:

Collecting the Swimmers

Naoko Akagi smiled as she watched the subject grin happily at her proclamation of his physical health. It was time to collect her samples.

"Now I know this may seem unusual but I need you to fill these specimen containers up Naruto-kun" Naoko said smiling happily at how easy this was.

"Eh. Eh. With what?" Naruto asked slightly confused.

"Sperm samples" Naoko said straight faced "Whenever you masturbate over the next week I want you to put it into these containers and then secure the lids."

A red faced Naruto stammered out "But thats. Thats. Thats perverted."

"Not at all Naruto-kun" Naoko said straight faced "Masturbation is perfectly natural. As for the large number of sample containers we only ask this of the best Shinobi. You are going to become Hokage one day right?"

"I'm going to be the best Hokage ever" Naruto declared on reflex.

"In that case I'm sure you'll surpass the Niidaime and fill the rest of these up" Naoko answered cheerfully passing Naruto a box.

The challenge had been set and as always Naruto rose up to it "I'll have them all filled in a week on my word as a Shinobi!"

"Of course Naruto-kun. Just remember to have them dropped off at my office" Naoko answered happily, this was going to be even easier than she had thought.

[Four Days Later]

Naoko was surprised when she noticed the box of containers containing Naruto's sperm sitting on her desk when she came into the office. Each was filled to the brim and properly sealed. Naruto had even filled in the date and time with kanji in his rough hand each one had been filled.

Forget her initial hope of collecting enough samples to impregnate twelve women, she could easily due up to a hundred. Fifty would make a good sample though. Saving the other doses for higher priority targets on the second round would be the smart thing to do. Naoko grinned, the Fourths Legacy was certainly proving fruitful.
 
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