Harry Potter Harry Potter Fanfic Updates
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Should go in the Restricted Forum, not here.
Anyways, I just realised Ruskbyte hasn't updated or published a new fic in just about 5 years! Sad. That guy could write a wicked twisted Harry Potter fic. I think Evil Be Thou My Good may hold the most amount of reviews on FFN for a single chapter story.
Anyways, I just realised Ruskbyte hasn't updated or published a new fic in just about 5 years! Sad. That guy could write a wicked twisted Harry Potter fic. I think Evil Be Thou My Good may hold the most amount of reviews on FFN for a single chapter story.
One: This is NSFW (Not Safe For Work) material that should not be posted outside of the Restricted Forum section.
Two: This is extraordinarily poorly written. The spelling and grammar is bad to the point where just looking at it is painful. You use run-on sentences, to the point where there are only three full-stops in the entire fragment (and one of them doesn't have a space between it and the first word of the next sentence,) and the average length of your sentences is 90 words (where 60 is generally considered the absolute maximum.) You continuously misspelt one character's names wrong, didn't capitalise another's, and you did not use a single apostrophe to indicate the possessive of a noun.
Spelling and grammar are of vital importance in Creative Writing. It doesn't matter if you've got the most amazing idea for a story in your head if you cannot convey it properly.
Two: This is extraordinarily poorly written. The spelling and grammar is bad to the point where just looking at it is painful. You use run-on sentences, to the point where there are only three full-stops in the entire fragment (and one of them doesn't have a space between it and the first word of the next sentence,) and the average length of your sentences is 90 words (where 60 is generally considered the absolute maximum.) You continuously misspelt one character's names wrong, didn't capitalise another's, and you did not use a single apostrophe to indicate the possessive of a noun.
Spelling and grammar are of vital importance in Creative Writing. It doesn't matter if you've got the most amazing idea for a story in your head if you cannot convey it properly.
Dear Order chapter 21. Now all that's left is the epilogue.
Harry Potter: Junior Inquisitor has updated to chapter 35.
It's not that Dumbledore is evil, I never really have an issue with that.
It's more that Dumbledore is cartoonishly evil where his decades-old schemes with multifaceted layers and layers of plans get foiled by a single 15-year-old. I know we rail on Perfect Lionheart and with good reason but at least his Dumbledore was nigh-immortal and from what little I could stomach to read basically was going to require lots of time travel hax to kill permanently.
It's more that Dumbledore is cartoonishly evil where his decades-old schemes with multifaceted layers and layers of plans get foiled by a single 15-year-old. I know we rail on Perfect Lionheart and with good reason but at least his Dumbledore was nigh-immortal and from what little I could stomach to read basically was going to require lots of time travel hax to kill permanently.
PL's Dumbasadoor (because... he was being foiled by a kid, not because i have something against Dubledore) was that, a really good master manipulator without pesky morals and ethics, a villian, but not wholly evil not completely stupid, he had the mind, the resources and was virtually immortal, annoying to read, true, but was not pathetic, nor cartoonish mono or bidimensional character.
