Golden Arms,
A new review/comment has been submitted to your story.
Story: A Death in the Life of Sasuke Uchiha
Chapter: 3
From: Jariel (
http://www.fanfiction.net/u/809663/ )
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First of all a compliment as the rest of the review will no doubt be the
focus. You've got my favorite sort of writing style down: only writing scenes
that have a purpose. Superfluous details and scenes that bod the story down
ruin the enjoyment of a story for me. And well done on keeping a time loop
character as still the same personality in cannon.
Secondly, the plot. I was horrified. I'm not one for the nitty gritty sort of
thing so that probably had something to do with it. Unfortunately I can
totally see the various things that happen to Sasuke here happening in a real
ninja village eg Interrogation not being wimpified for the eyes of little kids
and powerful ninja *gasp* being hard for the main character to defeat(now I
can't unsee it).
Also your interrogation scene with Kaskashi and Ibiki at various points have
definitely put me off reading any fanfics that have rose colored view of
shinobi. I just can't see Kakashi being ready to defy the Hokage to keep
Sasuke alive should he return form Sound (as the cliche goes) especially after
he dumped Sasuke in the hands of Ibiki. That's not really the best thing to
tell an author, `you've just put me off the random you wrote for with the
content of your story'. However congratulations on writing a story that has
profoundly affected one of your readers. In the five years of fandom I've only
found three other stories that really affected me.?
p.s please have something nice happen or at least let him figure out the time
loops so he can have fun Sasuke style. I feel really sorry for the guy.
p.p.s horrified, absolutely horrified.